Dawn and Rise BB id = Pt 3) / Coral

Dawn and Rise BB id = Pt 3) — Coral


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Colussus
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# 8   Posted: Apr 21 2006, 02:36 AM
Jehudy: She will get back her nanonytes

Kura X: FINALLY!! some criticism!!

Majikura
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# 7   Posted: Apr 20 2006, 10:58 PM
keh.  since nobody else will do it I\'ll do a critique.

The pace of the comic seemed to have sped up this time around (which is good)...last time it was just two people talking in a black endless void which seemed to drag on and on.  Several shots of Coral have serious proportion problems with the legs, like she has a really long torso and tiny little legs.  This reoccurs from pages 3 through 6. Sometimes, the head and shoulders were just too damn big for the body, and thus gave her some gorilla arms (page 3, last panel)

I would also suggest picking a certian build for Coral.  Her body type seems to fluctuate from skinny to robust to skinny again (referring to 7 and 8).


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# 6   Posted: Apr 20 2006, 08:31 PM
wow! yay more comics!!! XD this is awesome.

oooo whos chip razor? new character?

well anyways i cant wait. wheeee.

[[just one question. does she still have her nanoprobes? if not then how will skyboard?

full range34
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# 5   Posted: Apr 18 2006, 03:28 PM
damn man! where the hell do u come up wuth these ideas!?!?!?!?!?!?! its some serous good crap!!! i love it!! cant wait to see the battle with monday!

Majikura
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# 4   Posted: Apr 18 2006, 01:00 AM
thanks for listening to my suggestion.  Storywise, it makes much more sense now.  *thumbsup*

Colussus
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# 3   Posted: Apr 17 2006, 05:55 PM
Thx Pi for your comment, and I\'ll work on what you said bout should and etc. =)

(Pi)
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# 2   Posted: Apr 16 2006, 11:02 PM
I\'ve been seeing this problem in a lot of your comics, but it\'s especially apparant in this piece. You have a very strong tendency to draw females with rather broad shoulders and slim hips. Generally, a woman\'s shoulders are about the same width as the hips, with the waist simmer to get that \"hourglass\" figure. At times it almost seemed as though you drew Coral as a man, but I\'m still assuming that she\'s not, according to the information you\'ve given us so far.

Other than that, nice piece, although it didn\'t really wrap too much up from the last few comics. Anyways, it was a fun ride, and I look forward to your next bout.

Colussus
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# 1   Posted: Apr 16 2006, 08:01 PM
I hope you guys like, lol btw ignore the text at the end, I done Bio and design sheet!

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