Anvil vs. Jane Blonde

Anvil vs. Jane Blonde


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Happy June 24th! -Reecer6
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# 8   Posted: Feb 12 2018, 06:32 AM
yeaaaaaah literally nothing happened in my comic, super sorry about that. it's definitely one of the weakest things i've written, and i knew that like, halfway through the first draft. the battle was still a good idea, i guess i just... didn't have much to add other than "these two people are probably on good relations with each other." hopefully, this isn't representative of how future anvil comics will be!

@Flutter: man, you're critiqueing one of the few parts of this comic i like! that thing was precisely as short and humorous as i wanted it to be and i'll almost definitely be doing it more often because abridgment is one of the best forms of humor there is. it really, really amuses me, and that's all that matters.

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# 7   Posted: Feb 10 2018, 08:40 PM
Reecer: A short, but sweet comic about politics. Not sure how I feel about that note. Certainly a lot more helpful than the classic comic book "See Avengers #5,0000" note. Maybe there could have been a briefer, more humorous way to do it. I don't know if I get the punchline, but I liked this interaction between the characters.

Kent: I'm not sure how a mechanical being benefits from the gym, but I'm not complaining. Some real fun politics and drama going on here, and the characters presented entertainingly enough to keep the dialog from getting boring.

Hellis
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# 6   Posted: Feb 10 2018, 02:39 AM
Reecer: As much as I love fictional politics, your comic ended up feeling very.. non eventful. I am a fan of Anvils penchant for speaking, but when the speaking isn't the companion for a clear direction for the character or an event, it feels like it leads nowhere. The interaction with Jane felt secondary and didn't really highlight either character. Not your strongest work.

Kent: I really liked the flow of your comic and the lead up to the "Twist" was a fun read!

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# 5   Posted: Feb 8 2018, 08:04 PM
Reecer: youve been doing really good at integrating your characters with your backgrounds and giving them a world to live in. I am afraid to say that I couldnt quite get into the story.... im not saying theres no place for politics in comics but im far enough removed from the target audience that i cant even tell if anything happened or not except an alliance between Anvil and Jane. So hopefully you get critted next by someone smarter than me @_@ the composition and worldbuilding was great in the first 2 pages but it sort of fell apart by page 3.
Kent: I like the enemies-to-friends dynamic youve built! seeing jane's political credentials called into question was a lot of fun. This is why I voted for Buster =P I like the different outfits you put on Anvil's blocky robot body. the party scene was my favorite. This is some excellent writing and good relationship.

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# 4   Posted: Feb 8 2018, 06:48 PM
this applies to both of you: I would advise against placing large paragraphs of text in a single bubble unless used in a "this character talks a lot this text is not super important' sort of situation.

Reecer: I you should never have that much text in small panels like in panels 8 and 9.  I feel like a panel featuring a speech should have a large and prominent full body shot of the speaker being imposed in front of all of the panels instead of confining them to smaller panels.  You also need to let your text have a bit more breathing room because the text is already cramped enough as it is.

Kent: You did a much better job with the wordy dialogue, but your word bubbles kind of throw me off.  the tails are this uncomfortable fat triangle shapes and could benefit with some curving lines.  There are many instances of tangents (page 2 panel 2), unnecessary intersecting with the characters speaking (page 3, panel 2), and the the word balloons breaking out of their panels (all of page 4).

Happy June 24th! -Reecer6
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# 3   Posted: Feb 4 2018, 05:12 PM
kennnnt you wrote this relationship way better and in a much more interesting way than i would ever be able to wrestle onto a pageeeeee, i feel bad i did it such a disservice myself, this is SUPER GOOD!!!

      Edited Feb 4 2018,  05:15 PM by Happy June 24th! -Reecer6

Mister Kent
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# 2   Posted: Feb 4 2018, 01:10 AM
Reecer I gotta say I'm in love with writing Anvil <3 She's a magical character, thanks for the battle!!

Happy June 24th! -Reecer6
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# 1   Posted: Feb 3 2018, 04:31 PM
there is one panel in this entire comic of someone appearing to move, and i may be reaching the upper limits of how many panels one can fit in a page, but i think it's kind of cute, so i hope you enjoy it despite my inability to write comics!

(the idea is that, if i do it enough, it'll suddenly be a stylistic choice and become good writing.)

      Edited Feb 3 2018,  04:36 PM by Happy June 24th! -Reecer6

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Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Feb 10th, 2018
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