It's sad we only have one side to read, however, mamoru's is very tight, it's been a while I don't see a very clear interesting battle scene, I guess.
The paintings are top notch too, I'm always impressed by them, and you are improving everytime!
One thing you could look into developing better, though is camera angles + male anatomy, heh, while your female anatomy is perfect, the male is lacking, betting seen for the anatomy on the panel with Mize lying down, and the angles on the panels with Mize attacking. Except for that, it is candy sweet for me!
Keep on!
I wasn't all that impressed until the cell phone rang. I always love those little insights into the creator's sense of humor. I'd love to see a little more of that. On the less positive side, the ending didn't really feel like an ending at all. I kept reloading and trying to see if there were more pages.
Mamoru-It's good to see you back in the saddle and doing stuff that's equal in quality to your old stuff. I do however wish that you'd make the noses a little bigger. I'm normally totally fine with small anime noses but for me it looks a little odd when you try to draw them realistic but super tiny. I'm having a hard time explaining what I mean but like look at the second page third panel, it looks like you were trying to do a more realistic nose here but it looks really weird when you have this little bitty nose. Didn't mean to totally get hung up on your noses but that's really the only thing that's ever really bothered me with your art so I felt the need to point it out haha
Story wise I'm sure you have something bigger you're planning on building up to but I do agree that a lot of your matches seem to start in the middle. I think giving a little intro as to what is happening could help because the audience is really thrown into the action and we have no idea why Mize is after Kick. It does seem like in a lot of your battles I'm never really given the info I need to know what is going on. I'm okay with there not being a definite ending as this is supposedly going to continue in the next match but giving some more meat to the beginning would have helped.
The colors and art and all were fine, but I have to agree; the story's not that great. It's pretty boring. I've noticed that, in your stories, you don't really have a beginning, just a middle and a quick end, or sometimes just a middle. What you have here doesn't really make much sense.
Overall, your art is great, but you really do need to work on your storylines.
Cool colors Mamo, nice to see you battling again. The art in this was looking good. You still have some anatomy issues you need to work on, but nothing big really. hmm, I think it might even be the clothes folds that make it seem weird.
The story was ok. Not all that entertaining, but not really boring either. it just needed more to it and I hope you will continue it on your next battle so we know what's gonna happen.
nice comic either way :3
the thumbnails had me worried for a second haha. the fight was ok, albeit a super quick one. pay attention to the poses & the way you're positioning characters. a lot of times they'd look off balance or in an awkward position. or that one shot of mize throwing the punch where his arm almost seems to bend by his wrist. it doesn't look right. otherwise the art was good. seriously nice coloring. still though, a lot of flash without much in the way of substance. it seems to start almost mid fight, a few blows are exchanged, & one's floored. it feels more like the prologue to a story than a story. and even if that's the case as part of a larger arc, i think it should still be able to stand up on its own two legs as a story. does that make sense?
I was expecting more from this, instead I got a fairly stock story. Destruction and fighting for no apparent reason, acting as an agent of some other individual/organization... It's all just so "blah", not a good start for someone calling for a return to stories and better writing. Yeah, the art's nice and all, but where's the meat?! This wasn't even an effective appetizer. You're better than this.
Favorite part:the coloring~~!!! X3 I really liked your action sequences and effects. I along with the japanese characters. those are really fun to look at.
Mize is a dude?? I totally couldn't tell...
Mam: Your battle sequences are excellent but your anatomy needs work (like everybody else who draws) oh...and I totally hate people who have conversations while battling...it's silly...yet I think it's a staple of comics and manga in general...anywho...good go of it..
Hand Sandwich:
Took all night to put up my Rofl battle but was right on the button for this one. Serves me right for trying to sneak extra time.
Something to remember is most of the time I'm awake when the battles are due. If I'm awake and one of the artists hasn't submitted and I can't track them down, I assume they're defaulting. 9 times out of 10 when I've had the heart to wait until the next morning they don't submit anyways and wasted my time :(
Johnny: .....
Nishi: Hmmm. Colors are preeeeetty. I like the action and this just feels tighter than some of your older works. The colors seem... crisper, if that makes any sense. I really liked it. The art just made me happy. The WRITING.... Ahem. Please get a proofer... the dialog had all kinds of errors all over the place, and maybe it is just me, but it totally made me twitch and broke my happy happy Nishi-art glow whenever they popped up. Tenses were wrong, wrong words(too vs to, etc)... just the minor things that could be cleaned up to really make things look pro.
I can't wait to see more, Nishi. More more more. :D
Dude. I totally want to get a pair of Mize brand shoes.
Johnny: What happened, man? Another default... Better time management, maybe? =/
Mamoru: And the pyro's back with a vengeance! Good to see you alive and battling!
The kick on page four's looking a little odd to me, but overall the fight's got good flow to it- short and sweet. Looking forward to more from you.
Defaults make me sad >__<
Anyhow Nish, great fight scene as usual, though the battle was a bit light on depth or content. What thrilled me, however, is to see you return to your old levels of quality on a complete battle :D it could be the beginning of a great comeback.
seeing as every one knos your great this battle didn't excite me much no offense even you fight scene was lacking where in you older battle the shine like northern lights quality won out overcreativity and entertainment but like i said we all kno your a good artist i didnt really understand the story but it almost seems like some kind of rebirth of Mize potential this could be awesome but only you really kno hahaha good job tho i wish i had your skills.....well kinda
Awesome job, Kuya Mamoru! <3 Damn, I never you can write, er, I mean, type Japanese characters, haha. It was epic, man. Now I'm just wondering what will Mr. Fabulous do to Mize, oh noes. D: The rendering here was REALLY beautiful, like as if I'm reading an actual comic, haha. But in Panel 1 of Page 4... I can see a grammatical error so, er, please be more careful in typing next time, ehehe. ^^; But still, overall, awesome job! :D
(Galing mo, kuya! Idol! Hehe. XD)
You have 3 chances Johnny, you blew the first one, you have 2 left. You turn in crap on this and your next match, consider yourself retired forever. If this match looks anything like your match with Rofl I'm sure Wei will really push for you to lose it on the second chance.
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