[Wolfbaloo]

Hi there! This is my first time using the Incubator so I hope I get this right. If not, please let me know.

http://imgur.com/a/Q8IUZ








Meet Liz and Tsu. These two have been living in the slums of Heck's Gate; a city filled with the weirdest and most aggressive creatures that can find a way to make business with each other. Needless to say: their living conditions have forced them into trying to find odd jobs to just survive the day.

Liz, the character to the left, is considered a light hearted and more kind spirited person compared to her partner Tsu. She tends to treat things as if they're normal, even if it's the craziest things to happen to her or other people. She can be considered the muscle of the two because of her combat skills and be able to withstand plenty of damage thrown at her way. Her covered eye has the ability to gain x-ray vision, which includes being able to spot a weakness in someone's organs or seeing through solid objects. The major downside is that the more the eye is exposed, the less control Liz has with her emotions, which in turn can create disastrous results.

Tsu, the character to the right, is considered a more down to earth and skeptical kind of person. His attitude towards Liz is being understanding but not indulging her on her cheeriness and partial insanity. He's considered the brains of the group for his tactical knowledge to make up for his more weak fragile body covered from his bulky clothing. His tongue is not only long enough to rival a giraffe's but has a third eye placed on it. This third eye of his has only one function: to dive deep into someone's mind with a single glare. The major downside to this is that it uses the person's most negative emotions to get inside someone's head, and causes a lot of mental damage to the person if not handled correctly.

Both of their ambitions and goals were at first to just live and survive day by day. But one day, they find a flyer advertising a city; Void City. Where promises of destructive mayhem with professionals waited for them. Compared to their life in Heck's Gate, they'll much prefer to go to Void City.

My apologies if this is too much info or not enough. The comic format I'm trying is a bit more different than I've worked with before: Using a higher sized canvas in the same format as a standard comic book page. It's currently at it's sketching phase so it'll still subject to changes, but please let me know if noticeable changes are needed or what you think of the characters and their story.

[Sabulive]

Hello! This is definitely an interesting pair you have going that will bounce off well against each other.

My main critiques on your intro:

Add your speech bubbles:
It's a good habit to get in to; having your dialogue in now saves you the headache later when your art is done but you haven't got room for text. You can also see what parts you don't have to draw bc the text bubble is gonna cover it anyways.

More angle variety:
Try drawing your characters from different camera angles (worms eye etc). What you have here is a bit bland and the action scenes lack that punch to truly make them shine (no im not sorry about the pun). The anatomy itself during the action sequence is also very static-ky. When you punch, your whole body moves to make sure there is force behind your fist; I recommend you watch some fighting sequences and you pause when the combatants deliver a blow so you can see how the whole body is placed in motion.

I think you have a super strong start here! Everything else will just come with practise and the sooner you finish the intro, the sooner you can practise against other fighters! Excited to see the end result of this 8D

[Animeshen]

Good start here, glad to see you diving in! i hope next you'll post the images right into the forum post so i can look at the art and read about the characters in the same spot. you can right click them from your imgur gallery and select "copy image address" for a URL to paste here.
unrelated but when i saw that Tsu had an eye on his tongue and that Liz was missing an eye i was really hoping Liz's eye would be a tongue. Also I kind of love and kind of hate that Liz wears all these fall colours and then neon pink shoes lol.
Sabu has good advice, you dont leave much room for word bubbles, thats something you'll wanna block in with your composition so it doesnt feel crammed in or cover important art. Theres probably a lot of places that could do well to pull the camera back since its a lot of medium shots from a front angle.
Great to see you here! keep working at it, we'll make you a master comic artist yet!

[Wolfbaloo]

Thank you so much from both of you: Shen and Sabulive. (Can't figure out how quotes work here.)

Sabulive: I was kind of scared of trying different angles since I've always known of having trouble with them, but knowing how I want the scenes to play out, I'll put in more angle varieties into it, and I'll definitely look up more of how throwing a punch works visually. Also, I'll add the speech bubbles and see where they can fit and what's not needed in the pages, or if I have to alter the panels themselves for it. Thank you so much for the critique.

Shen: I figured out how to do it now, so now all the parts are here. Also, I can always change the shoe color on Liz for a more complementing color if it helps. And thanks for your advice.