MRPR: I enjoy your stories and your sense of humor and it's cool to see you change up the pacing of the comic and still have a humorous story. I really enjoy the "dead/alive" argument reminding me of classic cartoon humor in a good way.
However I do agree with Kozi in that this was a step back for you art wise. There were full gray panels when you could have used that gray in more panels to distinguish the backgrounds better. Also you should be pulling back the panels more. I would say give around 30% of the panel for dialogue and if dialogue bubbles are intersecting characters slightly that means you should decrease the size of the characters in the panel and zoom out more. You have seemed to have found your groove with stories so I look forward to seeing what you can do with the art as well.
Pepper- I remember you mentioning you lost progress on this cause of dumb computer stuff and that sucks and I hope things improve soon.
Grita The Reaper vs. Prisma Thanatos
Critiques & Comments
# 6
Posted:
Dec 29 2018, 04:08 PM
# 5
Posted:
Dec 27 2018, 10:08 AM
MRPR1993- The story is something I would totally expect from you. Nice little slapstick with the alive and dead argument. I even dug the first page where Grita comes in looking all ominous saying 'its time' and her presence goes over like a fart when Prisma interrupts. To totally shirk her duties for some hard to find sodar made me smirk.
That said, this comic is *rough*. I had to double check your deadline because I thought this was a 1 day battle. I looked at your fancy thumbnails and was expecting to find comic pages that would meet or at least look similar in quality to them. I've seen your battles improve by leaps and bounds, so I'm confused as to sudden and steep drop of this one.
That said, this comic is *rough*. I had to double check your deadline because I thought this was a 1 day battle. I looked at your fancy thumbnails and was expecting to find comic pages that would meet or at least look similar in quality to them. I've seen your battles improve by leaps and bounds, so I'm confused as to sudden and steep drop of this one.
# 4
Posted:
Dec 27 2018, 09:06 AM
MRPR- Really like how varied your camera angles are, it really complements the story. Old dude getting killed and revived multiple times made me laugh. Enjoyed it. The panels took me out of the story a bit, I'd recommend using a simpler layout and let the art dictate where the reader's eye travels.
Pepper- Bummed I didn't get to see yours, happens to the best of us.
Pepper- Bummed I didn't get to see yours, happens to the best of us.
# 3
Posted:
Dec 25 2018, 05:07 PM
MrPr: I love Grita and your sense of humor. Laughed at the ending. Good job!
Pepper: Hope you're feeling better, man! Don't let defaulting consume you. It sometimes happens, try to not beat yourself up over it, a'ight? A'ight.
Pepper: Hope you're feeling better, man! Don't let defaulting consume you. It sometimes happens, try to not beat yourself up over it, a'ight? A'ight.
# 2
Posted:
Dec 15 2018, 03:01 PM
grabbed extension. feeling like garbage and been dealing with stuff. but comic is still in the making. X3
# 1
Posted:
Dec 4 2018, 08:46 AM
Yo, get that shit! Beat the heck outta each other!
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
2 weeks + 1
Ended:
Dec 31st, 2018
Votes Cast:
12
Page Views:
1934
Winner:
MrPr1993
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