Intro Story / Sumiko Nakatomi

Intro Story — Sumiko Nakatomi


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yarnwitch
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# 13   Posted: Dec 14 2017, 11:50 PM
@zee: "Sometimes (first page, bottom middle panel) the text is dangerously close to the edges of the bubble which can be a little distracting."  ---- Ah yeah! I wanted it to feel crowded and like babbling! i guess it feels crowded in the wrong way? I'll look into that, thank you!

@wirecat thanks! I see what you mean now that i look at it again.  Definitely still struggle with consistency, so i'll try to keep it more in mind. Thank you!

@energy THANK YOU! ♥ its super cool! To me at least!

@dragonpenguin THAAAANNNKK~~~

@sean - thank you so much! I need to get a box to put these props in!

@corn - i do have to get a bit stronger with my storytelling! I'll get there!!

@wolfbaloo - thank you~

@fred - backgrounds! Got it! Thank you so much!

@radji - AFTER CHRISTMAS!!!

@desichan ♥♥♥♥♥♥ thank you! I was trying new brushes!

      Edited Dec 14 2017,  11:51 PM by yarnwitch

zee
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# 12   Posted: Dec 14 2017, 11:36 PM
I LOVE SUMIKO!!!
She's adorable and great and I want more more more
Though this comic is rather brief and vague in places it seems like a good set up for whatever you've got planned!
As far as critiques go, this is sort of slight because the text is plenty legible, but I think you should keep in mind the spacing between the word bubbles and the text. Sometimes (first page, bottom middle panel) the text is dangerously close to the edges of the bubble which can be a little distracting.
Great job though, can't wait to see her in action!

Wirecat
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# 11   Posted: Dec 14 2017, 10:46 PM
I think it was interesting to see the difference in personality between the spider kids and Sumiko and how she reacts to them and their questions. I think her design is pretty cool too and I love the details you've but into her joints and mandibles.
I can't wait to see what kind of music she's gonna rock on that guitar!
There is something about the quality of the art that starts out really tight and crisp on the first page, but then starts too loosen a little too much on the second and third page, but other than that I think this was a really cute introduction and I can't wait to see more of this character :Dc

Energy
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# 10   Posted: Dec 14 2017, 10:36 PM
Solid intro.  I would like to know more about what makes Sumiko's dad's guitar so important to her sometime in the future.  Looking forward to seeing more of this character.

Badger
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# 9   Posted: Dec 14 2017, 06:22 PM
She looks awesome!! I love her design, I'm definitely excited to see more of her!

Astro Sean
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# 8   Posted: Dec 11 2017, 08:43 AM
I really really want to know more. I think this comic did just enough to tease me and interest me. Hell, based off the design alone, I fell in love with this character. I also give you major props for going all digital on this one. You're really growing better and better in that area! Keep it up!

Corn Of The Breads
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# 7   Posted: Dec 9 2017, 06:20 PM
This looks really great my only concern it I dont feel I know much of her as a character yet so I guess that just means we will have to wait to see you do more with her but the comic came out great.

yarnwitch
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# 6   Posted: Dec 9 2017, 01:02 PM
Majikura: 2 Nightingales and 2 Spiders.  I'm getting ideas...
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~good~

Majikura
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# 5   Posted: Dec 9 2017, 09:52 AM
2 Nightingales and 2 Spiders.  I'm getting ideas...

Wolfbaloo
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# 4   Posted: Dec 7 2017, 02:13 PM
Really love the introduction of this character. And since she's related to the "French SpiderWoman" it expands this spiderverse I'm seeing happening in Void.

Fred v2.0.1
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# 3   Posted: Dec 7 2017, 01:52 PM
She's the cutest! >:0
I want all the cute spidergirl comics.
All of them.
Maybe with more background detail.
Not that it detracts from how darn cute she is.

Radji
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# 2   Posted: Dec 7 2017, 11:47 AM
Yes! There she is! So glad to have another spider in Void! Sumiko seems to have a unfunny past regarding her familly... don't worry lil buggo, Mama Louise is there for you ! (YARN, LET'S FIGHT ASAP )

Desichan
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# 1   Posted: Dec 7 2017, 11:36 AM
Yaaaaarn wah so hyped to see your buggo! I love the way your lines look in this comic, and yeah!

I can't wait to see more of Sumiko, and I look forward to Fawn and her meeting! OwO///

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