Lau the Assassin vs. M.C. MAC MONEY MURDA
Critiques & Comments
# 20
Posted:
Feb 23 2010, 06:40 PM
Cool stuff man! I can't wait to see what you do in the next round
# 19
Posted:
Feb 23 2010, 04:39 PM
Thanks for reading.
# 18
Posted:
Feb 23 2010, 03:11 PM
What i mean is, the build up is so good that i wanted more at the exact moment it ended. Felt like "it has just begun." Maybe if ya had MC speak a bit, even if one rhyme or the lazyman's "blablabla" speechbubble it'd make a big difference.
7 days is not much to work with for some of us.
Just do what feels good to "you" while at the same time implementing some of the crits. Like you did now.
For example,
previous fight i mentioned recurring angles in a specific order can make the flow look stiff.
In this fight you mixed it up as much as possible.
Keep up the goods!
7 days is not much to work with for some of us.
Just do what feels good to "you" while at the same time implementing some of the crits. Like you did now.
For example,
previous fight i mentioned recurring angles in a specific order can make the flow look stiff.
In this fight you mixed it up as much as possible.
Keep up the goods!
# 17
Posted:
Feb 23 2010, 11:11 AM
Thanks for reading.
# 16
Posted:
Feb 23 2010, 10:44 AM
Thanks for reading.
# 15
Posted:
Feb 23 2010, 09:50 AM
Carlito - this is a step up from last time mah man. Pretty clean. I'm digging the shots of the club.
Crowd looks really simple, yet it seems to work for you.
The use of gray is also a nice touch. The story had a great build up but ended pretty abrupt. But then again a week isn't much and everybody works at different pace.
Thumbs up for that close up on Lau's face on page two. Curious to see where you take this.
Josh - Too bad you couldn't make it, i really like the style you're working with.
Good to know you still finished and the BB is on the way.
Crowd looks really simple, yet it seems to work for you.
The use of gray is also a nice touch. The story had a great build up but ended pretty abrupt. But then again a week isn't much and everybody works at different pace.
Thumbs up for that close up on Lau's face on page two. Curious to see where you take this.
Josh - Too bad you couldn't make it, i really like the style you're working with.
Good to know you still finished and the BB is on the way.
# 14
Posted:
Feb 22 2010, 11:31 PM
Not bad, Carlito. Short, and ended abruptly, but still, your art keeps looking nicer.
By the way... is that bouncer outside the club Wei, by any chance?
XD
By the way... is that bouncer outside the club Wei, by any chance?
XD
# 13
Posted:
Feb 22 2010, 03:14 PM
aw man, WHERE DID YOU GO JOSH??
i really wanted to see mmmm go FAR.
carlito -- really dig the drawing on the second thumbnail up top, but amigo -- the story was just lacking so much.
i know next round you'll bring some HEAT, PLEASE -- I WANT TO FEEL THE BURN OF STORY MAN!!
i really wanted to see mmmm go FAR.
carlito -- really dig the drawing on the second thumbnail up top, but amigo -- the story was just lacking so much.
i know next round you'll bring some HEAT, PLEASE -- I WANT TO FEEL THE BURN OF STORY MAN!!
# 12
Posted:
Feb 22 2010, 10:17 AM
Thanks for reading.
# 11
Posted:
Feb 22 2010, 06:27 AM
Josh: Upload early, don't wait until the last minute, you never know if you'll get some extra time, or if that last minute is literally your LAST minute.
Carlito: You're definitely getting better at these comics, you need to vary your angles a bit though, all too often do you stick to the standard shot from the front. Last page was a bit of a let down, I would of loved to have seen a better angle for Lau killing Mac Money. Good luck in the next round.
Carlito: You're definitely getting better at these comics, you need to vary your angles a bit though, all too often do you stick to the standard shot from the front. Last page was a bit of a let down, I would of loved to have seen a better angle for Lau killing Mac Money. Good luck in the next round.
# 10
Posted:
Feb 22 2010, 06:08 AM
UGGGH >_< well that's what I get for waiting til the last hour to post.
Good job Carlito, really liked your story, setup and pacing here. Also the inks were looking even tighter than your round 1.
I suppose Lau is not fated to die just yet!
Posting mine as a BB so you guys can read it.
Good job Carlito, really liked your story, setup and pacing here. Also the inks were looking even tighter than your round 1.
I suppose Lau is not fated to die just yet!
Posting mine as a BB so you guys can read it.
# 9
Posted:
Feb 22 2010, 12:25 AM
I am attempting to upload now, although I know it's slightly past due.
I had a snowstorm blocking out my satellite internet signal, and it just let me back on.
So, I understand if the pages don't go up, just figured it was worth a shot.
I had a snowstorm blocking out my satellite internet signal, and it just let me back on.
So, I understand if the pages don't go up, just figured it was worth a shot.
# 8
Posted:
Feb 21 2010, 07:25 PM
UPLOADED.
# 7
Posted:
Feb 21 2010, 02:51 PM
Voting for the Wutang lookin dude.
# 6
Posted:
Feb 19 2010, 10:41 PM
Thanks for reading.
# 5
Posted:
Feb 18 2010, 08:26 AM
Awwww hell naw.
# 4
Posted:
Feb 15 2010, 02:01 PM
Seconded Will.
Get money get paid.
GET BITCHES GET LAID.
Get money get paid.
GET BITCHES GET LAID.
# 3
Posted:
Feb 15 2010, 01:35 PM
This is some Wutang.
# 2
Posted:
Feb 15 2010, 01:05 PM
Hell yes Carlito, it's awesome to have a match finally. Good luck to you as well, we shall see who is killed.
Lao is a badass dude.
"GREATS" BATTLE!!
Lao is a badass dude.
"GREATS" BATTLE!!
# 1
Posted:
Feb 15 2010, 10:44 AM
Thanks for reading.
Speed Death Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Mar 1st, 2010
Votes Cast:
28
Page Views:
1992
Winner:
carlito
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