Washed Up / Shizana and Grey
Critiques & Comments
# 12
Posted:
Dec 30 2016, 08:48 AM
I truly love this comic. It's one of the best I've read in a long time and it was perfectly executed with the pacing to the colors. I am glad you put a slight twist onto the flood story arc. I really hope to see more from you two!
# 11
Posted:
Dec 30 2016, 02:53 AM
A very commendable job you two did on this comic; the story is snappy and fun, grey and shizana are charming as always, but also that art - it's hard to believe two people worked on it, the colors flow so well with the lineart! Awesome work.
# 10
Posted:
Dec 29 2016, 07:46 PM
This was an extremely entertaining and very fluid story to read through so thank you both so much for taking the time to craft the story! The coloring matches the mode almost throughout the whole story and the thin lines really aid in making it pop.
The only think I want to mention is there are times the lighting felt a little off, at least to me, as if the environment wasn't effecting either character. For example, page 9 seems to stand out in terms for lighting in my mind. The shades of the building suggest it's rather late, nearing sundown, however I felt like both characters where very bright for the scene. The first panel on page 10 is another place where the lighting definitely struck me as somewhat off as, in panel 3, we see there are tall buildings and the setting sun which, I would think, would make the characters appear darker. This could be a style choice or the fact that I don't have a true grasp on lighting in a scene. Either way the comic was a joy to read and I look forward to more work from both of you!
The only think I want to mention is there are times the lighting felt a little off, at least to me, as if the environment wasn't effecting either character. For example, page 9 seems to stand out in terms for lighting in my mind. The shades of the building suggest it's rather late, nearing sundown, however I felt like both characters where very bright for the scene. The first panel on page 10 is another place where the lighting definitely struck me as somewhat off as, in panel 3, we see there are tall buildings and the setting sun which, I would think, would make the characters appear darker. This could be a style choice or the fact that I don't have a true grasp on lighting in a scene. Either way the comic was a joy to read and I look forward to more work from both of you!
# 9
Posted:
Dec 29 2016, 11:49 AM
Everything I want to say has basically been said so uh
you guys are fucking awesome and need to make more shit like this together
like a l o t
you guys are fucking awesome and need to make more shit like this together
like a l o t
# 8
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 10:15 PM
I loved this, well done you two
# 7
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 05:20 PM
Ah man, thanks to everyone for giving this a read and vote.
Also a big thank you for all of the comments so far, the feedback really means a lot!
You're all super kind.
(and thanks to Rhimwill for being so patient with me while we worked on this lol)
Also a big thank you for all of the comments so far, the feedback really means a lot!
You're all super kind.
(and thanks to Rhimwill for being so patient with me while we worked on this lol)
# 6
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 02:46 PM
You guys are among the most professional-level artists on the site, and the combination is absolute dynamite. Just keep kicking ass as the rest of us learn from your mighty works!
# 5
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 11:30 AM
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!
Hot Fucking Damn.
Several re-reads later, I've finally stopped screaming, but haven't stopped smiling.
Rhim, you abso-fucking-lutely rocked every single environment and background. Like 10000% cash-as-fuck knocked it outta the park; and your inks were easily some of the slickest I've seen. Zee, your characters were so fucking smooth and so full of life; and your color choices were genuinely top-tier. Plus, I totally loved the story you told together, and really hope this becomes a series of BBs.
And naturally, I am super biased in your favor. Karrin's prominent cameo in this is easily my favorite thing that's happened on this site, even dwarfing a win-streak and Scarmageddon. I genuinely feel honored by the both of you. Totally and truly.
On a personal note, if you two ever teamed up to do some 2v2 character/artist battles: I'd literally tell my day-job I was in the hospital for a couple weeks so I stood a chance of beating you.
Hot Fucking Damn.
Several re-reads later, I've finally stopped screaming, but haven't stopped smiling.
Rhim, you abso-fucking-lutely rocked every single environment and background. Like 10000% cash-as-fuck knocked it outta the park; and your inks were easily some of the slickest I've seen. Zee, your characters were so fucking smooth and so full of life; and your color choices were genuinely top-tier. Plus, I totally loved the story you told together, and really hope this becomes a series of BBs.
And naturally, I am super biased in your favor. Karrin's prominent cameo in this is easily my favorite thing that's happened on this site, even dwarfing a win-streak and Scarmageddon. I genuinely feel honored by the both of you. Totally and truly.
On a personal note, if you two ever teamed up to do some 2v2 character/artist battles: I'd literally tell my day-job I was in the hospital for a couple weeks so I stood a chance of beating you.
# 4
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 11:25 AM
Man, with Rhimwill's environments/inks, and Zee's color, y'all really brought out your talents best for this comic!!
Uh, I'm actually having a lot of trouble thinking of what to critique as improvements-- y'all really hit it out of the park with this one. I may amend this later if I think of something, but I'm actually having a hard time-- the story makes sense, and is totally reasonable (I mean, it WAS the other Grey who blew up the dam), and this was well-paced, so I can't do what I usually do (tear the story apart).
I don't know if you knew about Sabu's plotline relating to the flood, but as I recall, this could tie into it, too.
Please collab more in the future-- this was amazing!! Giving you all high marks.
Uh, I'm actually having a lot of trouble thinking of what to critique as improvements-- y'all really hit it out of the park with this one. I may amend this later if I think of something, but I'm actually having a hard time-- the story makes sense, and is totally reasonable (I mean, it WAS the other Grey who blew up the dam), and this was well-paced, so I can't do what I usually do (tear the story apart).
I don't know if you knew about Sabu's plotline relating to the flood, but as I recall, this could tie into it, too.
Please collab more in the future-- this was amazing!! Giving you all high marks.
# 3
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 10:53 AM
HEEYYYYY
you both rocked !!! from inklines to colors and the story.
Poor grey is in more troubles than ever, BUUUUTTTT the story with the other grey scout did confuse me at the first read. but i think i get it now.
I really don't have many negative comments to make. Overall i only really was kind of neutral to the dancing scene. The crowd's reactions may seems a bit exaggerated to me? i dunno
But i loved the comic, and that's what matters ^^
you both rocked !!! from inklines to colors and the story.
Poor grey is in more troubles than ever, BUUUUTTTT the story with the other grey scout did confuse me at the first read. but i think i get it now.
I really don't have many negative comments to make. Overall i only really was kind of neutral to the dancing scene. The crowd's reactions may seems a bit exaggerated to me? i dunno
But i loved the comic, and that's what matters ^^
# 2
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 10:36 AM
Looks amazing you both have art styles that complement each other very nicely. It is so nice to get a more clear character for Grey and show his character in full display in this one in a more social situation. It is also great to see that nameless grey as she also gets dragged through the world, this is a fun and beautiful comic and I know it took you guys some time to complete congrats on getting it done.
# 1
Posted:
Dec 27 2016, 10:23 AM
We finally finished it! Wooooo! ^o^ Thank you, Zee, for doing this with me and letting me splat ink all over your lovely pencils and for doing such a great job on the colors!
We wanted to give some closure to Grey's role in the dam explosion, so we got Astro Sean's approval to perform a little retcon. And if you don't remember who the person at the end is, her original appearance was in Grey's intro comic
We wanted to give some closure to Grey's role in the dam explosion, so we got Astro Sean's approval to perform a little retcon. And if you don't remember who the person at the end is, her original appearance was in Grey's intro comic
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