Raygun vs. Leviathorah

Raygun vs. Leviathorah


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by neens


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neens
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258 comments
# 16   Posted: Nov 13 2013, 03:28 PM
thanks bobo! as mentioned, it IS missing some pages, so that's prolly why some scenes are lacking, cause they are actually not there ;o

Puzzlething
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# 15   Posted: Nov 13 2013, 09:45 AM
Kent          -

           I'd like to love you, if you'd let me.

           I think more than anything dude, I'd like to see you do a BB or something. A comic you can really take your time on and push. Alot of your comics lately have been a little rushed, either because you're doing two fights at once, or because you're trying to draw a million pages. It's not even that I just wanna see that extra level of polish on stuff like your perspective and line quality. I just wanna see something ambitious and risky, like trying to draw at a level you're not sure you actually can. I definitely know that when you're working at such a crazy pace, it's much easier/almost-necessary to stay in a comfortable place.

         As always, Raygun's speech is great, he's such a lovable douchebag. I swear I could hear him popping his non-existent collar after the "my guns" remark. And I'll never stop loving Special Friend, aka The Best Superhero Ever. Some of your page set-ups/compositions were nice like whoa. In fact they get pretty great around the beginning of the fight scene. Pages 6,7, and 9 are super hot.


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                I dunno if your roughed pages are what you actually planned to do at the start, or if it was just something you penciled in so we got a complete story, but I feel like the sense of action and excitement in them is a little subdued. Like we should be way closer to Raygun in the car stomping panel. If you zoomed out because you really wanted to push how huge Leviathorah is in that panel, you could've tried using 3 point perspective instead. And the moment Ray gets captured isn't really given the proper attention either, since you chose instead to focus on the time, which I think you could've tackled easily enough without sacrificing that moment.

               I think most of this was prolly just cause you were trying to get story down though dude, because what you have completed is niiiiiice. Rayguns body language is so well thought out, and your amazing linework makes me wanna kill myself. I'm completely in love with the stuff you're doing with texture in this comic, especially the stuff you're doing with Leviathorah. I think it compliments your smooth outlines nicely. Those tiny bits of irregular hatching are so hot, jesus christ. I really hope you keep playing around with texture dude, cause I totally wanna see more. There's like just enough here to get me pumped before the inks disappear.

PyrasTerran
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# 14   Posted: Nov 12 2013, 09:12 PM
so funny kent~ wish you both could have finished too

MyHatsEatPeople
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# 13   Posted: Nov 12 2013, 07:17 PM
It's a real shame that you couldn't finish Neens! But kudos on the clean sketches so we can still tell what's going on in the later pages!

As you Kent, all your characters are beautiful. Espiclally Special Friend - I was laughing my arse off.

Mister Kent
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937 comments
# 12   Posted: Nov 12 2013, 12:30 PM
Thanks! I wish it was a little more polished with shading and stuffs!

Bobo
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859 comments
# 11   Posted: Nov 12 2013, 09:29 AM
I L-O-V-E you, Kent! More critiques when I'm done freaking out about Murder Mystery!

Mister Kent
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937 comments
# 10   Posted: Nov 10 2013, 11:55 PM
I'm sure yours is still great though ;D

neens
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258 comments
# 9   Posted: Nov 10 2013, 09:05 PM
uploaded what I have. no, not all pages are there so there's some gaps. sorry dudes, but real life stuffs been calling and frankly I'm exhausted, and my art output has been slow on all fronts. I do like what I started, so I'm definitely gonna finish and upload at a later date! feel free to crit what's there.

neens
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# 8   Posted: Nov 4 2013, 03:54 PM
okay, so I've had a lot more work than I expected this last month, and I just got a bunch more dumped on me, so I dunno how complete this is gonna be anymore :c I'M GONNA TRY THOUGH

Kozispoon
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940 comments
# 7   Posted: Nov 4 2013, 04:40 AM
Too many days left to wait. I wanna see this NAO!! :DDD Make it a good one you guys!

Minteh
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# 6   Posted: Oct 7 2013, 10:45 AM
I could not have asked for a more perfect match to get hyped about

Astro Sean
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# 5   Posted: Oct 7 2013, 09:11 AM
Stoked Stoked Stoked Stoked Stoked

Puzzlething
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457 comments
# 4   Posted: Oct 7 2013, 08:31 AM
OH GOD YES. I was so scared I'd never see 80's action hero Raygun again!

Mister Kent
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937 comments
# 3   Posted: Oct 7 2013, 07:15 AM
I've dreamed of this match *u* Thanks neens!

Red
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# 2   Posted: Oct 6 2013, 10:42 AM
AHHH two of my favorites!!! <3 <3 <3

neens
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258 comments
# 1   Posted: Oct 6 2013, 10:08 AM
oh hello

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 5 weeks
Ended: Nov 17th, 2013
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