Love Child Tag Team Death Tournament, Round 2 / Lalala vs. Azure & Co

Love Child Tag Team Death Tournament, Round 2 — Lalala vs. Azure & Co

by Desichan and cats


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by zee and Rhimwill


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zee
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# 15   Posted: Apr 10 2018, 04:23 PM
It's a little late again, but I still want to say thank you for all the comments and critiques.
And thanks to Desi and Cat for this awesome round! Lalala was so much fun, I really, really enjoyed both making and reading these comics!

Flutterbyes
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# 14   Posted: Apr 6 2018, 08:52 PM
Desichats: Nice use of style shift! Your combo of strong dark inks and pastel cuteness is really strong. I love the cartoony things like pointing out of one panel into another on page 3. "I'm not a monster, I'm LALA!" was a great line, like something out of a creepy-cute children's book. Some of the action, like the sneak attack and the violent comeback, could have been a touch clearer.

Zeemwill: Interesting to see the cruel Lalala tragic pop idol victimized by her "servants" in a standalone story! You both changed your opponent and made the story still about them at the core, and it makes a good story, but I suppose you can't deny something is missing. Azure's such a fanboy, but since the triplets are the real star for most of the comic, I forgot and then saw his shirt and cracked up.

ArtsandGoodies
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# 13   Posted: Apr 6 2018, 08:41 PM
Both of these comics are very good and both manage to have improved from the last one.
Team Desicat: I love how much more of a solid direction you gave Lalala and the creepy two sided personality you solidified for her in this.

Team RhimZee: Both your comics have been fantastic and this story was very enjoyable and her sacrifice at the end was well done and that final panel really got me.

Shen
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# 12   Posted: Apr 6 2018, 07:23 PM
I love both of these comics, yall are so talented and Lala and Azure are such great characters, im sad you cant both win! I love Lala's yandere and Azure being a fangirl, and these are both fantastically written with gorgeous colours! I hope in the end we all live on in the high school AU~

cats
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# 11   Posted: Apr 5 2018, 09:38 AM
Just wanted to let you guys know we really appreciate the critiques! We took them to account from the first round and I'm glad it's showing. We think it might be an important to mention however that we actually switched roles this time around. Desi did most of the sketching and the Ink work while I did the layouts and coloring. During round one, It was my inks with Desi's coloring style.
We know it's about how well we work together as a team but if this seems like a dip in quality, it's because we both decided to tackle this comic differently o/

Kozispoon
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# 10   Posted: Apr 4 2018, 08:54 PM
TEAM DESICAT- Your style really lends itself well to your opponent. I already thought Azure was pretty cute, but now they're ridiculously adorable.
It's great to see a 'bad guy' be so cute and this second round really ups the ante.Its about time we had some real blood on our hands- bug brother blood! Also I see you took some of the crit into account back in round one about the stakes as I really felt the danger with Lala being captured and strapped down. The added darting eyeballs was a nice touch. Even the tears welling up in her eyes once she gets loose really adds more dimension to her apart from loud bratty bad guy. I know I'm just focusing on the little things, but for me its the little things and details that build up a cool story.
That said, it seems the rigors of the tournament is bleeding into the quality of the work. Rally! Get yourself back to that round one caliber quality! :D

TEAM RHIMZEE- Ugh those colors, SO GOOD. Honestly from the thumbnails alone, I got such a lovely cohesive color story from beginning to end. Opening up these pages did not disappoint- and AH HA! I was right, there was a little Capgras lurkin round in there. Nice in-void easter egg and what could it meeeeeean? :DD
I loved the build up to cheering Lalala on. Totally cut from a concert anime- even in her "Everyone.." lines, but it wasn't cheesy. Just the right amount of garnish to make it a familiar nod that made me smile.
There really would be no way to kill this opponent and come out the other side with a likable protagonist, so the decision to have her self sacrifice was not only clever, but a very heroic, if not bittersweet ending. Still though, I miss the brash and bratty personality Desicat forged in round one here. We only got a halfhearted swat of a newspaper. Where's your opponents fire?

