That was ridiculously close, and I'm so sad to see Lil Lily go, but congrats to Upoyk and have fun with round 2!

I can see why the scores on these battles are neck and neck. They're both really great comics! Gotta love these types of submissions-way to make it difficult for the voting masses!

UPOYK- I found myself taking your comic a very different way. I couldn't stop laughing! Everything from Lily's over the top diva-ness, to each and every single one of Morey's exasperated expressions had me in stitches. Your fighter has such a great face for expression and you used it to the fullest extent in this comic. Go you! I also enjoyed your variation in angles. There's a panel on page 15 where lily gives this shit eating grin and I just love how its not just straight on view. Its this subtle worms eye view with heavy shadow that really enhances the 'devilish intentions' moment. You actually have plenty of panels where you succeed in this, and I want you to know I see you voider, rocking them skills-and I appreciate it!

 I gotta agree with the previous comments on your environments and buildings. That mausoleum was totally tits. Great attention to detail, despite the fact the bulk of your comic was kinda rough and (I assume?) unfinished by way of final polish. Still, I found I didn't mind at all! your sketches and pencil work are really strong even without ink and the story was a fun romp.

NEENS- Lil' Lily is a treat. A sickly sweet poisonous one! You really get a sense of her character in this first round, and her high opinion of herself when dealing with others. A grade a bonefied brat and I love her. Your inks were great, and while you did use black, I'm always of the opinion you could use more. Especially in a monstrous Halloween comic with demons and cementaries. I dunno, I just feel, page to page, it was a little on the too white side. Heavy it up with some inks, says I. I dunno if it was just me, but there was a relative unease with how you handled your opponents character. I kept waiting for her to eat Lily, or hurt her, or just do something outright unsettling. I'm thinking it was all of her expressions and the angles you used in your panels. Despite her accommodating nature, the appearance left me on edge and I liked it. I really enjoyed your handle of Morey's grisly end. Keeping it just off screen really gave it that creepy 'gosh my imaginations going away with me' feel. Not to mention I think this is the first time I've seen you make a comic with such chilling results. Really nice work!

Upoyk - Great first page--this page and panels in which you feature architecture really shine! The comic really starts off strong, and I enjoy how you introduce Lily. The comic may have been a little too scratchy in some places, and I'd love to see your next comic be a bit cleaner. Surprisingly though it didn't hurt my enjoyment of the story too much at all! Really clever story and ending, and I can't wait to see more.

Neens - Nice clean dark lines, of course I expected such quality from you! I'd lke to see perhaps some shading or some more depth in the next comic, but your BW work is always very easy to read. A perfectly twisted story, especially the ending, so I very much approve. I feel like the characters were well characterized and were used entertainingly in the comic. Not much else to say but great work as always--can't wait to see your next comic!

Gorey
The art gets messy at times but I'll move on from that straight away.
Great characterization, the posing of the characters, page 6 for example. I instantly connected with him.
The dialogue is very natural and humorous.
I think the story meanders a bit, and if you condense it down somewhat then it will give you more time to concentrate on the art and it will probably make for a punchier story. If you want a contrast look at my battle, where I do the opposite of you. I try to cram too much into too little a space. I think a balance between the two would be nice.

Lily
The style you've drawn it in I think would lend itself to some more cross hatching or perhaps layered textures to give it some more creepy atmosphere. It's very clean art, great for communication, but I!d like some more atmosphere conveyed.

Its pretty gruesome, the concept of Morey eating himself. I just think you could have pushed it further. More macabre, Manga horror style, gnawing on his fingers. Close ups. I just think that balance of cute and then horrendously horrific that you've got going is really playful and tasty!
My advice basically. Get darker and more atmospheric!

upoyk- theres a lot of unfinished art here but your style and character are so darn charming i have a hard time faulting you too much for it XD but if you get through i hope you can finish next round- a shorter story would probably help. i love the characterization in this- the first time we see both characters says so much about them and their personalities are very clear. Great first show! If you dont make it through, i hope you come back later with another character!
neens- gosh your lily is just so cute and so bratty and i adore her lol! great characterization in this, and i like the end, how Lily tricks Morey into suicide, very clever! Im not sure what i can critique, this is a fun, complete comic!

Both of you did really well. I like that both of these seem to have a firm grasp on the others' character. The scripts are both intriguing and paced well.

Upoyk- though I'd of liked to see your work completed, I enjoyed the story over all and it wasn't difficult to follow. I think this is very promising as far future work is concerned.

Neens- I found this fun and the sudden violent turn at the end was cool. Some color would have been nice, but other than that I can't really think of much else to say.

Well done. both of ya.

I like this battle quite a lot. Both sides portrayed each other like a mirror. Lil is bratty and demonic and Morey is lackadaisical and graveyard.

Morey Gorey- There is longer characterisation here and we get to see Morey in his more heroic form. However art is way too light and could benefit from pitch darks otherwise it looks like pencils with no ink :<

Lililillilll - I like this quite a lot. It is cute. CUTE ! A complete comic that happens with a colorful interaction like an adult teaching demonkids about halloween ♥. But  frames itself with the twists of a simpsons episode and ends in blooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood.

Lilililli gets the pointss for completion :v

thank you so much, and yes it was absolutely meant to have tones! /: the first week of this I was completely booked and had zero time so I essentially did it in half the time, so that's my big excuse on this one D:

Upoyk: Man this script is sooo good! It's a shame your work isn't complete but fortunately your sketchwork is so easy to follow I'm certain this would have turned out amazing when completed. Hopefully now you have a better handle on your time management so future comics will reflect that. If you make it to round 2 try not to make the same mistake again, because you're writing is so good you don't need so many pages to tell a good story!

neens: I think you and Upoyk have really good understanding of each other's characters, it's cool to see that both characters are pretty much spot on on both sides. I think this comic could have benefited from either a gray shade or color, that's probably the only real critique I can give cause it's really tight and well put together otherwise

Great job guys!

@neens ahhhh omg thank you. I loved reading your entry as well!! What a gruesome ending, I absolutely adore it. Thinking about it now, Morey probably would be excellent at cosplay. They'd have an endless supply of some quality fabric, dirt cheap!

@pyras Sorry about that. Thank you for resizing them, I'll keep that in mind next time

Upoyk, go ahead and send smaller image sizes to Bobo and he can set those up for ya!

Edit: All done!

UPOYK I REALLY LOVE WHAT YOU DID! ; ; your writing is soooo goooood ugh I am shamed (but mostly excited!!) poor lily, but not really cause gosh what a brat.

now I REALLY wish I had had more time to work..! good luck with your probable win!

Unfortunately not, in my mad dash to try to finish I ended up pushing my wrist too far past the limit. I'll be okay I just need to not pick up the pencil for a bit

Upoyk, not sure if this might or might not help you:

http://entervoid.com/index.php?topic=12973.msg240764;topicseen#new

should be uploaded! sorry the pages kinda deteriorate towards the end, I had a busy couple of weeks.

upoyk: oh no, I'm still excited to see what you did! morey is such a great character and I really wish I had more time to do something cooler with them :C

agggh, sorry neens... I really mismanaged my time this week and my ambitions were too high, but I'll upload the sketches anyway because I really loved drawing this and Lily is REALLY GREAT... wish I could've finished it on time. Sorry.

AHH. Haha good luck to both of you I really really really wanna see this fight!

This should be good!