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Here's Harlow Post Apocalypse

Feels sad man

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THE INCUBATOR / Re: SilverBlaze's Incubation pod
« on: Sep 14, 2018, 09:54 PM »
Just wondering how this sounds, if there's anything I can make sound better.
Since page 3 is currently the page that's not yet been re-sketched, there's chance to design it much better. The current script that's posted here is already the redesigned page script, so it's generally what I'm looking for. I just want to know if it can be improved in some way.

Spoiler: show

PAGE [3] (Pichi's room) (resketch page, dialogue needs work)
  • Panel 1 (Pichi punches the wall)
    • Pichi: “Bitch!”

  • Panel 2 (Cat Butler hands Pichi her coat)
    • Pichi: “She’s a fool for being so complacent.”

  • Panel 3+4 (Pichi puts on her coat and stops in front of the door)
    • Pichi: “Our numbers are declining. Our resources are low.”
       - “I can not trust her to make the right choices anymore.”

  • Panel 5 (Pichi turns her head)
    • Pichi: “If I don’t leave now, everything will be lost.”
       - “Please take care of mother.”
    • Cat Butler: “Of course Ma’am.”

  • Panel 6+7+8 ({Vertical pannels} camera pans from in front of Pichi, over her head as she looks up to the sky and leads to the final page angle)
    • Pichi: (thought) “She wants everything to stay the same…”
       - “The world does not listen to wants…”
       - “But... maybe a wish…”


See previous pages for context.

All I could say is maybe a couple of those panels could be combined in terms of dialogue like panels 3+ 4 could be one panel of a dynamic shot of her putting on a coat as she walks out also separating the final 3 panels make the dialogue sound awkward just think of those taking the same time as the time between other panels and speaking it with that time gap sounds a tiny bit weird. But honestly that's a bit pedantic and there are no crippling story issues you need to worry about, Its a good cohesive story and we get to see the characters motivation for why they end up at void. However overall I will say the story is the least important part of the intro, so long as your panels are organized right and the font you are using is readable and bubbles decent you should be set. The intro is mainly a showcase of all the technical skills that you can consistently draw a character and backgrounds, I think you may also need a more humanoid character in the intro just to show you can do humans. But I think you could just make the butler that and be set.

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THE INCUBATOR / Re: SilverBlaze's Incubation pod
« on: Sep 13, 2018, 12:17 AM »
Time to get this show back on the road!
I'm getting Pichi Kean back up to speed and I'm going to be submitting her in by the end of the month!
That's my goal! >:U

Anyway. To start things rolling again, I'm going to post in the character information I have.



As you can see, Pichi's ref sheet is not quite finished. I have a few things left to do with it, but it's pretty close to ready.
That ref looks pretty good, though when doing the ref for submission you may want to Pichi Kean on top since people may think that top design is the character they would be drawing. Other than that it looks pretty complete, hows the intro pages looking?

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VOID University / Re: Mentor and Trainee Roulette [REVIVAL]
« on: Aug 17, 2018, 11:17 PM »
Arts and i would like to fight sumiko vs harlow
Yep that is what we are going to do.

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VOID University / Re: Mentor and Trainee Roulette [REVIVAL]
« on: Aug 17, 2018, 04:35 PM »
I’d like to emotionally torment ArtsAndGoodies, if he’s up for it.
Awesome I welcome it, sides the idea of a 1 weeker is a scary prospect as well but I still need to go for it.

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Art Jams / Re: White Party jam
« on: Aug 16, 2018, 01:18 AM »
While Harlow wouldn't dress up like this himself I would hope someone fashion forward would be able to put him in this outfit cause putting Harlow in a dress is super cute.

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New here? / Re: INTRODUCE YOURSELF
« on: Aug 14, 2018, 09:41 PM »
Heyoooooo! I'm Jay- Imma' looooong time lurker, been wanting to join since like....2006? But honestly, I was young and dumb and not entirely confident in my art skills at the time. Friggin' 12 years later Void came up in recent conversation with friends and I figured I'd give it a shot this time around. I'm looking for some hardcore critiques to push myself and better my art further! <3
Welcome back and good luck, look forward to seeing your art and make sure to stop by the discord as that is very active and the best place to get quick crits on your stuff, though discord is not good at keeping stuff archived so having an incubator thread will be good for that as well.