PyrasTerran
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# 9   Posted: Apr 4 2018, 08:19 PM
Team DesiCats: Hm, there seems to be a quality dip in this comic from the last one, otherwise entertaining and such but the drop is noticeable

Team ZeeRhim: As expected, you threw down the gold standard once more :) Just keep being

William_Duel
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# 8   Posted: Apr 2 2018, 05:18 PM
Desicat: You guys work very well together.  It's funny since you guys entered Void around the same time too.  There's something about the quality of the lines that bugs me where it could be smoother.  I don't know whether it's a bad brush tool or that you're simply working in a low DPI?  Always work in high resolution.  I find it funny that the glitter is less pronounced here given Desi's penchant for glittery highlights.  I find it too small here and they could be a bit more pronounced?  I enjoyed the expressiveness of your character here.  It's very fun to watch that exaggerated emotion.  The only place where it falters for me is page 11.  Azure's expression doesn't seem right to me for someone witnessing their brother get torn in two.  I think it needed a bit more horror to their expression.  Great work though guys.

Zeewill: It is hard for me to judge your comics.  I think they are an impressive cut.  Fun ideas and creative storytelling.  The only thing I feel I can suggest is for you guys to try to push yourselves creatively and keep up the quality.

Bobo
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# 7   Posted: Mar 30 2018, 02:04 PM
Spoiler: "Cat-chan" • show
Leave it to you two to create a creepy feeling in a house full of hearts, bunnies, and pink! This comic was chilling just as much as it was fun to look at. The contrast of Azure crying as his brothers are violently murdered against Lala's complete lack of empathy and seeming inability to comprehend the consequences of her actions gave me chills. You guys gave me exactly what I asked for last round and completely blew me away with your writing!

I do think the art suffers a bit from how your stylized backgrounds sometimes lose their sense of space and it's unclear from panel to panel exactly where various little details are in the room, but honestly I think that's more a nitpick than anything. It didn't take away from my ability to enjoy the story, just provided a little bit of confusion in continuity between panels. I noticed this mostly at the beginning with the decorations on the walls of Lala's house. Speaking of which, I'm dying to know what's going on with Fawn on page 2; it seems like she's maybe not aware of her surroundings enough to notice Azure & Co. being in the room? Either that, or she let them in and just didn't suspect what they were up to, but that's less creepy haha. The family portrait with Lala between her two moms is really cute, btw.

Some other notes: I loved the animation on page 5; it really helped establish the disorienting nature of Lala suddenly waking up strapped to a table without her staff or bunnies to help her. And I loved the little details in the backgrounds throughout the story, like the heart around Misery's picture, Lala's bunny laptop, and the domination plan on her bedroom wall. I also really love how you made me empathize with Lala as she was trapped and being experimented on, right before she freed herself and completely destroyed her enemies. Augh, you guys just did such a good job with this one, the ending was so perfect, and I just loved it!


Spoiler: "ZeeWill" • show
Lala as a famous pop idol was such a fun idea! I wasn't expecting what you did with the bunnies, and I have mixed feelings about it. On one hand, having these cute little harmless-looking creatures be some sort of eldritch hivemind virus thing connects Lala's story with the plot you established with Terrance last round really well. On the other hand, I was kind of disappointed with Lala being so harmless and goodhearted haha. Maybe it's just personal bias, but I also think making your opponent a good guy made it thematically similar to last round. The plot was different, but at the most basic level it was still essentially Azure & Co studying this virus -> they encounter a friend who is infected by it -> the friend dies in a tragic way. I think my favorite part of this comic was actually the fact that the three spider brothers seemed to expect Lala to die along with her bunnies and didn't say anything to her. That absolute logic without emotion, especially in contrast with Azure's enthusiasm and dramatic, almost sappy support of Lala at the end, revealed a lot about all of their characters.

Art-wise, this was a solid comic. The detail you guys put into all of the alien species in attendance is impressive and added so much to the real feeling of the environment, and it also made their deaths feel more real as well, since they weren't just faceless, generic crowd members.

