Crikey Dile vs. Terminal

Crikey Dile vs. Terminal

by Golden


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tags: crikey dile, terminal

by Q-Bit


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ArtsandGoodies
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# 8   Posted: Jul 23 2018, 06:09 PM
I really like the style this comic was done in and the grayscale you did for this, your inks are super good.
I didn't really like the story for this but I know you were busy with SRT while this was going on and this was a random match. However I will bring up one thing. How was he able to hide there for two weeks? More importantly while he did steal food from them how did he shower or go to the bathroom during that two weeks? While we don't ever really draw characters doing these things they are important for humans and in situations like this they do need to be addressed. I think it would have worked if it was just the next day and not two weeks. Terminal realizing how bad his plan was when he  first needs to go the bathroom or started to smell from a lack of a shower. While bodily functions are not something you need to show it's something that does need to be accounted for and addressed in situations like this in order to sell it or even provide more humor.

MyHatsEatPeople
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# 7   Posted: Jul 23 2018, 03:46 AM
Goldie Goldie Goldie

My lovely sweet Goldie.

First off I want to congratulate you on getting this comic completed, since you're in the midst of a tournament (Like a mad woman) and we're close friends so I know what other life stuff you've got hampering you from time to time. You have made me a proud egg.

I know you struggled what to do with Terminal, since this match-up was a random set up with one of the mash-ups. So you've done well making a simple straightfoward funny comic, that also features your top notch anatomy and perspective skills. I don't want to concentrate too much on critiquing this comic mainly because I know the main goal was just getting it out and completed without taking any short cuts - though I can tell you, your buildings could use a little more character but they serve their purpose.  My main tip is voicing what Jii pointed out about screentones, the dots are way too sparse and far apart to really be effective, go for something much tighter next time, and as well as previously suggested, mix up which tones you use.

Wirecat
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# 6   Posted: Jul 21 2018, 01:24 PM
A fun little comic that had me chuckling quite a lot by the last page. Your facial expressions are top notch and the story was pretty unpredictable which can be hard to achieve on 4 pages.

The only small nitpicks I have are that the first two sentences said by crikey are way too similar and felt like she was repeating herself.
The third page is way bigger than the other pages, and the rooms/ environments the characters walk around it feels a little empty at times.

      Edited Jul 21 2018,  01:29 PM by Wirecat

Jiisuri
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# 5   Posted: Jul 20 2018, 07:51 AM
Tip from someone who's been trying to make screentones work and knows firsthand: you do not want to have the same exact dot pattern on the background and the character at the same time. It makes the character blend right into the background. If you have huge dots for the background you'll want to apply finer smaller dots on the character with portions erased away based on the lighting of the scene. That or go with hatching instead on the characters. Or the other way round.

Also, be very careful with those big dot or negative space dot patterns, my eyes are getting fuzzy looking at these because of something weird going on with it.

Majikura
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# 4   Posted: Jul 19 2018, 06:54 AM
While I do see the necessity for establishing a new location for Crikey, in the end you fell victim to writing a story featuring one of the three most common void fights: fighting over food.  And because of that, it's not particularly interesting.

Golden
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# 3   Posted: Jul 18 2018, 05:22 AM
I’m so sorry to hear q-bit, I was looking forward to your story. Hope that you have the time to do it as a BB, and I wish you luck!

Q-Bit
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# 2   Posted: Jul 17 2018, 11:21 AM
I hate to say it, but I'm not going to be able to submit this on time. Sorry everyone. I'll try to get it posted as a BB when time allows.

yarnwitch
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# 1   Posted: Jul 5 2018, 10:53 AM
OHHH HEY IM SUPER HYPE ABOUT THIS!! I can't even imagine how they'd interact so i'm extra curious to see y'all's stories.

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