Alright Pi, you asked for it and here it is…
Pi> I really like the way you've drawn Mr. Squishington, especially the facial expressions. Good job. Messy hatching at times, though, dude. Don't rush it—take your time. And the hands, dude… the hands! Page 3, panel 4 and page 4, panel 1: People don't keep their hands like that. It looks stiff and awkward. Reminds me of that guy that got hand transplants. Not good. You might want to study hands at rest a bit. Though, I actually don't think the hand in the last panel on page 4 even looks that bad at all. Finally, I find the conclusion pretty weak. It comes out of the blue like… well, like Mr. Squishington, I guess. Seriously, though: The information that Dr. Pye just derived from his little experiment is way too specific. It just doesn't follow from the events. You have to remember that your characters don't know or even need to know everything that you know. Right now, Dr. Pye appears to posses powers of near omniscience. Not a good thing.
AAA> I just love those zombie Squishingtons and their little lines. They made me laugh. Well done. :) I also like the fact that your god is female. Points for that. :D Further, though, Mr. Squishington's looking good as ever, but you might've wanted to practice drawing your opponent a bit more. And finally: The lettering, dude! I had to read your comic three fucking times before I was able to make out exactly what was being said. :o
In the end, I found AAA's comic more entertaining. Plus, it had color. I just love color. So, Mr. Squishington wins. In my book, anyways.
I think what he meant was that more in-depth critiques would be appreciated. I concur with this request, as \"the art wasn't all that good\" doesn't help me a great deal. I know I didn't spend as much time on this as I should have, and colors are nowhere to be seen, but help with lineart, pacing, poses, camera angles, etc. would be nice. I'm sure that AHACAT feels the same way about his, except that he has color.
Pi: i liked your comic. nice ideas but the art wasn´t all that good.
AhalfAcupAtea: i really loved your thing. the art was ok and the story was fine + fun.
also i think its one of the best scars i´ve seen here on void.
SQUISHINGTON FTW!!!
Ahalfacupatea, I loved your comic...it was very creative and funny! The best you have submitted yet....squishington deserves to win this one!
Pi, you had a good story but the art was lacking.
I enjoyed both but my vote goes to the cute little bear!
pi i really liked your battle. i like how you had squishington force pye into being his friend like a litle kid would and i love the emotion in it.
leave more comments people. i'd like to know why i'm losing and what i can improve on.
Oh much better AhalfAcupAtea! I really enjoyed this submission from you. Loved the ending.
Pi, I liked this soulful look in to your character, and the fact that he attempted to help Squishington.
Hm. It's going to be tough voting over all.
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