Koko, I hope your hand gets better! Pencils aside, your paneling choices are a bit hard to follow, but maybe that was only for the first couple pages. I think you should use gutters to your advantage more, I've never been a big fan of bleed panels. Anyways, take care of that hand, hoping to see you back in action soon.
Promatim, very impressive for a first time battle. the story was a big confusing, wasn't sure where you were going with it, but I really liked your use of positive/negative space in the art. looking forward to your next round!
Kotori, i still respect the effort. Started off pretty good.
Promatim
I'm not sure what was going on in the last panel. But i like the way you use those grey, black, white tones.
Welcome to Void. ;)
KK- Hope your hand gets better.
Pro- The thumbs look better then the actual battle almost. Maybe draw and size you comic bigger next time. Definitely size bigger.
Space the pacing out a little. Fill in the blanks storywise. Other then that, I can see LOTS of potential! I look forward to your next round.
Sorry you guys had problems this week :c
KK, your first few drawings were looking nice, There's always month of the dead, was a cool character! Hope ur hand gets better.
Proma, That last page just needed some clear details to show the Tailor's form a bit and not just a big black shape would've helped a lot. Pg. 3 I really enjoyed. :)
I rushed the text on, sorry about that. Normally I'm better about it but I was in a lot of pain and just wanted it up. Again, sorry everyone.
Promatim, it took me a second read-through to get it but that made me laugh really hard at the end. Splat, so to speak. I look forward to seeing more of your work!
There's very little I can say about both entries since it was clear you both just lacked time to do something finished.
Kotori-I think it started out nice but be careful of the size of your text!
Promatim-I liked the expressive nature of your work but it got a little too expressive on that first page, like I really had no idea who just got thrown out the window in that last panel. I was also unclear of what happened on the final page. Please stick around after the tourney!
I apologize for the rushed work. I'm not going to lie, I mainly didn't want to default.
This comic was not well built into my time commitments this past week. I won't make excuses for myself, but doing what I had time to do was all I could really manage.
I have massive respect for Kotori, and this wasn't meant to be a "how my character could pwn them" sort of thing. The fact that she has two characters meant a real story at a decent pace, with a fight at the end, would've been more pages than I could handle right now.
I'll try and at least have things proofread in the future, so that even short, dialogueless comics will have real clarity and some sense of narrative.
I'll try and step it up for the next one, but I'm not promising 10 pages. I know some of you probably have busier lives than me and still manage to spend 20 hours on a void comic. I respect that, but I have no idea how you do it, haha. We'll see what comes, thanks for the feedback.
@Kotori - Your comic is beautiful, and I really love your rendition of Jhess. If we battle in the future, I will try not to get so busy with life if you promise not to cook your hands. Deal? Deal.
kotori, it's hard with the light pencils. sixtem makes a good point about the margins of the balloons, but also the size seemed big all around on them. shrink the balloons & text down a little, but still leave some room for it to breath. i guess this falls into the personal preference category but i'll put it out there: not a fan of the inverted cursor for the 'offpanel' word balloons. feels like you have to cover more art by extending the balloon borders out just a bit more to only have room for the cursor which then throws off the margin space anyway. no big deal or anything, but i feel just not having a cursor basically sells the same effect.
promatim, i'm not going to lie. i can't tell what i was looking at here really. so kotori's girl gets yanked out a window by your character's fishhook & onto a car tank thing. then the other character comes in & then the girl wakes up & then, i don't know. the closest i guess is the other characters thrown on top of that? it's hard to follow. as suddenly there's a fish hook & we're supposed to guess what happened in between panels. but if what i just assumed right now is the extent of it, in the future, you may want to focus more on the storytelling. let's see your character throwing the fishhook for instance. or pulling it for that matter. some sort of connecting thread between one event & another in the sequence. ideally, we want interesting comics to read, not the bare minimum of how your character can beat someone else's in one blow (or two given there are two of them). i'd say to be more ambitious with your next & tell more of a story.
Well Kotori not much to say. It might have been interesting? Well I kinda liked the character concept.
Promatim, haha, I enjoyed it, it was short but funny. Your style is not bad and I have no trouble understanding what was going on. Good job for the first round but if you wanna survive try to up the game a little more.
Lizzy - Not too much to say seeing how it's unfinished, but I can at least point out that the dialogue in your bubbles seems to be a bit crowded against the borders. The way you drew The Tailor was pretty awesome, though.
Promatim - Your art was a bit too cluttered to discern anything. I had to read it twice to make out what happened. The angles were a bit dull for how awesome someone being pulled out of a window by a fish hook should be. No real story, which will limit you in the future.
Kotori: That sucks, I thought Lizzy would be neat to battle, but shit happens I guess.
Promatim: I liked your inks and use of tone, especially on page 3, it looked really nice. The problem I see in your comic is the clarity of it. It was kind of confusing. For example, on the last page, is that Lizzy sitting up and is she fine or what? Anyway, just work on explaining what's going on more clearly and you'll do awesome. Good first battle by the way!
Uploaded what I had. I fried my hand on a hot oven rack at work and couldn't work for shit on this, but I did what I could. Cheers to the rest of the SDT fighters, I can't wait to see what was done.
Thanks angie! I think I got mine uploaded correctly. I am little confused as to how to preview it to see if it worked, but I see the "...successfully uploaded to server" thing.
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