omg greg i loved it! i can't wait to see the next comic you do, all the stuff you do is so lively and fun :D
i admit i squealed at the radiogreg plug
wish this wasn't a default win though ;n;
Good Job Hey!!!!
Good story telling i like the use of backgrounds, I'm looking forward to your future battles when you get more time to draw and create.
The main critique is work on your line weight, it's something I'm working on.
Damn Zoos, if youda had a few more days to really spiff that up, it might have been straight 10s from me! What I'm saying is you are good and I am jee-louse.
OH NO. not another default!
Zoos, Very fun. I love the toned lookl, maybe you could have cleaned out the blue line before you uploaded it though? It gives it a kind of messy feel.
Poor Pico. What a crappy day.
thanks guys
i'm gonna try that toning advice, maybe keep the backgrounds black and white tone while giving the characters their own flair
i'll give it a shot, thanks!
AAAUGH! DEFAULTS!
Greg: Awesome comic dude, nice use of pacing and build up, you just need to clean shit up more often, and if you're going to use those red tones, use them a bit more in a comic like this, otherwise it'll look outta place. So far, you're the man to beat in this tournament, keep going dude!
okay you would have won anyway woah
I WISH I WAS HOME NORMALLY THIS WEEK SO I COULD GIVE YOU A FAIR BATTLE, I mean your side is awesome so you'd win, but I feel bad for defaulting. :C
As for critique, uh. Just clean up those pencil lines like Angie said. That's really all I have to say, because everything else is eerily perfect. One day I hope to be JUST AS AWESOME AS YOU, BRO.
Loved it, hilarious timing-- especially the panel about art school. Whether I survive this round or not, I want to fight you one day.
As for crits, dunno...the tones were a really nice touch, I would only suggest that since you gave R a reddish tone, maybe Pico could have been given a yellowish tone. That way, the panels where pico gets stepped on and kicked into the VCPD can be read just a tad more clearly.
Rock on.
EXCUSES
Ok seriously I'll crit this now to make up for padding your comments with ridiculousness.
I think that the toning really helped give some depth and more clarity to your work, I think you should keep practicing with it. I think you may have to start digitally lettering your pages because while your handwriting gives the text character, I found it hard to read sometimes. The other big thing you should work on is post production work. Make sure that you clean up those pencil lines before you tone, it'll bring your quality up more. I think it was an overall enjoyable comic, just work on those issues for now.
its okay pico's exoskeletal transfer into humanoid or some shit makes him safe I GUESS I HAVE NO IDEA HE IS PROBABLY HURT AND NEEDS MEDICAL ATTENTION
aw Jax sucks you couldnt submit but i know how shit goes, i hope you submit to beyond battle!
thanks for the words guys, i'll try to step up my toning game next round
BUT FOR ALL WE KNOW HE COULD HAVE GOTTEN SUCKED INTO A LOW FLYING AIRPLANE BECAUSE OF HIS SCARF! Pico watched The Incredibles before this so he's okay.
Pico this is why when you are a scarf wearer of VOID, you keep your scarf on. YOU KNOW HOW MUCH OF THAT COULD HAVE BEEN AVOIDED!?
AWESOME comic though dude, I was cracking up at the end of it. I love your art style, it has a lot of stylistic elements that I tend to be drawn towards anyway. You rock dude.
I am here to disappoint you all by saying I have to end my place in the tournament by default. In Mexico I've had little time to myself and less on a computer. With no scanner access it also means no rushed comic either. I may just extend the story I had laid out in a Beyond Battle to continue R's story when I return to the US.
By the way, I've no scanner this week and about half of next (voting week). This means an all digital comic from me this time. :X
GREG, YOU'RE GOING TO WIN, BUT I'LL TRY MY ALL AND GIVE MY BEST.
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