Click Lyric vs. Egg Dealer

Click Lyric vs. Egg Dealer

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BoogidiBzdo
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17 comments
# 12   Posted: Dec 25 2018, 11:57 PM
Thanks everyone for reading and commenting. I'm going to try to come up with some new plots for the future. I enjoy the challenge that each battle/comic brings.

ArtsandGoodies
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215 comments
# 11   Posted: Dec 24 2018, 09:12 PM
Tech: I love this new version of Tech, I like how he now has Elle as an assistant and page 3 Click talking to himself is great. I also like the fly by over the city having multiple different events going on. This was really clean for just pencils and really awesome and I really want to see more of this new click and also see him in color and with your awesome inks.

Boogidi: You have been consistently doing a lot of full colored comics for each battle and that is really awesome and your constant styles to improving are great. Here are some things I want to see you try and do. First a technical thing, It looks like your action lines are on the same layer as your lineart, next time make sure they are on a different layer and also play around with your program since there are likely tools/brushes that are action lines that you can do. If you don't have any of those i would recommend trying a perspective ruler so all your lines can follow a same angle and be more consistent. As someone who also messes this up your action lines should be uniform and wide consistent for the panel.
While you have been willing to try and experiment new things and challenging views with your art your writing hasn't had as much challenge. I do respect that you were willing to have Click get the advantage on Egg dealer it was still fundamentally the same thing since egg dealer wins and the advantage Click had is quickly taken away. Kozi gave a good recommendation in that Egg dealer should be explaining his lore more to the other person. While Egg dealer is Crazy we need more, One of the ways you can do that is through over the top explanations about the history of eggs or other stuff like that. Also new over the top attacks kind of like what Tech did in his comic as well as over the top explanations for said attacks would be good.
Beyond that I really want you to try a completely different story. I have recommended you do this in the past and I will repeat it that you need to do a different type of story, you should experiment with your stories as much as you experiment and test your art skills. You have been practicing and experimenting a bunch with your art always looking to do new things. I want to see you do the same with your writing since that same experimentation with writing will prove great for your growth and it's clear that this same format is tiring for some of those who enjoyed it previously.

Radji
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518 comments
# 10   Posted: Dec 22 2018, 03:17 PM
Tech: don't get it wrong from cuz i LOVE your comics, but i LONG for the day you give us a fully inked and colored Click battle.
Your depiction of Egg Dealer is JoJo-tier and perfect.

Boog: this time i was less hyped. Egg dealers is the wackiest wacko of the void cast, so seeing him like this is kind of a turn-off. But still got all the right energy.

Kozispoon
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1045 comments
# 9   Posted: Dec 22 2018, 11:21 AM
TECH- I agree that despite the rough look of it, your comics are legible and we get a general sense of the action. It just kills me you have such a promising foundation and in 2 weeks it couldn't get to more of a polished end point both art wise and story wise.

BOOG- I'm not gonna lie, your character and story is jarring. It ramps up to this cool action which culminates in realizing the fight didnt really have to happen in the first place. You start off with your character withholding payment, when in the end he had more than a surplus of the fee (and bonus) to provide at the end. I feel it just deflates the stakes of the prior tussle they had as more of a 'well why did we even do that?' endpoint.

That said, you got some cool panel angles and an interesting sense of composition. I feel you have this deep lore and contextual background when it comes to egg dealer and his dealings with his eggs that you're trying to pack in on top of the comic battle and opponent interaction, but it feels like more of an anecdote you're struggling to find a place to wedge in. I'd suggest weaving into your narrative more naturally. maybe egg dealer likes monologuing and educating his opponents about eggs?

Julz
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371 comments
# 8   Posted: Dec 20 2018, 11:59 AM
Tech- Despite the rough line art, it is surprisingly easy to reads and flows nicely. the gags are very well done, I loved getting to see all the oddball stuff going on in the city before he crash-landed at his destination. I adore click's monologue. I also think you really wrote the opponent's character very accurately.

BOOG- you draw a very unsettling looking click XD I just had to laugh! I really like the way you drew click pg 4 panel 4. Very nice shot! Your gags are starting to get a little old though. Can we get some character evolution? Some kind of conflict maybe? It  may or may not be the point to have him be one dimensionally ridiculous, but I'm bored of the same jokes my dude.

      Edited Dec 20 2018,  11:59 AM by Julz

Hellis
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209 comments
# 7   Posted: Dec 20 2018, 09:21 AM
Tech: My dude. Your art is so good even in the roughest state eveything is super readable and your flow is so good in this. Pacing wise I feel this was super strong. I enjoyed it from start to finish. I wonder if its your animation aspirationgs but your stuff reads a lot like a story board, you rarely break out of the standard box ontop of box paneling. In this case, it works but sometimes it can make good art and storytelling seem less standout then it should. Explore the medium, take a look at some artists who really like using the panels themselves to tell a story.

Boogidi: Keep that grind my friends. I'm afraid for me though, your stories while consistently funny are starting running down the same line of thought repeatedly, and one note jokes only have so much time before they stop being effective.

Corn Of The Breads
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132 comments
# 6   Posted: Dec 19 2018, 01:24 PM
both of these comics were so expressive and killed me great job on both you guys.

Desichan
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181 comments
# 5   Posted: Dec 18 2018, 08:40 PM
Boogidi:Good job making up a 10 page colored comic, friend! I do have a few pointers id like to say though, i feel like your stories are starting to lose a bit of their originality, because it seems you've been sticking to a rather rigid story structure. Egg Dealer wants someone to be an egg... Person doesn't want to be an egg... Egg Dealer wins in the end because he's super great. It'd be neat to see something not so much go in his favor, and to see what's happened so far, result in some kind of consequence eventually, or a plot progression of sorts? It feels like he's always painted as right, and like he never has too severe a conflict. You were more creative with this time, and without using npcs which i appreciate, (not that npcs are bad, but they are if they overshadow opponents) but it feels like you needta step out of your comfort zone a bit more, and i think that'd do you wonders since your character is already incredibly wacky.

Tech: I LOVED THE JOKES AND THE EGG SWORD, that amused me a lot! Good comic!

yarnwitch
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277 comments
# 4   Posted: Dec 18 2018, 06:38 PM
[screams]

Pita
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168 comments
# 3   Posted: Dec 18 2018, 06:24 PM
I'm crying, these were both pretty fun to read

Pita
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168 comments
# 2   Posted: Dec 4 2018, 06:13 PM
A fast blue mammal VS an egg man.
Hold my chili dogs, this is gonna be interesting.

Astro Sean
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317 comments
# 1   Posted: Dec 4 2018, 08:47 AM
This is honestly a dream match up!

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Ended: Dec 25th, 2018
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