jaja, gracias por el apoyo \"ledes87\" y \"brillantik\" ñ_ñ
Thanks for the coments jared, phillip, angienes and dimension...this is very useful! n_n
Very good work Kura X! I love your page 1! nice!
Kura - nice, compact, & complete. really didn't have much in the way of qualms other than maybe evening out the blacks a bit more in some spots. nice work.
Betito - good first outing there. the story's a little simple & straightforward even as far as the whole 'meet/FIGHT!' scenario usually goes. i'd suggest working on your faces some. as it is, all the human characters have pretty similar features with only like 'cranial accessories' to tell them apart. also too, while phil says you draw your eyes too high, i think you draw your noses really low on faces, as if they're all sitting on the upper lip. something to be mindful of as you practice. another thing, in some parts, the way you framed the action in a panel was a little awkward too. when you crop out some of the action you have to make the reader surmise what's happening on the outside. sometimes it's good for effect but here it kind of hurt the pacing.
-J
Well this was a good showing for a 1 week battle
Kura: Really nice inks, in all honesty I really think this is one of your better looking battles so far. Story however was a bit cut and dry but still cute and enjoyable. I feel that this was the stronger of the two stories here.
Betito: Not bad, but your inks look way messy and pixelated, try scanning at a larger size between 300 and 600 dpi, that way when you shrink this all down your linework turns out crisp and clean. Other thing to keep watch out for is eye placement, the eyes go in the middle of the human head, that's a rule of thumb you should always keep in mind when drawing. Don't move the nose or moth either, just the eyes. Story was a bit of the old void staple of bumping into somebody (literally in this fight) and beating your opponent. Not really the best thing but you did a good job with it.
Vote went to Kura for stronger inks.
Kura-I really enjoyed the style you used for the backgrounds, it was very different for you and worked very well. I thought the story was short, simple, and to the point and I enjoyed it. Sometimes you don't need a complex plot to make a fun and entertaining comic and I think you pulled it off well.
Betito-This was good for a first battle! I found the story interesting but felt that your lineart could have been cleaner. Also be careful with your text! It was a little difficult to read in some areas and you're still having some problems with your sound effects. You had some nice action going on and I liked how you handled the blacks. I think storywise it would have helped a little more to clarify what happened with the teleporting stuff. But other than that it was nice for a first battle, I look forward to the next
@kura X: I thought the inks looked nice; the texture on the trees and such were looking pretty cool :3 though I felt that the story could of had a lot more, but it was still cute.
@betitio: Nice first battle! You need to work more on your backgrounds though. The buildings on the first few pages could have had some windows drawn in there. Also your inks are looking alright as well, but the lines are kind of Pixelish, so I'd suggest you find a way to fix that.
niceness guys! ;D
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