Intro Story / Wizzie Belles
Critiques & Comments
# 7
Posted:
Sep 4 2015, 10:42 AM
I think i might be in love with this character (especially her current design with the poofy angel hair(??)) I look forward TO READING ALL your thinnggs
# 6
Posted:
Jul 21 2011, 12:53 PM
I really enjoy your style--hopefully we can do battle or collab someday! Quite enjoyable stuff--keep it coming!
# 5
Posted:
Jul 12 2011, 06:55 AM
Well, this was a fun read!
Really enjoyed the art. Great work!
Really enjoyed the art. Great work!
# 4
Posted:
Jul 11 2011, 09:40 PM
I couldn't tell if the apartment exploded or if it was a back story about her blowing up some folk. All I know is I love the art and you have a new fan.
# 3
Posted:
Jul 11 2011, 11:12 AM
Sean: Thanks for the support!
Delya: Thanks for the feedback Delya! And yeah I know what you mean about Wizzie just explaining what happened unlike things just being 'shown' like page 2, but I was a bit concerned that people would get too confused with what was going on and that the pages overall wouldn't make sense so I completely bailed and just had her explain what had just happened (which usually isn't my style, you'll be glad to hear) - but excuses, excuses. I'm HOPING to do some beyond comics that will fill in some of the gaps in the back story.
<3 and I am glad that I am on VOID too Del
Delya: Thanks for the feedback Delya! And yeah I know what you mean about Wizzie just explaining what happened unlike things just being 'shown' like page 2, but I was a bit concerned that people would get too confused with what was going on and that the pages overall wouldn't make sense so I completely bailed and just had her explain what had just happened (which usually isn't my style, you'll be glad to hear) - but excuses, excuses. I'm HOPING to do some beyond comics that will fill in some of the gaps in the back story.
<3 and I am glad that I am on VOID too Del
# 2
Posted:
Jul 11 2011, 10:59 AM
Well THAT was fast! So glad to see you got a fighter in already. <3 I knew you'd have no problem with it.
These pages look clean and the pacing is pretty good. Her expressions are very well done, I love the concerned look on her face at the bottom of page two. :> Your colors are bright, yet still easy on the eyes. Really dig it!
My main concern with this intro is that it lacks personality at the end. Instead of having Wizzie actually speaking her story, you could have continued the narrative you had going in page two to further show her reaction to the events on page three. It could just be me, and I'm sure they do that a lot in mainstream comics, but it just reads very poorly from a storytelling standpoint if the character is standing there talking to themselves aloud about what's happened to them so far. Otherwise, this is very nice and again I'm super happy to see you giving VOID a shot!
These pages look clean and the pacing is pretty good. Her expressions are very well done, I love the concerned look on her face at the bottom of page two. :> Your colors are bright, yet still easy on the eyes. Really dig it!
My main concern with this intro is that it lacks personality at the end. Instead of having Wizzie actually speaking her story, you could have continued the narrative you had going in page two to further show her reaction to the events on page three. It could just be me, and I'm sure they do that a lot in mainstream comics, but it just reads very poorly from a storytelling standpoint if the character is standing there talking to themselves aloud about what's happened to them so far. Otherwise, this is very nice and again I'm super happy to see you giving VOID a shot!
# 1
Posted:
Jul 11 2011, 09:30 AM
...I like it! Can't wait to see you take this character
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(I also have no idea how to describe her current hair other then it's currently on her design sheet)