Queen of the Night / Cadenza
Critiques & Comments
# 15
Posted:
Aug 12 2018, 11:56 PM
Thank you guys for the comments and critiques! I did rush and I completely agree I need to have someone look over my writing but I was happy with what I made. My goal was just to make a a fully colored comic and I achieved it. Now to do it again but cleaner!!
# 14
Posted:
Aug 12 2018, 04:10 PM
This was a great comic I liked the story you put here and the mother character is really awesome for how terrible a person she is. I will say regardless of the changing quality of the background you did a great job establishing the world and doing world-building and making this a clearly unique setting. also it's cool that she didn't get back her magic from this BB and also looks like she could use some new arms.
# 13
Posted:
Aug 11 2018, 11:45 PM
Great comic, Cats!! I'm glad you didn't immediately restore her powers and let this character go down a new path instead. I love the unexpected turn of events and I'm rooting for Cadenza to prevail!
I don't think I read all the comics during when Magic Mayhem was happening, so this comic on its own did a good job summarizing past events and giving additional context to her story and world, so great work on that!
I got the impression you were in a hurry to finish this comic from the less refined panels and the typos as others have already pointed out. Next time I would recommend you let someone do proofreading before you upload, the text would be one of the easier things to fix within a short span of time.
Overall I still really enjoyed this comic, Looking forward to see what you have in store for her next!
I don't think I read all the comics during when Magic Mayhem was happening, so this comic on its own did a good job summarizing past events and giving additional context to her story and world, so great work on that!
I got the impression you were in a hurry to finish this comic from the less refined panels and the typos as others have already pointed out. Next time I would recommend you let someone do proofreading before you upload, the text would be one of the easier things to fix within a short span of time.
Overall I still really enjoyed this comic, Looking forward to see what you have in store for her next!
# 12
Posted:
Aug 10 2018, 05:21 PM
I enjoyed this story a lot Good going!
The backgrounds are a mixed bag, sometimes they're fine sometimes they're rushed, they probably could have used more time to cook overall. Also needed was some serious spellcheck ^^; there are grammatical errors everywhere, be it spelling or punctuation etc., and the switching from word bubbles to outlines here and there got me confused, I wasn't sure if what I was reading was meant to be an inner monologue/thought or spoken out loud.
Overall most of your problems are technical oversights that can be fixed with time and practice and focus. Just keep on keeping, I'm excited to see what happens next~
The backgrounds are a mixed bag, sometimes they're fine sometimes they're rushed, they probably could have used more time to cook overall. Also needed was some serious spellcheck ^^; there are grammatical errors everywhere, be it spelling or punctuation etc., and the switching from word bubbles to outlines here and there got me confused, I wasn't sure if what I was reading was meant to be an inner monologue/thought or spoken out loud.
Overall most of your problems are technical oversights that can be fixed with time and practice and focus. Just keep on keeping, I'm excited to see what happens next~
# 11
Posted:
Aug 8 2018, 08:28 AM
A great story! I loved how cruel you write her mother and how Cadenza is struggling to stay strong and stand up against her. There was some misspellings here and there, and I felt some panels were just a little too empty with negative space, but all together I think you really killed it on the BB! I look forward to following her story further with the next comic! Awesome job!
# 10
Posted:
Aug 6 2018, 07:57 PM
oh my god i hate Cadenza's mom which makes me love Cadenza's mom good job! This is so tragic, i feel like i learned a LOT about why cadenza is the way she is and this is such an exciting development from the magic tourney, I cant wait to see where you take it! (I'd love to help you make it worse~ >=D) Bach is adorable i want to hug the drum. I think you could have pushed the shadows more in some parts, like on the balcony, to add more depth and drama to the scene- page 6 panel 1 would have been great with some drop shadows. when she falls into the garbage at the end i think it might have been improved if you showed her more scuffed and messy, still elegant and poised but her dress is stained like this city is already ruining her. Theres also a couple spelling errors here and there so maybe a beta checker next time. Im nitpicking but I love this, its a fantastic intro to a new arc for her! great work!
# 9
Posted:
Aug 6 2018, 02:15 PM
I enjoy Cadenza as a character and I like that you've taken this last tourney and made it a real plot point for her. I look forward to more!
# 8
Posted:
Aug 6 2018, 09:33 AM
I really love the story that you told here! Poor Cadenza, but I'm definitely rooting for her. You've had really good progression with Cadenza across her comics, both for her characterization and also her storyline, so I'm really interested to see where this goes next!
I definitely feel that your backgrounds were a bit rushed, I wish they had the same level of polish as your characters, especially once it gets to the confrontation between Cadenza and her mom. The balcony kind of just melts away for the majority of those pages. I'm not sure if you just wanted to get it done within your original timeframe, or maybe you weren't aware, but for BB's there's no penalty to let the time pass so you can let it run down without any pages uploaded and restart the clock on a new BB! Of course, that's only if you want to keep working on it.
I definitely feel that your backgrounds were a bit rushed, I wish they had the same level of polish as your characters, especially once it gets to the confrontation between Cadenza and her mom. The balcony kind of just melts away for the majority of those pages. I'm not sure if you just wanted to get it done within your original timeframe, or maybe you weren't aware, but for BB's there's no penalty to let the time pass so you can let it run down without any pages uploaded and restart the clock on a new BB! Of course, that's only if you want to keep working on it.
# 7
Posted:
Aug 5 2018, 11:06 PM
YEAH MORE BAD MOMS.
It's like we're a growing cult.
It's like we're a growing cult.
# 6
Posted:
Aug 5 2018, 11:00 PM
HARSH. But if it's any consolation, Homelessness never looked so good!
# 5
Posted:
Aug 5 2018, 09:22 PM
HANG IN THERE CADENZA YOU CAN GET THROUGH THIS WE LOVE YOU AND SUPPORT YOU.
# 4
Posted:
Jul 30 2018, 08:46 AM
I'm stoked up for this
# 3
Posted:
Jul 21 2018, 09:47 AM
YAY I CANT WAIT FOR THIS
# 2
Posted:
Jul 21 2018, 05:56 AM
*eyebrow raises*
# 1
Posted:
Jul 20 2018, 11:57 PM
OwO WHATS THIS?
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