Rtv-I enjoyed the story and the feel of the pages. I think they could have been polished a bit more by upping the brightness/contast levels in photoshop. This could have made your blacks black as well as get rid of the gray look of the paper and scanning errors.The backgrounds on page 4 could have used some inking to really push up the quality. The gun on that page would have also worked better in black and white with the constrasty look of the rest of the page, the color just looks out of place. Other than those issues I think you did a nice job, just the general quality of the scans really hurt you.
Copper Mouth-Gorgeous line work! I think you could have really experimented more with what you had going on the first page where you put some white in the images, that could have added more depth. The bottom of page 6 could have used a little more love, while I think the action is looking fine you should have put a background, even if it's just speedlines, in there. The only other thing that really stood out to me was the pencil lines poking through the inks. It's possible the paper you were working on was fragile so you might not have been able to erase the stray pencil lines, but it could have helped a bit.
Shit Fetus, that was some creative stuff! Your fight looks like the extended version of mine. It almost ends the same but from a different perspective.
The pick pocket thing, the kids, i love it.
I promise i'll do better next time. Haven't retrieved that page either, i almost cried. I'm glad i didn't default.
But seriously, your fight ended the way it was supposed to end for Rtv. If i could vote, i would.
Now you've gotten me curious what you're gonna do to McManning
FetusMan: Hoshit! C-bass kicked some ass f'shur. I LOVED the little creative things you did, and how things popped out of the boxes occasionally, real spiffy! Tons of little neat things.
Otherguy: The story was a bit hard to follow, and the art was good, 'tho a big inconsistant. I totally dug the interaction between the two characters, and RTV!'s thoughts popping up here and there.
Nice work fellas!
RTV: i thought your dialouge was deep but i wasn't really feeling the art in this one. the story seemed incomplete as well. overall for me my main problem was it just didn't feel finished overall.
Copper: i really like your style yo, its different from most of the other art on void and those inks are sick. though it was a bit convient with the school bus, and the gun store, i just chalked it up to probability and found the story mad entertaining. i also liked that the next panel you stayed true to the continuity of the previous one, like with the glass shards still being in RTV. that last panel was pure hotness.
Ahhhh rtv!!
i was really getting into your comic too
i just hope i can see that lost page someday soon
and to answer your question, i'll totally take you up on that rematch offer seomday, that would be great
Finally uploaded the last page, lot of stuff went wrong but i'm glad it's there.
Fetus i hope you'll take me on in a rematch someday, you already know what happened to my action page. Sorry bro, try to enjoy.
I'm sorry to do this to you again, but i can't get near a comp to upload till midnight. (new job, graveyard shift, miscalculated the timezone, sorry it happens..i'm a prick.)
Defaulting the Cross fight last year was my own damn fault...being late on double extensions.
Please bare with me. i AM finished with this fight. Just held up. Like the Dalarminus' fight...and i delivered too.
(i'm just a lil paranoide about coming off as disappointing knowing i put force into this fight.)
Same shit, gunslinging, snappy comments, the akward intros ect...it's all coming back now.
Only thing changed is the confusing plot twisting tongue fukk tied dialogues. There will be none off those...well not much.
Haven't been doing my part of the welcome wagon very much but fukkit, i'm glad to be medically able to fight. I also wanted a two week match cuz i need to do a sequal to my fight with P2. But first, gaping bulletholes.
-Thanx for the cheer comments, i love ya'll motherfukkas!
haha, thanks man, im reeallllly looking forward to what you have in store for me/us!
this should be great, just need to get my ass in gear and work out the rest of my pages by the deadline
once again, good luck bro!
I just re-read Copper Mouth's bio. This shit is too cool. Now i'm even more impatient to see what you came up with, since my character's a rookie compared to yours.
Go go go!
(P.S. Rtv is not an assassin, from time to time he does some jobs. It happens he accidentally shoots some one in the ass and kills him. And, Rtv is asperger (high functioning autistic), he can't tell the difference between right or wrong when he needs to accomplish something.)
excuse my long ass comments. Limited internet access can do that.
Oh yeah, haven't done a shootout since Rtv vs Cross.
Copper Mouth made his first kill since 19-whatever thefukk when he was 17 and kept killing since. Rtv's first kill was last month. (ROOKIE) Storywise i enjoy characters who are more experienced in battle.
Fetus Man vs Dead Man. how ironic. Good luck!
(Don't forget you are allowed to do more then three pages. I set the deadline at two weeks sothat i cannot enjoy the luxury of slacking or overperfecting.)
Thanks blokes, im hoping this goes amazingly well for us, or something like that.
Good luck Rtv, though you dont need it of course, im really looking forward to this.
time to get to work D:
Wow!
I've said it before but like I've never ment it this much: I dunno who I want to win!
I-I...oh gawd...my soul!
Good luck to you both, I expect so much in this one!
Glad to see you in the fighting spirit RTV, and hope you do well Fetus, this is your first fight, and against a seasoned veteran nonetheless. Good luck to you two!
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