Virtua vs. Sonny del Salvador

Virtua vs. Sonny del Salvador


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by Coatl


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Flutterbyes
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# 9   Posted: Dec 23 2017, 06:26 PM
MRPR: The action is done well, but I feel like Sonny is incidental.  That newcomer is so cute, though. I wonder if you should put a white line of some sort when Virtua's lips are pressed together like on that last page. It kind of looked like she was going :O

Coatl: OH, wow, watching him squirm when he gets what he thinks he wants in spades was hilarious. But Virtua is just looking for love, too, and the way you work in those more vulnerable expressions really worked. I don't know what your time constraints were, but the art is tight enough that you could have probably spared a moment to fiddle with the levels to get the scans looking a little nicer.

      Edited Dec 23 2017,  06:28 PM by Flutterbyes

Corn Of The Breads
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# 8   Posted: Dec 23 2017, 05:51 PM
Mr Pr I really like how you are setting up an ongoing story. Coatl I really like the pacing of the humor and the expressions of the characters. You both did an amazing job!

Shen
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# 7   Posted: Dec 20 2017, 10:58 PM
MrPr: the weird little monster that appeared at the end of the comic was my favorite part but because of the exact reason it stated- comic felt a bit pointless. the conversation between sonny and virtua had no depth, the fight was random and meaningless, and the action was even kind of stilted. I wanna know what that thing at the end was coz it introduced the only interesting story element. sorry this critique is kinda harsh =T I just feel like you didnt put much into this one an i know you can do better.
Ernesto- i confess i lost my shit at "pocket Arena" XD I like that its done traditional but it could have used some levelling in photoshop to hide some of the pencil marks. some places it looks like you didnt even bother to erase the pencils at ll after inking and theres construction lines all over. I love how you draw Virtua though, and Sonny's hilarious expressions, and the ending was funny. I hope you do more battles!

Astrodile
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# 6   Posted: Dec 19 2017, 12:33 PM
Both of the comics were certainly a joy to read! I love how different these two comics were-- In story and also artistic medium! Great job to the both of you.

@MrPr, I adore the thumbnail! I don't have much to say particularly, I would've liked to see more detailed backgrounds BUT considering how the characters and the enemy took up most of the space in certain panels, I'm not too nit-picky about it. I love Virtua's face in the second panel on page six a whole lot, I think she's pretty cute haha.

@Coatl Fantastic traditional art, yo! The motion lines looked great on page four, and the characters facial expressions look wonderful. Better cleanup on the sketch lines would've been appreciated, but none of that is too distracting from the pages in their entirety so it's of no bother to me all in all. (I really love how Virtua makes a heart shape with the hamburgers! Adorable :D!)

yarnwitch
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# 5   Posted: Dec 18 2017, 08:24 PM
These were both super silly and I loved them.

@MrPr I'm happy to see you exaggerating some proportions for effect in these pages! Something I'd do is look for another font for people that aren't Virtua. The font is too smooth when everything else on the page is nicely pixelly, so it feels a little jarring. It seems to only do this on the first page, for whatever reason?  AND WHO IS THE MYSTERY PERSON!?!?!?!? I think overall I would also have preferred more backgrounds so I could have gotten a sense of where they are throughout the comic, but you got the movement pretty well in my opinion and it was quite the nice read!

@Ernesto Oh man Trad Art. My heart.♥ This whole comic plot is goofy and its gonna be hard not to ship them now. I appreciated a lot of the shots you chose in this one, and I feel like the burgers flying on page 4 were really one of my favorite effects. It is, however, a bit messy, since I can still see the undersketches and such. The cleanness of the fonts used is weird next to the handdrawn stuff, but if you had upped the contrast a bit more, it may have fit better. If you have time in future comics, maybe clean it up a bit! (also fight me!)

Desichan
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# 4   Posted: Dec 17 2017, 09:18 AM
@MrPr

I'm not sure I really had the biggest clue what was going on, for most of the story. Your art looks really nice, I've really been loving what you're doing with the pixel thing, but sometimes, at least for me, your stories are a bit hard to follow. I do however feel like that ending was interesting, and paves the way for future story related stuff!

@Ernesto

I really liked your story to be entirely honest, it was really funny and honestly really enjoyable to read! Your art is nice as well! Honestly, the only thing to really bug me in this comic persay, is the fact that your pages were not sized correctly, which can make comics a bit more frustrating to read at times. I know you were rushing at the end, so I'm able to mostly let that go, but just remember that you always want you page width 1000px or smaller.

Overall nice comics from both of you! Congrats on your guys's battle!

William_Duel
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# 3   Posted: Dec 17 2017, 08:34 AM
Ernesto, Dale Gribble would be so proud of you.

Shen
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1179 comments
# 2   Posted: Dec 1 2017, 01:59 PM
HYPE

MrPr1993
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56 comments
# 1   Posted: Dec 1 2017, 01:22 PM
SHOWTIME

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Dec 23rd, 2017
Votes Cast: 21
Page Views: 436
Winner: Coatl

 

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