Worltex vs. Corry

Worltex vs. Corry

by Wolcik


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carlito
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# 23   Posted: Jan 22 2009, 11:41 AM
Wol: Probably the best thing you've done so far. Parts of it were really well done and parts looked a little rushed,
but the art actually got better towards the end.

know it all: I really rated you on how finished it was. If it was complete, I probably would have given you the win,
but it was REALLY incomplete and so I felt I couldn't rate it half as good as I would have. But man, cut the page length
in half like 5 pages or so and complete the whole thing, I think you hang with anybody on this site. I'm excited about
your future fights and you growing as an artist on here.  

Kuro
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# 22   Posted: Jan 22 2009, 11:10 AM
i have no idea why, but using this computer at work, i had to close firefox & actually use safari to read the first & tenth pages of corry's battle because for whatever reason, they wouldn't load for me other wise. chances are it might have been this stupid mac though. it's wonky as hell. anyway i finally got a chance to read these in full.

wolcik, you're looking better with these but the figures still strike me as being a bit stiff. your anatomy, for the most part is looking good, but making more fluid & natural poses would help push your art further. also, work on the backgrounds & other props in your pages. things like the bus & buildings looked awfully flat, plain, & geometric in contrast with the more realistic figures in your comics. once they get to the point where your figures are getting, these will definitely be looking pretty tight!

noitall, your stuff is ok, but it seems like you draw the figure & rely very heavily on photoshop for backgrounds & stuff & it gets a little muddied. in a lot of ways, had the unfinished pages contained more in the way of background detail, the would have probably looked a lot sharper than the more finished pages. just don't use photoshop as a crutch. your figures seem pretty nice. they come off looking a bit rigid. almost as if they were coming from photo ref. that kind of thing is fine to do for ref but be sure not to become to reliant as not everything has a photo to ref from, like the furry character in the beginning that looked off. and that font didn't really work either. really thin. something more organic & readable would help in your next battle. oh. and for your own fiscal well being, save the blueline pro papers for paying work or whatever. that stuff can get pricey. especially if you plan to drop page counts like this.

Wolcik
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# 21   Posted: Jan 22 2009, 11:06 AM
Looks like I've lost by less than 1%

Anyway, Thanks a lot for all critique :) I try to improve with it even more with it ;D

Angie
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# 20   Posted: Jan 18 2009, 05:54 PM
Wolcik-It looks like you're starting to come into your own with the story, I'm starting to get interested in what is going to happen next. I'm still not a fan of the soft shading you went with on the cover but since it wasn't all throughout the comic it's not really a problem. Your lineart and shading are getting better but there are still some areas where the backgrounds looked kind of barren. I'm wondering if doing some more hatching and some solid blacks would help make your stuff look a little less barren. Also be careful with those speedlines, try to make them look as though they're coming from the same point because at the moment they're all looking like they're each coming from a slightly different direction. Other than that this was looking good, glad to see you keep improving!

Darius-It was good for a first battle but definitely watch your page count in the future, at least until you're comfortable enough with working within a deadline to be able to finish. I'm glad to see your backgrounds are looking a lot better than your intros since that was a concern I'd had when you submitted Corry. On the pages you had toning it would have helped to vary your tones some so they wouldn't all blend together and becoming muddy. The story was pretty good and you did a good job at capturing Worltex, but watch the fonts you use. These were kind of difficult to read since they were so thin and blended into the lineart in the areas without word bubbles. Try to get some fonts from http://blambot.com Keep on going dude, this was very promising, I hope to see you finish up your next battle

Wolcik
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492 comments
# 19   Posted: Jan 17 2009, 09:08 AM
It's the first time I used this way of paneling - is it better to have larger space between panels?

sawbones
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# 18   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 01:51 PM
Darius- I usually just run around critiquing things like this on the shallower aspects. I don't know exactly what it was about your comic, but I genuinely liked it. It may have been the writing - the art shows a lot of potential in places, but is overall weak (inconsistently drawn faces and incomplete, offputting backgrounds that make the viewer feel awkward). Corry was believable to me as an idealistic young man, and while I don't know Worltex, I feel like you wrote him with the greatest respect for the character. It's rare that you see someone really try to depict the opponent's character as thoroughly as the creator themselves might. I can't emphasize enough how much I respect what you tried to do. Others have already mentioned it, but I wish this comic was finished, too. As for the shallow stuff - obviously there's the art stuff I mentioned, but I'd add that there are a lot of points where you didn't punctuate, or your text wasn't aligned properly in the text box. Some really useful general rules for text and boxes/balloons is that you want it centered as much as possible in the box/balloon - and there should be an appropriate amount of space around the words. A lot of people on Void seem to have issues with that.

