Cassidy Madson vs. Beo

Cassidy Madson vs. Beo

Cassidy Madson vs. Beo


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by Nothin


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Bobo
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# 7   Posted: May 7 2018, 01:54 PM
Nothin, it sucks that this is so unfinished, but I just had to say I squee'd at how cute Corn and Beo are together! I also love how you both used Cassidy's lactose-intolerance as a major plot point haha.

Kozispoon
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# 6   Posted: May 6 2018, 09:59 PM
MRPR1993- It was a good effort, but as I turned each page, your quality took a dive and soon after, your story. I wasn't quite sure what was really going on by comics end ^^;

NOTHIN- I can't read this.

Astrodile
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# 5   Posted: May 3 2018, 09:47 AM
Good work to the both of y'all! Even if unfinished, I'm happy that you both could submit a comic regardless.

PR: Your art is definitely improving! However if there's one thing I noticed on a first read, Cassidy sticks out like a sore thumb among the environments warm color palette, more then the other characters who had a more neutral color scheme which still matched more then her stark contrast. I don't know whether you intended this or not, but it wasn't too appealing to my eye, especially when parts of the environment and characters had lighting/shading while she (And the two robot girls, who are VERY cute by the way!) didn't. If you intended it so, then let it be, but I recommend not using such strong colors next time. I agree with Reecer about the writing, it would've been nice if Beo was actually a bit more relevant to Cassidy's plot in this comic then just an employee who gets caught in their antics.

Nothin: There's not much to say that others haven't, but I do really think the ending/resolution is really cute haha. The transition from Beo successfully pinning the mech to Stitches and him confronting Cassidy is pretty sudden, but that's just about all I've got to say.

Happy August 19th! -Reecer6
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# 4   Posted: May 2 2018, 08:32 AM
PR: Man, your art is actually really coming into its own. The cityscape had a very certain style to it and your lifework is very much sprucing up! The story for this was very so-so for me though, with the meeting with Beo being totally inconsequential and not having to do with Cassidy getting her mech back at all.

Nothin: The plot here was kinda lukewarm itself, at least in terms of the central conflict, but the writing definitely saves it, and the date was cute! Page 10 was really neat too. The way you do speech bubbles is really full of life, but seeing the number of times you do that whole large-letter-shout thing, I feel like, I think, you should either switch up the font or do it less frequently? Otherwise, it loses its uniqueness and feels too cookie-cutter.

      Edited May 2 2018,  08:35 AM by Happy August 19th! -Reecer6

yarnwitch
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# 3   Posted: May 1 2018, 10:19 AM
AN ARTIST REMATCH FROM SDT!!! Awesome!

So, i enjoyed these both cause they were pretty silly. AND ABOUT ICE CREAM!!!

@mrpr I really liked the malfunction with the armory. That was hilarious to me for some reason. Cassidy seemed like she had a pretty clear goal, but honestly, a random item that isn't explained is a teensy bit cheap for me plotwise, but thats a personal preferemce.

@nothin AYYYY its dat boi. My sides are in pain from the "i built it that way!"
I know people are going to mostly comment that it wasn't finished, but I would like to encourage more critique on the writing, pacing, and layout. I found it to be really well done, despite the sketchiness. I will say at this art level, I had trouble differentiating beo and his date. As well, i feel like Cassidy would have benefitted from an exaggeration of those huge glasses of hers. (If they are actually her eyes, im sorry mrpr ;_;) a really fun read, and the ending was on a perfect note for me.

Desichan
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# 2   Posted: Apr 8 2018, 03:24 PM
Is super duper duper hyped to see these adorable charas!!!

Futreblot
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# 1   Posted: Apr 6 2018, 10:03 AM
Excited to see this when it’s done

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: May 7th, 2018
Votes Cast: 17
Page Views: 272
Winner: MrPr1993

 

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