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ZigZagZero
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# 7   Posted: Jul 21 2009, 06:56 PM
I dont know guys, when Verse tried the keys I assumed that Abrao had switch his keys. Like I said dont know. I liked it overall. Followed it fine from page four to page five. Your character movement and  interaction is really good. The main thing I saw that was a little week is what call the third character, the backgrounds. They seemed somewhat dead. Not bad but lacking life. As I said overall it was really good man.

Phill
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# 6   Posted: Jul 20 2009, 12:07 PM
Are you feeling OK dude? That capslock explanation makes it seem like you're frustrated. Anyway, I do like how this is done without dialogue, but how exactly did Abrao switch keys? At first I just thought that suddenly Verse's keys just changed shape until you explained that they were switched for fakes. If you have to explain what happened to your reader in a silent comic, then something is clearly wrong. Show that Abrao switched keys on him, there was no clear hint in your comic that he did that for me and I've read over your comic a few times already.

Art was pretty good, but I think you should of stuck with the coloring towards the end, understanding Photoshop and using it is pretty difficult, but it's worth it in the end. Overall this comic was pretty good, and it would of really kicked ass in the battle, no question about that.

Sketch
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# 5   Posted: Jul 19 2009, 09:29 AM
Awesome work. The ending was pretty funny.

Wolcik
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# 4   Posted: Jul 19 2009, 03:31 AM
I was a little dissapointed when colors ended as I liked them very much :(
Panels were well placed and except few small glitches the stroy was very easy to follow.
On the 4th page just before Abrao gets nearly cought, he jumps/falls and I don't know what's happening as one panels doesn't lead to another for me.
The end of the story was unlcear because Abrao suppose to steal the wallet and later there seems to be a problem with the keys.

odd13
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# 3   Posted: Jul 19 2009, 01:33 AM
Good flow for the story board, especially with no dialog to this. Well done with the quality, too bad the rest of the goods weren't colored.

...was there a rush to get the goods live?

Anthonybaiz
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# 2   Posted: Jul 18 2009, 08:19 PM
yea the B/W's are nice, but it sucks that you couldn't finish the coloring.

Corny
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# 1   Posted: Jul 18 2009, 06:21 PM
Couldn't you have finished coloring this before you submitted? BBs don't have deadlines unless you set them, and you were never required to set one.

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