Invitational Tournament 2010: Round 1 / Abura Oribu vs. Tod Zombie

Invitational Tournament 2010: Round 1 — Abura Oribu vs. Tod Zombie


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Ransom!
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# 17   Posted: Aug 9 2010, 01:15 AM
That was pretty rad :D Thanks for the battle wafer! I loved the story in yours, and the whole retro, and kinda..atmospheric? (I dunno :p) feel to it. And I love how you portrayed Tod, especially that last page, haha :] I think I agree with Dr. Salt with the footnotes not being that necessary, if they were there I probably wouldn't have read them anyway, would have disrupted things imo. I think on page 4 could have done with more backgrounds, when you did add them in I really liked them, and I wanna see a battle fully colored like your title page :]

@Everyone that mentioned me... This probably makes my comic less cool, but I didn't use watercolors (as much as I'd like to, I've never actually used them haha...), just used ordinary markers, which also excuses me slightly less for the messiness :p Honestly I didn't plan that story at all, just kinda rolled with it because there was only one week..which now looking back was probably a bad idea, and I'll be sure to plan better next time (which I'd like to be soon once finalizing my coursework for school is done..) Thanks for the crits :]

Dr.Salt
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# 16   Posted: Aug 5 2010, 01:43 PM
I liked the use of Japanese text in your comic, Wafer. It's appropriate to your character since she's a parody of anime, and I wouldn't encourage you to use footnotes since they clutter the page. That said, when I first read it I had thought the man was lovestruck, and the passage of time on page 6 wasn't immediately apparent. For the untranslated text to work on it's own you need the image in the panel to clarify what is happening.

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# 15   Posted: Aug 4 2010, 04:05 AM
I have to go with Ransomlikescake's comic because i was just a little bit more enter taint with that story. Other then that its an even match for me! Very exciting battle.

Phill
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# 14   Posted: Aug 2 2010, 05:40 PM
I'm divided on choosing between these two.

Vanilla: I'm glad you finally got in, just need to really brush up on some of your basics, practice backgrounds, figures, the whole shebang. Still, very cute comic, and yes, it does have an 80's manga feel to it and you should probably look up some comics from that era if possible.

Ransomlikescake: Not bad, a bit messy, but you've got a good grasp of how to handle water colors. Story was cute as well. I'm just mimicking what Fow is saying right now...


Even vote, battle more you two!

fowlie
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# 13   Posted: Aug 2 2010, 10:01 AM
Wafer: hahah that was super cute.  I always enjoy your comics and I really liked the 80's manga feel to it. It would have been nice to know what the Japanese characters said, but it kind've added to the charm.

Ransomlikescake: It was cute, and the water colors were nice. I wasn't crazy about the story but it was cute.

I don't have a lot to say on either of these.  

Zest
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# 12   Posted: Aug 1 2010, 11:50 PM
Adding on top of what the other guys are posting, Vanilla, I'd have loved to see some subtitles or a footnote explaining what the Chinese/Japanese symbols you used in your comic meant. It was a neat idea, I just wish I could know what it was saying.

Both of you guys had some really great funny ideas, but you both need to work on your foundations skills. Anatomy, perspective, proportion- all that boring realistic stuff will help your comics really pop out. Try a site like Posemaniacs or get a friend to lounge about so you can practice drawing real people and figuring out how all the limbs fit together. This way you know how you can distort the human form to make stylized characters. Heh, I'm still working on all of these myself, so I'm in the same boat as you all. I wish you both the best of luck in your future comics!

Base
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# 11   Posted: Aug 1 2010, 11:38 PM
Creepy stalker zombie. I don't know if you guys planned for that but the similarities between the stories are uncanny.

Vanilla: Great to see you with more stuff again! This was a fun little display of bizzareness, which I know you're good with. You seem to have some issues with facial anatomy, particularly on the first page where she's looking back at Greg, her eyes are really off center and look a little weird. But I love how succinct the character interaction is here, the subtleties make it really interesting to read-- especially how she doesn't get scared by the zombie.

Ransom: That ending was hilarious. I like the idea of a 'zombie romance', it's so delightfully silly and grotesque. There were some anatomy quirks here and there but overall, the posing was nice and the interaction felt strong. I liked the pacing, and the conclusion was quite entertaining! Good job!

Ransom!
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# 10   Posted: Aug 1 2010, 11:05 PM
Uploaded :] Heh I noticed so many glaring mistakes in the backgrounds, gonna drive me crazy :p

vanilla wafer
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# 9   Posted: Aug 1 2010, 07:33 PM
Uploaded! Phew

Dr.Salt
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# 8   Posted: Jul 28 2010, 09:36 AM
A.B.U.R.A.SPACE.O.R.I.B.U!

carlito
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# 7   Posted: Jul 26 2010, 11:39 AM
Haha. Double post. LAME!

carlito
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# 6   Posted: Jul 26 2010, 11:39 AM
Interesting.
Do good you two.

carlito
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# 5   Posted: Jul 26 2010, 11:38 AM
Interesting.
Do good you two.

Phill
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# 4   Posted: Jul 26 2010, 12:15 AM
Welcome to void you two, just remember to do your best, the minimum is a mere 3 pages too! And yes I am going to say this to everybody.

Ransom!
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# 3   Posted: Jul 25 2010, 10:02 PM
Awesome :D

Zest
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# 2   Posted: Jul 25 2010, 09:25 PM
Good luck you guys!

Angie
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# 1   Posted: Jul 25 2010, 09:17 PM
Nice to see you back vanilla! Good luck guys!

Comic Details -

 
Type: Tournament Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Aug 8th, 2010
Votes Cast: 42
Page Views: 799
Winner: vanilla wafer

 

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