that was a nice battle.good job to both of ya!
a little crit:
knomer- good job overall but it looks a little sloppy to me.i know thats the style but it looks like you didnt put a whole lot of effort into the actual drawing.i do like the look but in some places it looks to rushed.also there are no backgrounds really at all.an establishing shot to show where they are exactly at would help.i do love the story telling and the choice of angles you chose.very nice.overall i like it.keep up the good work.
MoD- first of all.kudos on goin the extra mile with 8 f@#%in pages man.thats the spirit.overall compared to your other stuff this is by far the best.there are some story flaws though.like when they blow the door up and shoot at them.they never did.they have the bomb,then they are shootin at them.altleast have a sound effect in the last panel of that page with her face of an explosion.also you can kinda see your style change in the later pages.which is good.looks good.also like the others said...fix your grammer man.it kills the artwork.but great job overall.
in the end i had to go with the MoD.good job to both though.
knomer: i don't care what anyone else says, i really liked your fight :3 there was no action, but it was still interesting to read. and tat's not something that usually works too well with me, so i gave you some nice points there. and maybe your style is lazy in this fight, i don't really know....but i liked it the way it was. it gave more to the mood of the....\"fight\".
mod: hahahaha, man, this was a surprise.....i know you showed me sketches of this a long time ago...and then i forgot. so seeing it now was a treat ;D
and i dunno if i ever told you this, but i always thought it was cute how you drew seel with freckles XD
great fights from both of you! the points i dished out to both were about even, but i think the ones for jamie were a bit higher.
Knomer: I liked. It's simple, but it's well written. (Although I do think Jamie could have played a better role) Some of us might have expected more action, but hey! Comics need scenes like these to help roll the storyline along. My only gripe about the art is that the lighting is inconsistent.
On a fun note. xD I look forward to more battles from you, this will be entertaining.
Jamie: I love that you let Seel guest star. xD I was laughing at the beginning. There are some neat perks in the script that I liked, and while it was a little bit confusing at times (probaby because I've missed other stuff in the past) it was pretty good.
Well, Hunter thinks that Jamie is close enough to his mom. Since he hasnt had a mom for like 5 years he is happy to have her back and all. he thinks of her as his mom and all but as this fight shows he isnt listen to her as if she is the real deal.
yeah 7 was a crap page! im sorry about that. i did liek half before i started to push myself and the other 1 week before it was due...you can tell which was before and after im sure lol
i wish i had time to color it and all because i think it would really look cool all colored but oh well
i can only really pencil and ink anyways lol i cant letter or color to well but thanks again.
more action in the robinson fight then this one...this is just a \"hey why does jamie have no scar and short hair now??!\" story piece.
Good stuff from both sides.
Knomer: the piece was a little bland, I felt this could have been more of a beyond battle than a fight. Some more interaction would have worked, rather than just \"hey do you know anything?\" \"no, no i don't.\" Still, the art is good, even if there was a lot of negative space.
MoD: Great work, I dig the both the story and the art. So the Exiles are starting in on Culmination? Nice. There were spots that looked really bad compared to the rest of your piece, especially the fourth panel of page 7, where Jamie's head baloons for a sec. I'm also glad that Jamie's story is starting to make more sense, I was really lost with the one you had before. Question: how does Jamie being a clone affect her relationship to Hunter? He seemed to be pretty chill with it, despite his mom being a genetic copy of his real mother.
Cool stuff, keep it up.
knomer: I like your character. Not extremely original but unique in Void City (I think ...) I also really like your style. It's sketchy but strong. Good stuff. Not much is going on with your fight vs. JC other than Paddy checkin out Ms. Chase's best ass-ets (last panel) Nice.
manofdanger: Better story. Great art. However, I wish you would have left off some characters and focused more on the fight. It's a little complicated, this entangled web of Void characters and how they relate to Jamie Chase. Also, you gotta get your stuff proofread, man. Typos are totally distracting. In any case, I gave you my vote on this one.
Good job you two.
Hmm, not much going on in the Paddy fight. Disappointing. Liked the little I did see though, just wish there was more to it.
ManofDanger's looked really good in places and really sloppy in others. Though I thought it was a good, fast paced story, I was taken out of it by the bad grammar and extra unnecessary frames. Votes went to Jamie Chase for the more complete, better looking comic.
damn it i didn't fix page 2!! OK please forgive the typo on page 2...eleven and Eggo...sent the wrong one! best of luck paddy. i can see these two becoming very hateful of each other!
this fight is gonna be good.cant wait to see the finishes.ive had the pleasure of seein some of manordangers pages and they r his best yet.so look out!
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