Casimir VS Martín Rivera / Martín Rivera

Casimir VS Martín Rivera — Martín Rivera

by Betito


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Phill
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# 7   Posted: Dec 8 2009, 01:28 AM
I think you should cut back on the watercolors for a while as they're getting a bit too light here. You need some darker tones with the colors. As for the line art, your faces are still pretty wonky on the 3/4th views, page 3 in that thumbnail there, his left eye is sagging there, and remember, if somebody is talking, their chin moves around as well. Other than that, the story was pretty good, although I would of like to seen this lengthened a bit, mainly at the beginning to space out the exposition.

Other than that, work on those things and keep it up.

alberto311
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# 6   Posted: Dec 7 2009, 11:32 AM
Not bad... Try to tighten up your dialogue.... and try to be consistant with your background.. some were just lazy like panel 1&2 page 4. Loved the last page.

Anthonybaiz
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# 5   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 04:45 PM
I feel real bad about the Default. But I'll have to get back to you on the time for the rematch.  I wanna make sure we do it to where you and I have the time.

Betito
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# 4   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 02:11 PM
Si, la subí  :3
Thanks William Duel, I am experimenting with watercolors. For this battle did not have much time to color and the background.
Anthony, Thanks! I will do better next time!!!
Again, sorry for my default. I look forward to a rematch, we can make it now or in February or March, whenever you want!

Anthonybaiz
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# 3   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 01:25 PM
Wow, dude. I love the roll you gave Casimir in the story. And adding Gabriel was really awesome. It's not hard to created a positive influence in a story without it having to get to sappy. Great job, homie. I love it. And that last page rocked my day!!!

William_Duel
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# 2   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 12:59 PM
Oh I think this was a very strong outing for you betito.  I liked the story in its simplicity and while there's no sense of impending danger or anything like that, it's like there's a plan in store for Martin.  I like that.  On page 4 though I feel that there are two instances of the faces not quite resting well on the character's faces, a small flaw.  And I feel you're trying hard on the background and your effort shows impressively on the last page.  Your coloring is not bad but I have to say that I'm not a fan of your subdued color choices.  Your coloring style is too light overall, at least in my eyes.  It lends a sort of monotony to the story telling, not in a bad way but just that it would work well with really slice of life stories.  

Brilliantik
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# 1   Posted: Dec 6 2009, 11:51 AM
bien betito la subiste :)

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Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Dec 12th, 2009
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