solly: Really nice pencil work. And explosions. I think the digital borders and sound effects you had didn\'t work with the pencils very well. Maybe next time do the borders in pencil as well as the art. I didn\'t think it was a bad fight, but I feel like more could have been done with the idea to make it more memorable?
DJneko: Maybe you could have put a few panels in to accompany the three text pages. I don\'t know if you just ran out of time or something so maybe it wasn\'t possible. I liked the story a lot though
Speed Death Tournament 2008: Round 1 / Swan vs. Willis
Critiques & Comments
# 13
Posted:
Apr 28 2008, 12:46 PM
# 12
Posted:
Apr 23 2008, 02:39 PM
This is one of the weirdest fights I\'ve read.
Neko: Girl, you were wonderful until the text pages popped up. I really wish you could of finished this too. I honestly don\'t have a whole lot to say right now, but I think you should consider trimming out that negative space on the tops and bottoms of your pages to fill things out.
Solly: This is one of the more unique fights I\'ve seen so far in this tourney, but the fact that it didn\'t look finished kinda ruined it for me slightly. Everybody should be killed in a nuclear explosion more often in fights.
I was pretty even with my votes here. Quality went to neko, entertainment went to Solly.
Neko: Girl, you were wonderful until the text pages popped up. I really wish you could of finished this too. I honestly don\'t have a whole lot to say right now, but I think you should consider trimming out that negative space on the tops and bottoms of your pages to fill things out.
Solly: This is one of the more unique fights I\'ve seen so far in this tourney, but the fact that it didn\'t look finished kinda ruined it for me slightly. Everybody should be killed in a nuclear explosion more often in fights.
I was pretty even with my votes here. Quality went to neko, entertainment went to Solly.
# 11
Posted:
Apr 22 2008, 10:02 PM
Neko - My comments mirror Marley\'s. Great pacing, i love your character too! Next time start beefing up your panels. Adding backgrounds, zooming out showing more character. I wish you could of finished this! You got skills!
Solly - Your comic was just as weird and entertaining as your character. But I don\'t know what pile to put it on. You can defiantly draw, thats no question. But you have to be in it to win it.
Solly - Your comic was just as weird and entertaining as your character. But I don\'t know what pile to put it on. You can defiantly draw, thats no question. But you have to be in it to win it.
# 10
Posted:
Apr 22 2008, 03:09 PM
Neko: The story was getting envolving, and caught me reading all along...till the texts popped up, that was really \"D:\", like.. I was just waiting for the action to happen when that happens.. so it kinda cut the boner. The art was fairly nice!
Solly: that was really creative I guess haha, Don\'t give up just yet!! D:
Solly: that was really creative I guess haha, Don\'t give up just yet!! D:
# 9
Posted:
Apr 22 2008, 11:02 AM
oh and yeah my vote goes to neko =P
# 8
Posted:
Apr 22 2008, 11:00 AM
neko - You have awesome awesome awesome pacing. Now you linework needs to catch up =P and when i say lineart I mean backgrounds because i had no idea willis was lookin\' into a fridge. I wish you had time to finish it all, and don\'t lose the toning. I adds a nice finished look to it!
Solly - You\'ve got the skills, but it looks like the time killed you =( I thought the part with mister sun was kinda funny though!
Solly - You\'ve got the skills, but it looks like the time killed you =( I thought the part with mister sun was kinda funny though!
# 7
Posted:
Apr 22 2008, 10:23 AM
Neko-You need to step away from those dots dude! I really think your work stands just fine on its own without the toning on it. Some of my favorite stuff of your\'s was just purely ink work. I thought the character was a lot of fun and I enjoyed where the story was going. I do however think that you need to start only taking on things you know you will have time to do. I know you\'re trying to get better about doing a lot of things at once, but you will only let yourself down when you\'re unable to finish. I really really really want to see you step back, chill, and come back with your A game because I know what you\'re capable of.
Solly-You had some nice things going on in your lineart and I really want to see you just totally take a longass deadline and see where it will take you. Willis is creepy as hell and I would have liked to see him interact a bit more with Swan. I was very confused about what was going on though, you jumped around quite a bit and ended abrutply.
Solly-You had some nice things going on in your lineart and I really want to see you just totally take a longass deadline and see where it will take you. Willis is creepy as hell and I would have liked to see him interact a bit more with Swan. I was very confused about what was going on though, you jumped around quite a bit and ended abrutply.
# 6
Posted:
Apr 14 2008, 09:42 PM
d o i t
# 5
Posted:
Apr 14 2008, 07:43 PM
DONT LOOK INSIDE HIS TRENCHCOAT. NO MATTER WHAT HE SAYS. IT IS NOT FILLED WITH SUNSHINE AND PUPPIES.
# 4
Posted:
Apr 14 2008, 07:24 PM
You gonna git raped.
# 3
Posted:
Apr 14 2008, 07:11 PM
DOKI DOKI MAJO SHINPAN
WHERE IS WILLIS\' WITCH FINDING PEN?
WHERE IS WILLIS\' WITCH FINDING PEN?
# 2
Posted:
Apr 14 2008, 06:44 PM
Swan Song
# 1
Posted:
Apr 14 2008, 06:12 PM
When I look at the character icons, this looks kind of illegal...like Willis is some creepy old dude wanting to do bad things to a girl
Speed Death Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Apr 28th, 2008
Votes Cast:
52
Page Views:
3124
Winner:
nanashi
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