This was a solid comic, you guys! I didn't cry as much as last round, but Lala making that sacrifice was really sweet, and this sort of continuing theme of Azure & Co. being left to clean up the aftermath of these viruses or whatever they are is tragic. The different personalities of Azure and her brothers is really cool to see, too. I think personally I didn't feel super invested emotionally in the characters in this comic, but it was still a very strong story with clean, detailed art that I'm still amazed that you guys can pull off so consistently and so quickly!

Desichan
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# 6   Posted: Mar 30 2018, 10:27 AM
Good job Cat, I'm proud of what we got out here!


Zee and Rhim!!! Ahmigosh this is so beautiful a comic like gosh, the screaming crowds are amazing, Lala is amazing, your adorable children are amazing!!! Gosh there's so much I love about this comic, and like yeah I'm so happy to have gotten the opportunity to fight you guys!

That moment when you find out Lala's true nature was amazing, THE BUNNIES HAVE CORRUPTED HER!!! And when the crowd is awkwardly cheering her on, ohmigosh its so so so good! I love how you guys put her in your comic, its clear you made her fit seamlessly with the world... Or should I say universe you've created! The colors are absolutely amazing as always, I especially love the glow type feel you see going on in the fifth page! It was so cute when they defeated the rabbit overlords!

Lala is such a hero in your guys's comic, tis beautiful!

yarnwitch
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# 5   Posted: Mar 30 2018, 09:04 AM
Desicat - ahhhhhhh you've done really well with the character personalities! I love the writing in this and that last page was a bit goosebumpy. I like knowing how the bunnies are made! I wish some of the colors had gotten darker and more intense on your more action pages to shift the tone, but overall I loved this.

Zeewill- WHY MUST YOU MAKE ME CRY!?! I don't even know what to say anymore!?!?

GPS-Device
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# 4   Posted: Mar 30 2018, 08:54 AM
Both of these comics came out genuinely pretty damned good. Be proud, the lot of ya.

Desi and Cats: As to be expected, this is a cute comic. The linework and forms can be a bit loose, but you play it off well by having exaggerated and cartoonish emotions and movements, and it blends very well together. Speaking of cartoonish, y'all even have the little gif in there. It's a nice touch, but the movement of the eyes feels a little off. Eyes move in a very snappy manner. The speed of them here is a little off, and I'll admit it might have been better as a still image. Or even better, letting us see the room from Lalala's perspective! Nothing sells a moment of fear or panic, like letting the reader see it how the character views a scene. It can also be a fun way to vary up your camera angles on occasion! Y'all do a great job of playing of Lalala's bratty, childish nature, and it's a lot of fun.
A very strong showing overall. Maybe just a bit more stuff in the background to fill out the scenes, but good nonetheless!

Zee and Rhim: Visually fantastic! There's really not a lot of negatives to be had, this comic works very well for itself. You continue to push the narrative you're building with the character, while also giving us a more grounded and "human" side to Azure. And you also do one of my favorite things death tournaments can encourage. You reinvent the opponents character for your narrative. It's a bold move a lot of people are too nervous to take, but it's executed well, because you've made it so this comic couldn't happen with anyone else. It's a role that can only be filled by the Lalala you wrote. The only nitpick I have is I wish y'all had kept up the interesting lighting like in the first page! Stage lights are bright and intense, but the lighting feels no stronger than the scenes backstage. Especially with the nature of a concert, I just feel like it was a missed opportunity to play with stronger, more impactful lighting and color schemes to enforce the mood, and would have really helped sell the tension in the scene.
Great work visually, solid work narratively, I just wish y'all had pushed it even further beyond after the taste of fun colors and lights the first page gave!

!bangarang!
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# 3   Posted: Mar 30 2018, 07:59 AM
Oh my god they're both fantastic

zee
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# 2   Posted: Mar 15 2018, 09:20 PM
Best of luck you guys, can't wait to see how this goes!

Shen
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# 1   Posted: Mar 15 2018, 03:56 PM
OH NO LOL this is ALSO gonna be really cute!

Comic Details -

 
Type: Death Match
Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Apr 6th, 2018
Votes Cast: 27
Page Views: 557
Winner: zee and Rhimwill

 

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