it's not over yet, Dyami / Herself vs. Dyami

it's not over yet, Dyami — Herself vs. Dyami


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SwagginMun
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# 8   Posted: Mar 12 2018, 01:18 AM
Fred I just wanted to thank you for the challenge; Your response was hilarious and I was happily surprised with the direction you took it!

As for everyone who's posted in comments, thank you for the advice! I really appreciate the feedback, and am really trying to make some substantial comics in the future! Thank you again for ya'lls words of wisdom, and thank you Fred for the challenge. GG and Cheers! :D

zee
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# 7   Posted: Mar 11 2018, 07:44 PM
Fred -
This was cute! Definitely a good quick laugh.
I love these quick/ short comics you've been doing in general, super amusing.

Swagginmun -
You have a lovely style and I really like the soft blur quality to the lines, it's nice!
I will echo what others have said about making the pages or panels (and especially text) a bit smaller so that everything is easier to read immediately. I personally enjoy the long page format and definitely think it's something you can make work, just consider how much of what takes up how much of the screen.  
Overall I want to say great job with this comic, I'm seriously craving to see more of your art here. Keep it up!

      Edited Mar 11 2018,  07:46 PM by zee

Monday
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# 6   Posted: Mar 9 2018, 10:00 AM
fred: Its starting to look like you're figuring out your style since you first came here. As usual this is a walk in the park for you and your ante jokes got a chuckle out of me. Herself was probably my favorite character from you if only because the stories she told was weaponized slice of life.

swaggin: I think your images could be a liiiittle bit tinier, all the better to absorb the gracefullness of your lines. Besides all that this stuff flows really well and leaves a good outro for those that got taken out on the first round. This SDT was fiery as it was melancholy all the way down.

Catalessi
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# 5   Posted: Mar 9 2018, 05:59 AM
fred: nice small comic, as always

swaggin: i think you have a good style! you could work over panel composition, the others already gave you good advice for that

cheers!

Alouisse Ver
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# 4   Posted: Mar 8 2018, 10:18 AM

Fred:

There's not a whole lot to say! Short, sweet, and to the point.

I dig the thick lines you used for this. It works well with the colors you chose.

Overall, an amusing, short, and quick read.


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Swagginmuffin:  

Nice to see more of Dyami! I'm in love with the way your char is designed! If you're thinking about bringing the char back, as Symon said, there's always resurrection tournament! Or as Shen said, there's always the entire month of October. Would love to see more of this char!

Here's what I have to say:

*If possible, it would be beneficial to the reader to have the comic at a lower resolution.

*Some sort of background or toning would really benefit this comic. As well as just tidying up the whites and greys for both of the characters.


--Speech bubbles are another area that can be improved on.

+ The outline with of the bubbles are too thick. The letters are repeatedly shown to be going over the lines of the speech bubble.

+ On page 2, not sure if it was intentional to not have any balloon tail for Dyami in the first panel. LuckilyI was able to understand due to both characters having different colors and fonts.

+ And finally, just a little tidier on adding the balloon tails. There are a handful of speech bubbles with tails that appear to be sketched on quickly with parts of white not being cleaned up afterward to make them look neater. Example being page 4 panel 1.

Overall, I liked the tone of the comic. It was a nice look at both of the characters (un?)lives after the events of SDT. I enjoyed the way you drew your expressions!  10/10.

Shen
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# 3   Posted: Mar 5 2018, 05:54 PM
Fred in here drawing my exact creative process in comic form XD XD 10/10 i laughed!

swaggin im not completely sure i totally understood all the rain metaphors, i feel like theres a lot of information i dont have with like, the markings and stuff? but i like your decision to have them both dealing together with the consequences of the tournament they were in. i feel bad Dyami died i was really interested in seeing what you would do with him so i hope you'll battle again in October, and meanwhile please consider an intro story for a new character to join us!

Symon_says
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# 2   Posted: Mar 5 2018, 01:49 PM
Always fun to see the characters in different scenarios. Especially if it isn't in a likely one.

Fred v2.0.1, naughty, is this fifty shades of Fred? Is there more? 8p

Swagginmun, don't let them post death blues get ya down! There is always the speed resurrection tournament?

You all are great, keep it up!

Fred v2.0.1
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# 1   Posted: Jan 28 2018, 04:24 AM
I'm thrilled to see what you can cook for us!

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Drawing Time: 5 weeks
Ended: Mar 11th, 2018
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