Light Speed Death Tournament, Round 1 / Carys vs. Yi Strike Seo

Light Speed Death Tournament, Round 1 — Carys vs. Yi Strike Seo


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by Nachte


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Puzzlething
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# 13   Posted: Jan 23 2016, 12:39 PM
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        You can't do a 3 page comic and waste 2 pages on introductions. Not only does it give you no room to do a story, it gives you no room for a cool/interesting fight. If it's supposed to be "Look at this pompous douche get wrecked son" joke, you needed to push way harder into that. Seo needed to be just way MORE in general, more intense, more ridiculous, and the punchline need to be way more graphic and absurd. Like, you're basically doing the One Punch Man joke, so you def wanna try and get that absurd and amazing if you're gonna go that route.

       I like that you're getting much better with line variation dude! The combination of heavier lines and faster lines is really helping your stuff look more dynamic.


Nachte     -

             Ahhhhahahahaha. I don't really have alot to say except that actually! It was cute, and funny! A great simple comic that made me laugh.

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# 12   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 09:16 PM
TDK: You're constantly improving! There's some good layouts here and more dynamic shots. But you spent so much time on the art you fell a little flat with your story; this was a digital comic right? digital brings with it a whole other world of things you need to watch out for so keep practicing it.

Nachte: Strangely it's your last page, not your first, that seems to be the one you worked more on and then the quality trailed (backwards)? I don't feel like the single shade over Carys really helped you, if you could have cut out some hilights (if just a little bit) that would have been better in line with the rest of the comic

Field Marshal Lionel Forsythe W. Underwood XIII, GBE
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# 11   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 07:35 PM
TD, For a 3 paged comic, you fell short on the story itself. I wish there was more to the story as it felt a little short, especially with the quick resolution. Try cleaning up your lines and using greys to highlight your already solid line art. And work more on those poses and you'll have it good. Jolly good work chap.

Nachte, Simple and elegant. You delivered a solid entertaining short. It have a story engaging enough and a solid artstyle to boot that it feels like eating a nice Sachertorte. I wish I can see you use more toning as the tournament moves on, as already manifested in your other work.

Jolly good show both of you!

ablob
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# 10   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 02:46 PM
TDL - Nice use of blacks! And loving the pose of everyone on the last page. Your characters are sometimes suffering from a case of the side-mouth though, so watch out for that.

Nachete - Love how these two ended up fighting ("fighting") each other! I also really like how your comic is very easy to read. There are no confusing panels that make me double-take, and the story flowed nicely.

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# 9   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 01:49 PM
Haha I love both of these a lot.

TDK - I liked how your comic was just a straight up murder comic. The inking leaves a bit to be desired as well as the text, however I do like that you are taking steps into the digital realm. JOIN US. Keep going man, it'll get there :)

Nachte - This comic made me fucking laugh, the last page is amazing and I love the splashes of red to really make your comic pop out. Nice work!

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# 8   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 12:53 PM
TDK- Ha! that dream of murderbot-ness was short lived! You took the tried and true void arena trope and ran with it. This was a quick and dirty brawl that any old school voider could appreciate.

NACHTE- Simple ,cute and charming. All the makings of a quick dispatch of your opponent. Not to mention I laughed out loud at poor Carys making al this adjustments just to be flung into a building. Whatta way to go!

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# 7   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 10:07 AM
Light Speed Critique: TDK, Couldn't tell at first if that was narration or monologue, and your own character had no real characterization. Natche, Your panels started leaking, and the tangential panel (2 and 5) on page 2 seemed odd compared to otherwise seperated panels. Love the variety of angles and panel layout.

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# 6   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 06:37 AM
TIDIIII nice blacks :P And a cute little story.

Nachte: not entirely sure what happened but it was pretty :P I like the color splashes :)

Radji
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# 5   Posted: Jan 21 2016, 06:16 AM
haha the old teen idol that want to be tough and shit. It didn't end well. FATALITY ! or rather K-POPITY !

Nachte
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# 4   Posted: Jan 20 2016, 05:27 PM
All done! Uploaded C:

Iced Tea
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# 3   Posted: Jan 20 2016, 11:09 AM
Ten Dead Kings: God hates me, that's what it is.
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No, god wants you to STEP UP YOUR GAME

Ten Dead Kings
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# 2   Posted: Jan 17 2016, 05:19 AM
God hates me, that's what it is.

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# 1   Posted: Jan 17 2016, 02:27 AM
haha what a gorgeous match! Make comics as beautiful as yours characters!

Comic Details -

 
Type: Speed Death Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Jan 23rd, 2016
Votes Cast: 45
Page Views: 379
Winner: Nachte

 

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