Flint Locke vs. Jin and Mr. Mayson

Flint Locke vs. Jin and Mr. Mayson


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by yeseG92


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justarhymes
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# 26   Posted: Dec 18 2008, 11:55 AM
dave - Although they were all over the place and at parts a little unclear, your black and white pages were really solid and showed potential, but everything fell apart, including line art, when you got to the colors (although some were good - like page 8).  I understand what you were doing, but it would have worked better to just maybe change the color of the line art, add a color in the gutters, or maybe just using one color.  I think you should work more with line art (especially since you're concerned with speed), and really get it polished.

yes - The colors were good and it was a fairly good read, but there were some things not quite right with it.  michaelharris and pong pointed out most of them, so I won't beat a dead horse, but I'd like to double up on it having low contrast in parts and to work on buildings some more.

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# 25   Posted: Dec 17 2008, 07:53 AM
Dave- um I'm just not going to leave comments for you anymore.

Yeseg- Don't let the anime overtake the anatomy. Keep working on anatomy and perspective. Your characters are still posed a little stiffly and your buildings are a little boxy, I would suggest googling an image of a clinic and then designing the architecture off of that rather than slapping a name on a box. Nice colors!

storywise I enjoyed it. It was clear and understandable. I wasn't a big fan of the super-anime-cliche trippy conversation in a dark room. I have seen that way too many times. I understand the need for the car crash page, but while I was reading this I was watching some old anime from 95 and they did that same thing about 4 times.

amazingdavid
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# 24   Posted: Dec 16 2008, 12:54 AM
tis true angieness...I do upload way early problem being...I spend more than a week on anything and I get bored and don't want to do it anymore...

I draw comics because they are fun the moment they become a job....poo poo on that...

so my goal is...get better at making comics faster..instead of the alternative which is...spend more time on making comics...which of course is the easier solution...

Angie
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# 23   Posted: Dec 15 2008, 07:40 PM
I'm like the only person that understood the comics it looks like haha I guess that's what years of watching weird messed up dream shit helped

Amazingdavid-It's good to see you always trying something new in each of your battles, but I feel as though you never really take advantage of the time you are given. (well, it doesn't help I can see when you upload your stuff and you often upload 1-2 weeks ahead of time most of the time haha) I honestly had no problem following this comic as the sudden bizarre change in the colors and style made it clear to me that the setting/time had changed.

YESEg92-I was impressed, this looked quite a bit better from your intros so it's good to see that you improved. The colors looked really nice but it looks like either your scanner had its way with them or saved them with a very odd setting in Photoshop. Like Amazingdavid, I didn't have issues understanding what was going on with the exception of the getting hit by a jeep part since I didn't see that in your part nor David's.

amazingdavid
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# 22   Posted: Dec 15 2008, 05:47 PM
I uh...liked the randomness of both comics...considering dream logic doesn't really make sense in the real world...

But I understand the  confusion.

Oh I would also like to say that I drew and colored mine while wasted...as to help with the randomness...this explains the inconsistent line work...basically I thought "Hey if I draw ever box with a different tool (which I did) then this will be super random and trippy" ....but in the end it just comes off as sucky...so thanks everyone for the feedback...

Especially dimension...I think I will try to keep a specific style going. so as to get quality feedback on my growth.  My biggest problem is I get bored really quickly and I'm like "I wanna try something new!" ...next battle...is probably the style I'm gonna stick too for a few to come...

yeseG92
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# 21   Posted: Dec 15 2008, 03:43 PM
Alright so here's my sxplination out our stories to everyone XD
basically, flint got knocked the fuck out and started dreaming of jin in his dream. in my story, jin and his cousin, peter get high and he starts dreaming and meets flint (in the dream). Then in the real world, flint and jin go to the clinic and see each other in real life. so they flip out and yeah they end up in the loony bin. hope that clears some things up
but i think it was even more confusing cuz we were going for random ass-dreams. so yeah. now i can see why people are confused!(i would be too) XD

Dimension
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# 20   Posted: Dec 15 2008, 11:16 AM
yeaaaaah, I have no idea what's going on...everything's pretty "wtf?"

@Dave: nice inks you had on the first few pages, it was looking good, but then everything became pretty inconsistent. I know your trying to always try new things and new styles (which is cool and all) but it can become hard to really critique your work sometimes because your always constantly changing the types of styles you're using; it's hard to sometimes see what it is you need to really work on or if it's just part of the style you were using for that comic. If you kept on having the ink work you had on the first few pages and colored it (or not, it looks nice either way) for all your comics, I think you'd do just fine. Neat comic, but I suggest trying to keep the art more consistent next time. XD

@YESEg: Like I mentioned before I didn't really understand the story...sorry ^^;
anyways the art was pretty nice, and the colors look pretty good. the only thing I'd suggest working on is hands, they're looking pretty big and thick; try making them smaller. Aaaand also this could just be a personal preference thing... but the eyes on your characters sometimes look really...uh..wide? not sure what it is, but they look a little weird sometimes though. I believe this was a pretty nice first battle from you though, good work and hope to see more soon! :D

....I just hope the story won't be as confusing for me next time. D:

Fox24
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# 19   Posted: Dec 15 2008, 08:42 AM
I"M SO CONFUSED! it looks great but can someone tell me whats going on? are they both high or what?

King_Pong
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# 18   Posted: Dec 14 2008, 12:34 PM
Uh.  I honestly do not know what the hell is going on here story wise.

