The Thieving Cat / Kreta, Ji Kei, Tetsukawa Zanko, Lang Zhujiang, Zariah Aman, and Hakase and Kuno

The Thieving Cat — Kreta, Ji Kei, Tetsukawa Zanko, Lang Zhujiang, Zariah Aman, and Hakase and Kuno


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Cracking Skulls
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# 11   Posted: Feb 21 2018, 08:27 PM
So, good effot all around, you guys did well in connecting your pages together of better flow of reading the story and pacing of the comic.The tones added to every pages makes this all come together as one comic. Each character dilemma added to the fun and overall it was a fun read.

Now for some feedback:
There *are* some pages that, personally, caught my eye as a not-so-good- layout job. Some examples would be like page 10, where there are very wide shots with a lot of empty space, a the first panel wouldn't have needed that wide a shot to convey the sense of anger and rage about to happen, while the second panel, while it does work, would benefit from cutting the  empty unused space on the right side of the panel. Page 29 has a weird issue with placement of backgrounds and characters. Panel one suggest, based on posing, that the characters are looking ahead towards the explosion, but next panel they're looking upwards.
One thing that did bother me was the speech and word bubble placements. While it's not as frequent throughout the comic, I find that shoving in japanese phrases or words into english dialogue seems off. 'Producer-san' is weird when it's out of no where and no one else,not even the same character saying that, is referring anyone else with honorifics. It's not clearly explained what a bakaneko (bakeneko? there was a typo saying baka neko instead), but it would benefit to maybe further explain a tiny bit more than just referring it as a pain in the ass. Page 20, dont you ever use that many elipses ever again holy hell please. Lastly page 31, is something I mentioned before privately: text boxes should read in the direction the comic is reading; left to right. first time reading it, it threw me off to read two dialogue boxes stacked on top of each other, only to have me read a text I missed on the right. Do not ignore this, this can ultimately mess you up when readers miss a dialogue thats part of the conversation your characters are having.

Overall fun read! can't wait to see all these girls in action again!

Shen
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# 10   Posted: Feb 21 2018, 06:45 PM
You guys did such great work! For a sort of vaguely outlines page tradeoff story it came out pretty cohesive, and your art styles all compliment each other well~ Its great to see more Kung Fu Mountain girls! This was a lot of fun to read, it felt like you guys had fun doing it, great comic! Also: BUTTS!

yarnwitch
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# 9   Posted: Feb 21 2018, 06:02 AM
Loved the page tag idea! This was fun and goofy, good job!

Hellis
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# 8   Posted: Feb 19 2018, 09:57 AM
I was entertained throughout. There wasn't a dull moment and I enjoyed the comic a whole lot. Good job guys!

Julz
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# 7   Posted: Feb 18 2018, 12:20 PM
Great comic guys! Nice work!!

Mister Kent
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# 6   Posted: Feb 17 2018, 10:30 AM
Pretty interesting stuff! I forgot KFG was a thing so it was a nice reminder. I look forward to seeing each lady in their further adventures.

Monday
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# 5   Posted: Feb 16 2018, 09:49 PM
" The Moment I saw Ji Kei's face I knew I was in for a bad time "
- Oscar Ebert

" I like the plot "
- Anon420

" I too like the plot"
- BossthinksmcheckingEmail

" The manga grains were lovely it feels like it's 1997 again when the war on drugs, and Russians was our worst problem "
- Arnold Shortman

" My favorite is the part where I couldn't tell which artist was drawing because the power of friendship took over like an eldritch abomination and they knew that the one dominion superceded mortal teamwork "
- The 3rd Envoy of the Virgo Collective

" Plot is nice "
- 5th Fleet Admiral

" When will you come home, good Hunter "
- Doll.

" A day in the life of void couldn't be captured in a more succinct way. But why did the pagoda explode ? The mysteries of life "
- NPC

" 卍 SKrrriiieeeeyaeeeeagghhhhh 卍 "
- Raptor Buddha.

" This is like Armageddon but with a lot of butt shots "

" This is a complete comic and there is little to comment on terms of what could be better save for some background silhouettes being less flat and there being more play on space and kinetic shots. Not because they are lacking but because they are already so strong that improving them further would have drastically pushed the piece to immersive levels. Other than that the plot was nice, but your butts need more variety Mize.
- Monday


Maria Rustwood
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# 4   Posted: Feb 16 2018, 09:41 PM
Great collab and quite the chase!

Hellis
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168 comments
# 3   Posted: Feb 16 2018, 01:05 AM
Ohhhh shit.

Happy December 10th! -Reecer6
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# 2   Posted: Feb 15 2018, 08:13 PM
Oooooh, so this is one of those secret projects? Sounds super fun! I always love to see some exquisite corpse stuff!

EDIT: okay this isn't EXACTLY exquisite corpse, but like, same ballpark. still good fun.

      Edited Feb 15 2018,  09:21 PM by Happy December 10th! -Reecer6

Majikura
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# 1   Posted: Feb 15 2018, 06:53 PM
This is a Page Tag comic between all the current members of the KFG.  There was no script and each member had to continue the story from how the previous member ended their last page.  The final touches of the comic were then treated by Mamoru for unification purposes.

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