Wolcik - Your comic wasn't offensively bad in any sense, though I wouldn't say it got me excited or enthusiastic. Your character didn't really interest me, either. The most interesting thing about your comic in my mind was the dynamic between the henchmen. I would love to see you do some cleaner inks, maybe study it more seriously. Try to use some thinner pens for detail and taper your lines - or use a brush pen/brush and ink so you can naturally vary your line widths.


Darius Corry
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# 17   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 10:01 AM
and my first and tenth page is showing on mine...I dont know how i can fix it.

Darius Corry
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# 16   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 09:49 AM
Yeah it's always cool to see your character rendered. Yeah it was a humbling experience with learning how to manage time and step by step construction. I apologize again Wolcik and others. I def wont let it happen again. But i def wasnt goin to default...even if people would've opted for the latter.

Wolcik
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# 15   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 09:36 AM
I've checked those pages few times, but I still have problems with writing - I need to find myself some spellcheck program, cause my PC takes polish as default.
I was sure that all pages were resized from the size I was scanning them :(

I like Corry's side very much - it's really well writen, but not even one page is finished :( and I can't see 1st and 10th page because of some error (the same goes for Corry's intro comics).

Fox24
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# 14   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 08:57 AM
YES YES YES! but ppppppllllllllease use spell check. umm wolcik it looks great but i can't stand the typos! thats pretty much the only bad thing other than the one giant page thats hard to read. Good stuff

Corry Corry Corry. Man great stuff but finish. You probably would have gotten like straight 9's if it was finished but there is a typo on page 4 i think and one page i can't read. Man it would have been great to see how it ends and this story finished.

Great battle

Coldstream
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# 13   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 07:17 AM
Wolcik- Looks good. Some typos, and one of the pgs has some sizing issues.

Mrnoitauill- Arghhh!! Such potential, but its not done. The bits and pieces of pencils are good, but there isn't one page of finished pencils.

Overall good quality and very entertaining!!

justarhymes
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# 12   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 06:35 AM
Wol - I think you should stick to line art.  It looks a lot better without colors.

Mrn -  It may not be done, but artwise it's still a nice improvement from your intros.

Darius Corry
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# 11   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 12:19 AM
Aight folks, my page wont be completed(even left out a page). I def thought I could finish the pgs in just any order.....leasson learned.

And yeah H an' H i know....u told me(I'll hear it in a couple hours).

Fox24
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# 10   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 12:17 AM
WOOOOOO LETS DO THIS!

Darius Corry
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# 9   Posted: Jan 16 2009, 12:01 AM
MAAAAN I am not proud of this. I am so sorry,Wol.

Fox24
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# 8   Posted: Jan 15 2009, 04:57 PM
WOOOOOO YEA BETTER INTRO THAN ME. You already know what not to do

Coldstream
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# 7   Posted: Jan 15 2009, 11:30 AM
The heat is on Corry!! You better get that sh#t done!!  ; )

Wolcik
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# 6   Posted: Jan 13 2009, 08:19 AM
Ok, I updated the whole thing - I still have 3 days left, but due some problems at work I won't find time to color the pages.
10 pages including colored cover - I think that this battle is much better than the previous ones :D
Mrnoitaull I'm looking foroward to yours :D

Coldstream
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# 5   Posted: Jan 7 2009, 10:36 AM
Lookin' good so far!!

Kuro
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# 4   Posted: Dec 29 2008, 11:33 AM
awwww.... i read too fast. i thought this was going to involve zombie corny

good luck anyhow

-J

Fox24
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# 3   Posted: Dec 28 2008, 08:36 PM
wow so positive there Hudson not the same response as my first battle but then again i don't think your adversary is as well known but your about to make a name for yourself. Bring home the W!

Coldstream
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# 2   Posted: Dec 26 2008, 09:34 PM
Ohoh somebody better get offa FaceBook!!

Fox24
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# 1   Posted: Dec 26 2008, 10:55 AM
WOOOOO bout time you got on here man. LETS SEE SOME VOIDING!!!!!!

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 3 weeks
Ended: Jan 22nd, 2009
Votes Cast: 16
Page Views: 1224
Winner: Wolcik

 

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