Virtua vs. Harvey

Virtua vs. Harvey

Virtua vs. Harvey


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ArtsandGoodies
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# 7   Posted: Aug 18 2018, 09:16 PM
MR Pr: Your characters have gotten better and the poses look  better. As someone else who sucks at backgrounds a quick thing you can do to make your backgrounds have a bit more going on is adding a 2 color semi transparent gradient, With a light color and a dark color you move the gradients in a way where it it looks like they're following the light source and it helps give your backgrounds not just being on flat color it also doesn't take too long to do as well, you will also want to work on adding more hard elements in the setting that stand out but this was a 1 weeker so you have limited time for that.

Also there are a couple things you can do to make the clarity of your comics stronger without spending much more time or any more time than you did when doing this. First you should have characters stay on the same side of panels in a page.  In page 1 Virtua is to the left of Harvey in all bu the final panel and in page 2 virtua is to the right of Harvey in all but the 2nd to final panel. While in the first page it's not that bad in the second one its a little confusing since there was no action panel leading up to the side switch and then she ends up back on the other side again. This small distraction and confusion can be easily avoided by switching the orientation on that panel and just in general keeping that in mind when storyboarding.

You also need stronger gutters in your pages. Since the gutters are the same background at times they're basically not there which means we don't have any visual cue of breaks in action and sometimes where to go when two panels are too close to each other. I would also stick to only having one panel being borderless since it gives a special emphasis on that panel where as making multiple panels not have borders leads to a bit of confusion and clutter.
Overall good job with this and a lot of the clarity issues are pretty simple fixes so I look forward to it since your characters are definitely improving.

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# 6   Posted: Aug 13 2018, 12:41 AM
MrPr: Nice comic! First thing I gotta mention, I know background improvement has been mentioned time and time again but I'm gonna bring it up again because I actually couldn't discern how I was supposed to read this comic panel-to-panel on a first read (Page three is the exception) with the lack of environmental objects, as well as the background itself being the same dark-blue throughout without any change to reflect the atmosphere of the conversation. As Dechado said, some zoomed out shots would be nice as well.
Otherwise enjoyed the comic! Hope to see more about Virtua's past/development soon~

Sean: Hope things are going alright (Or turn up better) on your end! Would love to see Harv action in the future :>

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# 5   Posted: Aug 12 2018, 09:11 PM
MrPr: Sweet and short. I like Virtua as a character a lot. She don't care about background, looks (or smell). If you're nice to her, she'll be nice to you.
I feel your drawings feel less stiff now, I like how Harvey looks on the 5th panel of th last page. Good job on the color changes, it fit the atmosphere of the sudden explosion.
Only real thing I could say is that don't be afraid to draw zoomed out shots. Most of this comic had zoom ins to the character's faces.

Aaaaah nooo, Astro, what happened? D:

MrPr1993
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# 4   Posted: Aug 12 2018, 07:24 PM
Oh my! =0 Hope I do see more of Harv tho!

Heathen
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# 3   Posted: Aug 12 2018, 06:55 PM
MrPr:  I'm just as confused as Virtua about what happened, but I was kind of into it. Wish you could've done more.

Sean: Looking forward to seeing that beyond battle!

MrPr1993
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# 2   Posted: Aug 4 2018, 08:26 AM
Time to draw some beef!

Astro Sean
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# 1   Posted: Aug 4 2018, 08:09 AM
Time to shake off some of the rust

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Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Aug 18th, 2018
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