Both very cool, very well done comics!! Great job guys!!
Arts, dang thing comic looks fine, these colors and backgrounds are starting to really shape up. I liked the way you wrote your opponent, the story was very cute i loved it xD
Wire, lovely art! Very strong and long comic. I would have liked color and maybe tighter lines but you know what, your sketchy lines have an appeal. I really really love how fluid everything is, and the detail in the rooms was interesting and fun to investigate. Some things did not convey right away like when harlow had to turn his head around, and at the last page when he was climbing that ledge and walking away.
Harlow Ironlocke vs. Wictor
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# 9
Posted:
Jul 20 2018, 07:45 PM
# 8
Posted:
Jul 17 2018, 10:49 PM
Arts, you’re improving at a rapid pace! Keep battling, and by this time next year, you could be approaching pro levels of quality.
Wire, I really like how dynamic this comic is, but it suffers from some pacing and clarity issues. As others have said, I highly recommend taking the time to add screen tones, spot blacks, or flat colors to set the various elements of the page apart, because if you look close, there’s really excellent stuff going on here, but it really confuses the eye. I would have liked to see this comic be half the page count with blacks and tones or flats.
Wire, I really like how dynamic this comic is, but it suffers from some pacing and clarity issues. As others have said, I highly recommend taking the time to add screen tones, spot blacks, or flat colors to set the various elements of the page apart, because if you look close, there’s really excellent stuff going on here, but it really confuses the eye. I would have liked to see this comic be half the page count with blacks and tones or flats.
# 7
Posted:
Jul 17 2018, 06:04 PM
Red: Artsandgoodies: You've really come a long way! I think this was a solid comic with good writing. The thing that bugged me the most was white action lines. They take a while to be able to create from scratch. My advice would just be to look at how other people are drawing them for reference while drawing them. They look a little too loose and wild right now. But I think overall you did a great job!
Wirecat: Your expressions are amazing! This was a good little comic. To be honest, I liked the sketchy nature of it at times, but other times I really had to look to understand what I was seeing. Still very enjoyable though.
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I just want to echo about the speedlines, they tend not to overlap like that. They're usually uniform. There's actually brushes you can find online for PS and the like which will make the speed lines for you. I don't have a link handy I can point to but probably not hard to find.
Also Wirecat impressive pagecount. But I feel like you're stuff is so geared towards color that even some flats might have helped clarity a bit.
# 6
Posted:
Jul 17 2018, 01:04 PM
Artsandgoodies: You've really come a long way! I think this was a solid comic with good writing. The thing that bugged me the most was white action lines. They take a while to be able to create from scratch. My advice would just be to look at how other people are drawing them for reference while drawing them. They look a little too loose and wild right now. But I think overall you did a great job!
Wirecat: Your expressions are amazing! This was a good little comic. To be honest, I liked the sketchy nature of it at times, but other times I really had to look to understand what I was seeing. Still very enjoyable though.
Wirecat: Your expressions are amazing! This was a good little comic. To be honest, I liked the sketchy nature of it at times, but other times I really had to look to understand what I was seeing. Still very enjoyable though.
# 5
Posted:
Jul 17 2018, 10:38 AM
yarnwitch: What was harlow doing there if he took nothing?
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Wirecat: I love your comic and I love the stress you put Harlow through and the page that had the moment of panic was my favorite
# 4
Posted:
Jul 17 2018, 09:12 AM
Kitty spat! YESSSSSS! (As in fight, not the past tense of spit)
I had the wonderful experience of reading Art's full color comic first, which used humor in a way that I like. I enjoy that we learn Harlow feels compelled to correct people and had to supress that for safety. For technical things: your "hiss" balloon could be spikier to show more shock.
And then I read Wirecat's side, black and white but full of intrigue! Is wictor a venus cat trap? What was harlow doing there if he took nothing? And these mysteries are compelling! I just wish we had a few more.hints, especially to harlow's motive for being there, unless i just missed it somehow.
Overall, i can only give advice that I got recently as well, that in order to give depth to the scenes and make the characters stand out, some shading, even if just grays or hatching, would be helpful for us readers. (I am actually happy to have learned about it! I hope it helps you too!)
I loved this fight a lot and it made me want to fight you both!
I had the wonderful experience of reading Art's full color comic first, which used humor in a way that I like. I enjoy that we learn Harlow feels compelled to correct people and had to supress that for safety. For technical things: your "hiss" balloon could be spikier to show more shock.
And then I read Wirecat's side, black and white but full of intrigue! Is wictor a venus cat trap? What was harlow doing there if he took nothing? And these mysteries are compelling! I just wish we had a few more.hints, especially to harlow's motive for being there, unless i just missed it somehow.
Overall, i can only give advice that I got recently as well, that in order to give depth to the scenes and make the characters stand out, some shading, even if just grays or hatching, would be helpful for us readers. (I am actually happy to have learned about it! I hope it helps you too!)
I loved this fight a lot and it made me want to fight you both!
# 3
Posted:
Jul 16 2018, 11:41 PM
Submitted mine, I'm happy with what I got done and shutouts to Desi for helping keep me on track with her scheduling bootcamp stuff
# 2
Posted:
Jul 16 2018, 11:37 PM
Okay there it is. Uploaded and ready!!!
I really wanted to do more, but again the deadline caught me with my pants down.
I'M GETTING BETTER THO :Dc Every new deadline feel a little easier to reach than the last.
I really wanted to do more, but again the deadline caught me with my pants down.
I'M GETTING BETTER THO :Dc Every new deadline feel a little easier to reach than the last.
# 1
Posted:
Jun 19 2018, 07:42 PM
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Regular Match
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4 weeks
Ended:
Jul 23rd, 2018
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15
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Wirecat
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And Arts, I know I already said my praises all those years back, and I've looked at some of your new comics and it's so cool to see how far you've come! But this lil comic you did here, still holds a very warm place in my heart, you put so much work into it and the humor makes me crack up and smile every time I read it, so thank you for that!!!
And for someone who hated backgrounds (and still do) It's always a joy to look at yours!!