Squid, I totally understand what you mean. You hit it right on the money: I have horrible time management skills and the art's always rushed. :P
And I want to battle you so hard it's not even funny.
I tried to squeeze Carrot Top in there, but he just kept whining about how nobody thinks he's funny and then he was making that face. You know the face with the eyebrows that could scare Mr. T away? Yeah, I didn't really like that much so I had to give him the slip. Ya know how that is. :\
This was the most fantastically cringe worthy battle I've struggled to read through this year.
I think you should have added some lens flares, bell bottoms and Carrot Top, and the package'd be complete.
Delya, I got that Tanuky was actually the person who gave Oz the gift, what confused me was what happened to Oz. Like why did he have to got the hospital? Heart attack? It was just kind if sudden.
@Dimension & William Duel :: Yeah, the heart bag was from Tanuky. The girl at the club is him, thought I made that pretty clear but I guess not. XD Sorry. Thanks for the crits.
@Mister Kent :: Thanks man!
I agree that this was worthy of a final Trophy Battle.
Rabbit Rabbit: I have to agree that while your intention to portray them in some sort of limbo while they hold their little game isn't bad, I'm just not a fan of big white open spaces. Also I feel like there should have been something a little extra to make the images stand apart. Like I never even noticed that Oz's shirt was missing and had to read back about then, then it was a nice bright blue on the last page. I think it's importance would have been highlighted had it been that blue throughout.
Delya:Your art and colors are great, the 'choice' pickings at the 'Gentleman's Club' were certainly entertaining, but I wonder about Tanuky's importance to the story. He just seems kinda there. Unless that heart shaped bag really belongs to him and that's Tanuky's sly way of hitting on OZ.
Good job, both of you - great final Trophy Battle
Rabbit - I like the maze contest Tasnuky springs on Oz - its very clever. I would've loved if more of it were colored. But you have very clean lines here, and I like that.
Delya - I love your facial expressions - and the body expressions, as well - they're lively. In some ways, the ambulance page is my favorite. It made me stop and think for some reason (and think in a good way - more like reflect/analyze the technique)
Awesome battle!
@Rabbit Rabbit: The story was really enjoyable, I like how Tanuky beat Oz in the game. I agree that the inks need some work, I think it has to do with the line widths and the hatching looking a bit messy. There was still a lack of backgrounds again, even hills of sand or Palm trees would have helped. Other than that though this was pretty good. I really liked it. Oh, and I love you forever for that ScurCrow cameo, thanks. <3
btw Tanuky has become like one of my fav characters on void.
@Delya: Nice coloring job, the story was rather sweet, but it felt very short and was a bit unclear to me. I think it was the whole heart thing that confused me. But even so, you did a very good job with the character art and the inks looked good too. And page six is just adorable. Nice work, Delya!
Thanks Squids. :) Yeah I'm really NOT that great at drawing women, I can do a fairly decent realistic woman body- but I'm trying to get a more cartoony thing going on and... yeah, still needs work. Thanks for the pointers!
yes! This battle was such a treat :3
Del- I think the digital backgrounds look fine. It works with your style. I have a nitpick though; in the first panel, the sidewalk slabs are all different sizes... are they supposed to be? I know it's such a small thing, yet it stood out to me XD
There were some funky anatomical things going on... I noticed it on your girls, their arms tended to taper I think too much near the wrist, then toward the elbow they'd get huge, then in the middle of the upper arm get kind of noodly and thin until it meets the shoulder. In the bottom panel of page 1, the stripper's arm seems really long, plus it has, I'm pretty sure, too much of a curve inward. I think these things are too extremely exaggerated, to that point where they're not quite believable. And there were some other things too; like hip areas seemed kind of weird too but I'm not sure about that. It was just the girls, though; everyone else seemed okay.
Really funny comic, I love what you did with Jpop :D
Rabbit- I'm still seeing weakness in your line-art and I'm having trouble describing it even to myself.. There seems to be inconsistency in that sometimes the characters and things look like they have volume, then other times appear flat.. I think due to the lines sometimes going from strong to light, sketchy, and/or loose.
Like the last page... Tanuky himself looks mostly okay, although his pants could use some more love, maybe... at least given the same amount of detail as is in his shirt, the items in his pocket.. and then his tail gets a lot more loose and his tail markings are scribbly. And the sword at his side looks very flat.. like it could have been thought out more in the drawing stages.
I'm sorry I can't explain it very well D: but over all, I think you are capable of strong inks, it's just that some areas have a "just get it done" quality where it doesn't look like you gave it as much work as you could.
but anyways, funny story as usual... we should totally battle... as soon as I stop being such a flake about battling :I
DAAAHHH Poor Ozzy! I was hoping he'd find true love. x3
That was really really sweet, Delya. I think "Tani" needs fanart now. YOU'RE SO CLEVER AND AWESOME I LOVE YOU WAUGHH
FFFFFFF RABBIT. THAT WAS AWESOME. Omg I loved it SO hardcore, your story telling is wonderful! C: And yes, Oz is colorblind. XD Ahaha I can't stop giggling at the end. I really hope you win this one, it'd be fitting for Tanuky- not to mention your comic is MILES ahead of mine. <3
Thank you so much for the battle, dude. :)
Uploaded. I apologize in advance for the shortness of my entry. Wasn't sure how much free time I'd have to finish.
Really looking forward to yours, Rabbit. You've always been one of my fave artists here. C:
Rabbit Rabbit:
Flabby anal sex is hard to draw when the receiving character doesn't have an anus, though. D:
Hard, but not impossible...
Wow, I forgot about that.... thats depressing ; 3;
You want a sumo wrestling match? Wait for the Month of the Dead and get into a battle with El Puto.
Otherwise, I'm looking forward for this fight. Good luck both of you!
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