saintpio: Again, you keep improving! Your backgrounds are so much better, and that last panel was awesome.
Dimension: your coloring is so lovely! I think you went a little over board with the highlights on eden's hair though. I think a few well placed highlights are better than a bunch of them.
I gave quality to dimension, and entertainment to saintpio, I voted very closely!
DAAAAAAYUM SAINTPIO! D: you really did some great work here! Yeah, I also thought we were going to mess up some where, but no, the story went well :3
I really liked how you did the dream sequence, it worked out really nice for the intro. Haha and I loved the expressions, they’re so fun to look at XD I’m also liking how you colored your half too, really works well with the atmosphere.
Awesome stuff dude~
@angieness: Did you pick the thumbnails for this battle, you awesome woman, you? >:3
Haha, o.k.…I’ll try drawing less side shots and vary up the shots some more as well as vary the line widths in my backgrounds. Also I had a friend tell me that it’s hard to tell what time of day it is in my comics. My battle with Odd13 took place during the night and my friend thought it was day time so yes, I know what you mean xD hehe I’ll see what I can do about that problem. Thank you very much Angieness I appreciate your comments and constructive critique! <3
@jaws: coolness, glad you liked it :3
@garic: agreed. I didn’t plan out where to place my speech bubbles very well this time ^^; thanks!
pio -- I really like what you're doing with the washes. It adds a lot of atmosphere to your stuff, which is interesting since you seem to be creating a more cartoony art style. I'd say anatomy is your weakest point right now, and improvement there only comes through practice. If you don't have a sketchbook, get one, and try to draw from life as often as possible, even if it's only quick gesture sketches. It helps.
dimension -- Like pio's battle, this is definitely an improvement for you. Other people have already talked about some issues with anatomy, perspective, etc. but if you keep working at it those things will only get better over time. One thing that hasn't been mentioned yet is your speech bubbles. I'm not sure how you're doing them, but sometimes they aren't very well shaped or it seems like there isn't enough room for the text. This kind of thing really take a reader out of the comic (at least for me), and I think you should look at the thread on the forum that talks about doing speech bubbles to see what you could do to address that.
Good work, guys.
Bring it.
Good job dimension. I didn't honestly expect this to work out but i'm so glad it did. I'm still watching that sheep movie with my mouth open. Thanks to whoever put up the thumbnails!
both sides of this battle are cool seeing as they come together to make a cool comic, Angie gave you all the advice i could think of so all i'll say is keep up the ggod work, and im coming for you SAINT hahahaha
Seeing as how you're doing two halves of the same story, your Creativity scores are going to be similar (as maybe even your Entertainment ones too)--Hm, now who's most improved?
**goes and reads both their old comics**
First off, both of you are impressing me all the time. I'm really impressed with how much you both improve with every battle and I'm glad you both are good at listening to and applying feedback. Keep at it guys, it makes me happy to see.
Saintpio-your backgrounds are getting better all the time and I like the direction your inking is taking and you're getting better with your washes all the time. Keep on working on these things, it's really paying off. Your anatomy still does need some work though, you had some issues with the length of Eden's body and her face especially. Remember that another eye should always fit between the eyes for the distance between the two eyes. (I hope that made sense, it's hard to word) I was also a little confused by the pose on the 5th page 2nd panel. Try acting out punching someone and it'll give you a better feel for how you punch someone. What you have here makes it look like Seak simply launched from her fist. I'm enjoying how twisted your battles are, they have a great tone to them and I've been enjoying them a lot. Keep it up dude!
Dimension-your backgrounds are also improving all the time, I would like you to keep working on them. Don't be afraid to put some line variation in them, it may help tighten up your inking some. Your perspective is improving, it's still having some issues though so keep on working on it. I think your anatomy is coming along fine, I was especially impressed with how you handled the skinless zombie dude. The panel layouts are far better this time around, I think you've found a good balance in your layouts and didn't go crazy negative space this time. Aside from the backgrounds, the only big thing I noticed was you have a lot of side shots. You do have some good variation in your angles but occasionally there will be a block of all side shots. It's a hard thing to not do sometimes, so keep working at it. Your coloring is also coming along nicely, I'd like to see you try a different time of day on the next battle and really try to push the atmosphere.
Good job both of you guys, keep working and improving!
Pages, uploaded...and I'm am really tired now... not sure how this all came out, but well...we will see.
Also this will be my last battle with Eden & Seak for A while. I was supposed to take a break after the battle I had with Diascope, but then I received 2 unexpected PMs.
Oh and one last thing....I think everyone should watch this movie after reading this battle http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=q-l93gltkCc .....
j/k :}
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