everything that was e-mailed after your problems with uploading was put up...so if there was another page...you didn't send it....no we can't post it now and don't go posting it anywhere else either at least until after voting
Errr...I had 6 pages. And it's the 2nd page that is missing, which actually shows the fun park and how A.B bumped into John...so this is kinda messed up the story that the page is not here. I don't know why, I emailed it to toast. Is there a way, where one of the council could post it up? I actually e-mailed it, because I wanted to make sure that all pages will be displayed. This really sux...
And yes, I agree with you slade...we both could've done better...
ImaGee - your story had off at a great start, very natural and true for your character. heck the rest of the comic you can say was just about going well for him. You know where you got it wrong though , its an unfinished battle, even though Im ok with it ending on the void turkey encounter like a random episode of aquateen. But with respect to your opponnent, you got beat on story even if art and tonal range was complete.
Slade: TACKY COMMENTS ARE PROHIBITED >:E
Hahahahah man that was a gem, I admit your pencil style only worked for a really good number of pages, but the tonal scheme seemed weak overall. maybe if there were some black lines rather than white gray variations. THATS THE ONLY PROBLEM THAT YOU NEED TO FIX IF NOT FOR THAT THIS WOULD HAVE BEEN GREAT.
In any case your art was up to pat with the competition,composition was a big plus and hell you got awesome written content here. A STORY that's cohesive from the last chapter even. Your continuities are a blessing. Keep it up.
Bloke gets aces for form and consistent quality over Dream's occasionally brilliant pencil works
Dream gets the grade for continuity and character execution over Bloke's adventure setup
and Dream takes it home with a strong foundation for storyline elements = but not BY MUCH
This was an awesome battle you two, even with the time frame that this went in. I can't wait to meet you in the battlefied :D
Hey guys! NICE WORK!!!!
didn't had time to read the other's comment yet, so i'll just throw in mine, hoping not the beat a dead horse!
Imageenat!on, cool piece, but uneven art, sometime the quality is there, sometime it's not. but I did enjoy your storry and art quite a bit. bringing in the void turkey!!!???!!! what a laugh!
Slade 13, it's rare to find art that are even, but you pull it out quite well. most of your cell show the same amout of quality, with some few exeption. and I did like quite a bit the fact that instead of having the 2 fight each other you had them fighting toghetter an even bigger treath. your own character needing help to do her own stuff. I realy liked that. somehow it translate as respect for the other artists' creation.. now if only you could work just a bit more on your page and make them look less sketchy and more professional looking... alos, pay attention to body movement.. at some point hars and legs are doing impossible stufs. so... anyway... you show imense talent. you may loose this particular fight, but I see great thing comming for you
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ImaGEE-Your stuff is looking nice dude! I kind of wish the battle had been longer, the ending kind of made me go wtf. I'm torn between seeing it as a cop out ending to finish and between you just having random fun.
Slade13-the pencils thing I don't mind, it worked really well most of the time. But there were some closeups where you lost detail and it made it look unfinished, the first page was looking jawsome then you kind of lost momentum with the details. For the action you could have used a bit more expressive linework, like on the bigass panel on page 3 you would have benefitted from some speedlines to help get the action across as well as destroy that negative space. I'm also a little iffy on the font, I think it could have worked well if you had hand written text but I know a lot of us aren't gifted at hand writing. The backgrounds could have also used some tightening up, they're looking a little flat to me. Other than that I think your battle was pretty good and an improvement from your previous ones, keep going at it dude!
wow... the battle is finally up! woot. thanks kev/wei...
sorry no inks, i was trying something new... a sorta elsevilla-ish deal... then practice some colors... only my brother decides then to send in the computer to be fixed...
well, i think, for a first time trying something like this, it didn't come out to bad... though i forgot sound effects (only realized this after i sent it in) and i went a little crazy with the speed lines on page 9... also i should have played with the perspective on panel two of the same page. i look at it now and i realize just how -blah- it looks...
oh well. i still had a lot of fun with this. so i still win... sorta. :p
(didn't help that i rewrote the story something like 6 or 7 times.)
gee: great work. though i think we both could have done better... but with void being weird and the holidays and all... i'd say it was a good bit of work. i am wondering were you are going to take that turkey thing...
for the record, i'm taking both sides into account as plot fr my character... bloke's side will have happend before the cirrus battle chronologically. heh
this will be interesting... as this will be the first time that the bloke has to deal with a father in void... that i know of (looks through the archives...)
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