Joejito:
Some nice drawings here and there, overall some ruled in panels would've been a relatively quick way to add to the quality also fixing those crossovers of lines. Big ass page 8 and repeating pages hurt you too. Page 9 had some good drawing.
would have been nicer to see more of the battle, and spent less time on the lead-in, although it was interesting. Do that BB .
Rtv!
This looked badass, and for only two pages i was getting into the story. Didn't like that ninja standing on the roof though, legs looked kinda funny. BB or rematch with Caleb would be well received.
yeah, i definitey promise to do better next time. some pages are actually missing. there is alot more the caleb/RTV fight scene. Caleb does a jutsu, RTV shoot him in the chest but its a clone and he suprises RTV who basically suprises him back and it ends in a cliffhanger. maybe i'll finish it for a beyond battle. i just wasn't expecting to have so much to do.
Joejito: I gotta say your last page was the most beautiful. And besides some little things, it's really sweet. BUT It was way too hard to read. Not enough text and hard for the eye. You should either limit your panels with some lines or make enough space between them if you don't want to draw lines. It seems you like to draw with different angles which is pretty good, but was lacking in quality in your battle. If you use perspective, you should use a ruler and a precise vanishing point. Some styles like Burton's don't need those things, but they also have some rules. I don't think perspective should be taken lightly. It was really messy in most of your panels.
Rtv!: It's a shame, but it was freakin great for only 2 pages^^
My vote goes to Rtv! for quality beacause in my point of view, the art goes first and the story is the ultimate point.
Yeah, what others have said...
Nice Backgrounds Rtv, it would have been awesome if you finished :3
Joejito, Your pages would have also been great if you would have had the chance to finish them, I too had a hard time reading the story though.
Sorry Guys, I wish curves could be thrown for reasons why battles arnt finished, but it is what it is. Would have loved to have seen this be a real fight but it sure doesnt feel like it. I first read RTV and thought for sure that he was handing the match to Joejito. Sorry Joejito but I've gotta give this one to RTV just for quality. I couldn't really rate ya too high in creativity or entertainment either because I just wasn't able to read alot of the text or in some cases even understand just what was goin on. Hope you guys pull a rematch.
joejito- i like your style & would have liked your side a lot better had it been more finished. it was hard to read the text & know exactly what was going on, but there seemed to be a lot of filler in your story that gave us quantity over quality. tighten your stories up some so you can rock some good finished work instead
rtv- shame you were feeling under the weather. with the backgrounds on that first page, you were off to a good start. faces could have used some work, but that could have been a product of being sick. feel better & come back guns blazin'
-J
Thank you, mr Ignan. That shitlist is a lonely place to hang out. lol
Hey Joejito, i wanted to give Caleb more screentime but most of the story is told from his perspective. I portrayed his bio/past and path of vengeance upto the point we meet. Hope that helps, cuz i just breached the 10 page limit and haven't even got to the fighting yet!
If i can't make it, i will haunt you for years for a rematch. Caleb is too awesome to not fight twice.
Congrats mah man! We need to talk, since my current story line is told non-linear and in dual timelines shit can get confusing.
Get on AIM. my second screenname is elArtivino
No it's not! *wipes tear from cheek*
I didn't see that till after i clicked the Accept button, lol.
Joe is making me WORK.
*sigh*
...can't trust them 2008 ninjas no more.
Hey Rtv!, bro...sorry for the delay mang...I'll try do as much school work as I could and hopefully I'll be able to join you in this mother fuckin' tag match! :D
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