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VOID University / Re: Mentor and Trainee Roulette [REVIVAL]
« on: Aug 09, 2018, 03:28 PM »
The prospect of one week terrifies me as I struggle with 4 weekers and getting around 4-5 pages but I need to try this. I work full time but would like to screen share on google share and discord is by far the best way to contact and keep in touch with me. I use all digital and currently using clip studio. I get off work at 8 PM EST monday- wednesday, I have thursdays off, get off work Friday 6 PM, and Saturdays 3 PM

I will be aiming for 2 fully inked pages. So my focus would be on need helping making construction of characters; which i'm terrible at doing consistently, and have no idea what I'm doing when I break down characters into shapes or how to really apply that. however I have managed to salvage that but I end up making it worse with my inks which are also really bad. So the main things i need help with are inks and construction and lines of action. The things I need the least help with are writing and layouts (only because I constantly redo them so I will need help anyways since I know I need to redo my writing a couple times or at the very least the dialogue). while i do also really need help with coloring and shading it's not feasible to try and do that in this time for me. I'm also super slow so really i would like ways to do my stuff smarter since I feel like a lot of what I do is just really inefficient.

For mentors Heathen and Jiisuri both have inks I like but I'm so poor with them pretty sure any mentor can help level up my stuff.

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VOID Characters and Comics / Re: Official VOID Shitpost Thread!
« on: Jul 12, 2018, 11:23 PM »

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THE INCUBATOR / Re: Denim Robot Model 330 (INCUBATOR)
« on: Jul 12, 2018, 09:59 PM »
That's pretty interesting, are you going to do your comics in the pixel format as well? I look forward to seeing the storyboards and sketches for that.

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VOID Characters and Comics / Re: Character Voices
« on: Jul 10, 2018, 10:56 PM »
Harlow sounds something like Edward Elric from Full metal alchemist though maybe a bit more posh and less yelly most of the time. though a future power up Harlow may be becoming the Fur Metal Alchemist.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V3kmafm9bqA

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spit spat, time to chat / Re: DOIV CITY Tournament
« on: Jul 07, 2018, 02:03 PM »
I would be interested though would this be 1 week battles or two week ones? I would prefer two week ones just cause i work full time and am not ready. though i do have two version of nega harlow so not sure which would be more fitting.

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VOID Characters and Comics / Re: Challenges Thread
« on: Jun 17, 2018, 05:40 PM »
Looking for another 4-5 weeker match, still aiming for around the 4-6 page length on my end with full time work and stuff.

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Art Jams / Re: LGBT+ Jam
« on: Jun 16, 2018, 10:52 PM »
Here's a cute Pic of Harlow since he's Pansexual. He is also poly-amorous

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Resources & Tutorials / Re: Desi's Comic Scheduling Class
« on: Jun 15, 2018, 06:17 PM »
I am interested in this, however i'm not yet currently in a battle, but I would like scheduling advice for my next battle. However I do also work full time so that's 40 hours a week of working so i don't get as much time to do art as some people on the site so i'm curious how that would factor into your formula.

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Art Jams / Re: Draw witcher crap hand jam
« on: Jun 12, 2018, 12:16 AM »
Since i started the conversation again in the discord I will post my quick tablet attempt

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Art Jams / Re: Pin up jam [18+] NSFW
« on: Jun 05, 2018, 08:53 PM »
Here have a pinup with Harlow showing off his glorious tummy fluff and toe beans

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Art Jams / Re: Tea Party Panic (Secret Santa Style Event)
« on: May 12, 2018, 03:28 PM »

I got Alouisse Ver for my secret tea party so I did it with Vicente ending his show with class.

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Art Jams / Re: Tea Party Panic (Secret Santa Style Event)
« on: Apr 30, 2018, 10:25 PM »
Sure I will join this with Harlow.

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VOID Characters and Comics / Re: Challenges Thread
« on: Apr 25, 2018, 10:18 PM »
I'm looking for a 4 or 5 week match for Harlow. This is just my first match and I'm aiming to actually be able to complete a 5-6 page comic in that time which is a lot for me since i'm still learning and slow and also work full time.

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Art Jams / Re: Hogwarts Jam
« on: Apr 22, 2018, 11:47 PM »
We can't all be wizards. Harlow is just a muggle cat.

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THE INCUBATOR / Re: Arts&Goodies character's
« on: Apr 04, 2018, 11:04 PM »
So I think I finally got the inks for the pages finished I posted bigger sizes in the discord since forum posting can be a bit tricky.




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THE INCUBATOR / Re: Arts&Goodies character's
« on: Jan 27, 2018, 08:47 PM »
Very nice! Interesting set of gadgets he has there. Hope to see your intro soon~
Thanks i started storyboarding and doing the script for it now
also here is the completed refsheet

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THE INCUBATOR / Re: Arts&Goodies character's
« on: Jan 25, 2018, 11:14 PM »
The new outfit looks spiffy! Can't wait to see more from this one, and I hope Yale gets in sometime too!
Thanks and eventually I will bring Yale back, but i think i needed to change gears and try something very different.
I am almost done with Harlow's refsheet and I think I will make his last name Ironlocke. I also started scripting out the intro story.

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THE INCUBATOR / Re: Arts&Goodies character's
« on: Jan 16, 2018, 12:38 AM »
So i got a better outfit for him and a good pose for the main pose for his ref sheet

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