Mr. Tofu I wanna battle you <3
I didn't know what to expect from your first battle, but I gotta say this left me smiling. It was youthful, storybooky, but with the right about of Void flavor. Bravo. I do have to note your narrative poetry didn't flow all too well in certain stanzas and your rhyming scheme stalled and chugged here and there, but I'm sure that'll get polished up in future battles.
Knomer, to be honest, your battle was forgettable. It was your typical Void cocktail: introduction, altercation, but we were stiffed a fight. :( I do have to say your quality was relatively clean and neat and I could follwo what was going on.
knomer: dude, i bloody love your style! but!!! this seemed somehow more controlled and less. BOOM. i don't know, it seemed to lack some energy that is usually burning in your drawings (ex: res vs. robosockmonkey) what did you do different? the color seemed like a crutch in this one, i think you use your blacks HELLA better by themselves. anyway, i did like all of tofus expressions though and res is just always way cool. anyway MORE PLEASE!
seevah: awesome little caricatures of res, they're were stinkin' funny. the paneling was funky though and kind of annoying; it looks more story book-ish then comic, the fonts didn't help either. it was awkwardly funny though so yea KEEP AT IT YO.
Res. It was a really good short story. It's good seeing someone pull off a good comic in only 3 pages, something I might start trying to do.
Tofu. It was good and all, but I think the story rhyming thing got a bit annoying towards the end. It's good how the art just suddenly got better on the last page when it exited the story, but then it was like, how come they're still rhyming if the story's over? Nice first battle.
Knomer-This is looking much better than your past few battles, I'm glad to see you tightened things up and obviously spent more time on the art this time around. The comic was short and to the point and it worked. I'd like to see you do more background work in the future since that seems to be something you neglect in your battles. The only thing I would really suggest is on that last page it might have been nice if you'd had another panel of Tofu and Res as he's yelling at him so you could really show the body language and such but it's not totally necessary. Nice little comic and an improvement for you.
Seevah-One thing you really need to work on is your panel layout and construction. You have all this white space all over the place. I know that you were trying to get a whole storybook feel going on, but it may have helped a lot to just do larger panels that the text can fit into. Or at least larger panels with the text above or below the panel itself so you can show more art. The extreme cropping just makes you look lazy. Look at some storybooks next time if you plan on doing this kind of thing again. Your style is nice and the watercolors work well with it, I just want to see you spend more time. I know this is your first battle so those are some things to consider for your next battle.
Oh man i just dropped my hardest summer class (I was taking 3) and they cut my hours at work... I wish i had this much free time when i was doing this but everything is now done and my might be able to notices what pages i did before all of this XD
Knomer!! <3 Whatchu doin yo! WOot!
Lets see some good pages. I want to see BETTER QUALITY than you submitted, Seevah. Show us just what you got.
Good luck you two!
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