@ DeathlySilent: this is an improvement from your last comic. Your lines are pretty messy on some parts so maybe clean it up a little. Walls are kind of bare in the setting. I figure there should be some kind of advert/ poster here and there. Keep up the good work.
@ Xin: This time the story didn't seem as interesting to me, and it looks like you didn't get to finish. Probably busy with life and stuff, I can understand. Better luck finishing the next time.
Good luck on your next comics both of you.
Death, I actually like this one better then the last. It seems to end a bit abrubtly and pointlessly, though, which is a shared flaw with your last. Also, remember that people have teeth and stuff in their mouths.
Xin, I dont have much to say... its unfinished and rapidly dropping, so there's not much here.
angieness:
Try now, you SHOULD be able to upload. I did try to warn people in the tourney thread a bunch to never upload unless they're uploading the whole thing. If you can't get the pages in email them to Toast@entervoid.com
I found out there might be a way to upload your images, I believe you need to set up your scanned image pixel down a notch.
OK, lots to be worked on here.
Silent: First off, remember that not every comic panel need be a close up shot and a 3/4 angle of the character, while it is good for scenes with lots of talking on a calm level, but you really need to work in things like establishing shots and know when to zoom out when things change. Other than that, this looked half finished, and there could of been a lot more to this comic if you ask me.
Xin: Seems you too didn't finish up nice and properly, I will admit that this comic seems a lot more interesting than the last one, but again, not finished.
Even vote from me, I cannot chose between the two.
Try now, you SHOULD be able to upload. I did try to warn people in the tourney thread a bunch to never upload unless they're uploading the whole thing. If you can't get the pages in email them to Toast@entervoid.com
Deathsilent, I feel like this is a whole different thing from your first comic. The style and tone is vastly different and this comic is more like how I expected Ms. Clean to be.
May go more indepth later when I'm not falling half asleep, but its a pity you guys couldn't finish, what you have here is a promise of something great.
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