Sandysand-
Somehow i dig the flat colouring you do, i don't know why but i think it's your line art style.
very nice pacing with the shower sequence, i loved it when he wiped the steamy mirror and the battle title appeared on it. That sequencs of Crawford getting stuck inbetween em was hilarious, falling their asses down a flight of stairs. Some of the angles you chose were pretty well done, except it collides with the perspective of the background at times.
Crawford's discman broken after the fall....hahahahaha, thumbs up that boosted some laughter in me.
NightmayoR oh one -
Damn nice colouring, the cellshade and the paint style. However, the paint style works best if you want to create a certain mood for specific scenes. In this comic it comes off a bit random, but i still like it.
I had some difficulties reading the dialogue at times, but most of it was hilarious as well.
That scene with the landlady...good lord she an ugly motherfukka. It gave me the creeps and laughing cramps at the same time. That moment looked like a movie sequence, awesome job.
The brick wall Crawford punches was done incredibly nice!
I'm not too keen about them shared stories, but great fight anyhow guys.
Good luck on the next one!
I wish i could give crits but Im crappy at that, I like both parts needless to say.
I laugh well through both. Crawford getting caught between them, and the moment of Ms. Shopshire scared me, and Mr. Puffinskins amused me. XD
<3 Dee Cameo
I love Nelson and Macario :D And Crawford looks pretty awesome too. I like how you guys have made your comics together. Now I just have to choose which one I like best... damn...
Great story the both of you!
Sand: good stuff, I love the expressions and the artwork is awesome. The background was a bit off somehow, perspective-wise. The coloring reminds me of the Archie comics : D (not a bad thing but maybe something you weren't looking for).
Nightmare-01: Lovely stuff! Great coloring job but I felt claustrophobic due to all the closeups and waist-up shots, there was very little variety concerning those except for the panel with nel and mac lying across the sofa. The font was a little hard to read in some places too.
Nevertheless...
Awesome stuff guys! <3 <3
Thanks for the useful crits and the support guys!! This was a very experimental comic. That's why the paintish look and the cel shading at all mixed up. I tried to define what should I use more in the future. Or how to mix them. I think I really like cel shading the characters only, but I'll need your opinion on that. Also, if it's a good idea that the font I use depends of the character, or I should just pick one. Another option could be hand writing but it's hard to understand sometimes.
Sandita you already know what I think. My panties, too <3
ladies and gentlemen little jonny christmas!
OMG i <3 RBF! perfect song choice too w/ the out of tune part (everything is cool might've worked too but not the same message)
that shit was bananas
AUGH. I love you both. Marry me and have my bastard love children. D:<
Seriously though. I'm extremely impressed on both parts. You both show EXCELLENT movement and panel structure. Only prob I see really is the text- on both parts it became tough to read at times. But oh my god, you both rock my world seriously. ;0; I must fight you. 8D
Sand- I think in the future you might want to avoid color and just focus on black and white so you don't have to worry about having a few pages looking lovely then having it go flat. I was also kind of bothered by your font choices, you must go to the land of http://www.blambot.com for font lovins. I think the backgrounds could have also used a little more love and care, they looked pretty rushed in a lot of areas.
Nightmare-your half was gorgeous! But I had a very hard time reading the text in some areas, be very careful with colored text going over similarly colored. I think you could have also had some more zoomed out shots, all the closeups make it difficult to read what's going on. But other than that it was lovely for your first fight!
Oh my gosh.
Night, that painting was WHOA. Not LIKE WHOA. BUT WHOA. A-MAZING. I'M IN LOVE.
Sand, really love your style and the way you draw your character. Your poses look real natural. But I felt the panels were a bit under-detailed. Good job thooough, botha the comics were stinkin' awesome.
Nightmare, the I love wei t-shiirt. PURE.UNADULTERED. GENIOUS. I laughed so hard that Im glad I wasnt drinking anything at the time.
Now the real stuff:
Sand: The couple of things I see that stood out were your anatomy at parts an some of the perspective. And since im in no position to give critique on perspective We will leave that where it lies. The anatomy was off in a few places such as page 2 panel 1. Crawfords head is too small, the width of someones head is supposed to rouphly equivalent to the length of the face. There were some other things but that stood out to me the most. Nice work tho, and I cant wait to see more of your stuff!
Nightmare: The humor was great in this, not to mention you art was wonderful as well. I guess the only question I have is about the style switches you have in your comic. I understand the switch from the cel cartoonish look to the more painted looking style can emphasize certain points. Such as in page 2 in the series of panels in the painted style emphasizing certain....\"features\" of Mr/Mrs.Garrison, oh-uh I mean the Landllady.XD
But other places such as in Page 5 the style switch seems more random, even if it looks great. But this could also be due to a lack of understanding on my part.
All in all, I enjoyed this battle from both sides, and await further fights from both parties!!
Oh my, both of you, what a nice simple, yet sweet story.
Puppet - I gotta say, the building looked a bit bland, with nothing hanging up, or any decoration, or anything. But i did like the last page. =D
Nighty - all i really gotta say, is that the close up detail of the She-man is awesome!!!!!
There is no way I can finish fully coloring my pages! D: 3 out of 7 colored, so far. I feel like garbage and I have the fear of having Tuberculosis over my head (I'm getting tested the day the battle's due!) So...um...at least they're all drawn, right?
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