Amazing david, the first several pages over your comic are really hard to understand visually.  And it's annoying that the cat flies away in the opposite direction of the impact...  beyond that I dunno what to think here, I don't want to sound too harsh but you're not giving me a lot to compliment  here.  I mean where you have color - the color is nice - but not all of your comic is colored... so what can I say?  the line work is inconsistent page to page - and it's really sloppy on a few pages.  

YESg92, the art for the most part looks nice - but your scanner or something is killing it.  Up the contrast a bit, and save it at a higher quality - because the weird pixelation and the low contrast are really, REALLY killing your pages here.  There's nothing more annoying than trying to see something that might be really good - but you don't know if it is or not because it's so dirty.  Anyway, it looks like it would look good if it weren't for the artifacts and muddiness, minus a bit of wonky anatomy here and there.  And yeah I still don't really get the story.

webrynth
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# 17   Posted: Dec 13 2008, 10:42 PM
Both of you too fericken Bute-all!

Shmonday whom had this one...

Black to work

yeseG92
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# 16   Posted: Dec 13 2008, 09:51 PM
NYAAA~! i love how you drew jin! especially on page 6 XD i really like your compositions and camera angles. along with your action sequences. they actually look like they're moving! 8D your colored pages were really nice, but some panels looked a little rushed (don't know if you wanted it to look like that tho). the details in the background were fun to look at, but sometimes it was hard to pick out the character from it, my eyes didn't know what to settle on. But either way i loved it. it was a lot crazier than mine!(which is good, considering that we were going for a crack-headed ass dream) XD It was fun battling you and i'm glad you were my first contender.
i wuvvles you~! 8D

amazingdavid
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# 15   Posted: Dec 13 2008, 07:52 PM
Yese:  Awesome story...I chuckled and smiled and laughed all the way through.  you have quite a way with story telling your pacing is nice and even and you do extremely well with establishing the characters personalities in a short amount of time.  I love the way you portrayed Flint.  Your art is really interesting and I think that is great.  I have no idea how you created the effect you did which to me is fucking awesome...simply because the more mysterious art is too me the more amazing it becomes.  I agree with craqued though you need a bit more contrast and a bump up in your anatomy...other than that this was excellent and I am excited to have battled you!!!

Craqued
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# 14   Posted: Dec 13 2008, 07:14 PM
david: you have some great color combos and visual ideas! i'd work on strengthening your black and white work though because they seem uncontrolled and they are important when doing color pieces as well. a lot of your b&w panels are unbalanced not only in the panel but in relation to the whole page, so its just some thing you have to take time and think about; thumbing and making sure youre whole page flows well value-wise will help you a lot. page 1 there is very little flow, it just looks like randomly placed splatters and its hard to read and i found that throughout your b&w pages. page 4 panel 3 is a good simple example of value and being able to seperate foreground from background and you can keep that seperation with as much detail you want but it just takes practice. so just something to think about, but your colored pages were waaaay fun to look at! loved all the psychedelic little concepts too.

yese: you have quite a style with the way you color! it gives everything a really eerie feel to the mood of the story and it looks really nice. you also have a value problem but with you your not even adding much contrast at all while david is trying but not controlling it enough. this makes everything look flat; try and add more value and i think thatll give your work a lot more depth. more detail or defining in the backgrounds would make it funner to look at. also the anatomy in some spots was off a bit but thats something everyone works on all the time.

keep it up guysss

Angie
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# 13   Posted: Dec 13 2008, 06:51 PM
And something weird happened with the thumbnails. I'll have Toast look into it tomorrow since I have no idea why some of the wrong thumbs are showing.

yeseG92
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# 12   Posted: Dec 13 2008, 02:34 PM
NEVERMIND!
UPLOADED! X3 my files were too big XD i'm hella stupid

yeseG92
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# 11   Posted: Dec 13 2008, 12:46 PM
aaahhh! the uploader isn't working! i tried sending them to angie and she told me to send them to toast and then toast told me to send them to wei XD omg! and i tried to send them to wei in an e-mail but all of those pages put together are too big for the e-mail.
What should i do??? D:

Kon
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# 10   Posted: Dec 7 2008, 09:25 AM
OMG, HE IS AS FAST AS A TRAIN

amazingdavid
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# 9   Posted: Dec 3 2008, 09:43 PM
Uploaded!!! BOOOYAAAH!!

E.W. Schneider
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# 8   Posted: Dec 3 2008, 01:40 PM
Good luck on your first battle, Yes and good luck to you David!

amazingdavid
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# 7   Posted: Nov 23 2008, 11:17 PM
I likes me some sammiches

aribooboo
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# 6   Posted: Nov 23 2008, 08:09 PM
go go go! OUO i'll buy the winner a sandwhich!

yeseG92
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# 5   Posted: Nov 16 2008, 06:29 PM
omg! for real~! XD

thanks guys =D

amazingdavid
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# 4   Posted: Nov 16 2008, 06:11 PM
Look...our hair is the same!!!

          (\__/)
          (^_^)
          ( UU)
           UU

Dimension
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# 3   Posted: Nov 16 2008, 03:08 PM
Oooo, ahhhh :o

good luck on your first battle YESEg92! :D

make this awesome guys :3

squid
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# 2   Posted: Nov 16 2008, 02:50 PM
Neato.

Corny
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# 1   Posted: Nov 16 2008, 02:34 PM
Ooooooooh

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 4 weeks
Ended: Dec 20th, 2008
Votes Cast: 24
Page Views: 1618
Winner: yeseG92

 

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