Yolanda vs. Fedra
Critiques & Comments
# 20
Posted:
Jul 30 2009, 07:26 AM
On the first page, I would have put yolanda and fedra in the opening shot, just so we get a sense of where they are in the restaurant. We also never get a good look at Fedra on the first page either. The ceiling of the cafe is leaning a bit too... that may be just how the cafe is, but it looks like a drawing error. Your panels are a little crowded too. I love your drawings and your characterization too. Great job! The story seems to end abruptly though.
# 19
Posted:
Jul 29 2009, 03:08 PM
I normally don't do things in pencils! One of those one time things like "I feel like doing this for a change." I'll have to practice more with them then.
I'll try breaking that habit of my speech bubbles. Thank you Salty. c:
I'll try breaking that habit of my speech bubbles. Thank you Salty. c:
# 18
Posted:
Jul 29 2009, 11:41 AM
horizontally
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I meant vertically, rather.
# 17
Posted:
Jul 29 2009, 11:39 AM
This was a cute story, I enjoyed it, but I hope you do some more stuff with pencils like your intros.
One thing I think is worth mentioning is that you draw a lot of your speech balloons stretched horizontally, which is fine if you write horizontally (ie. in Japanese), but as it is it's just bunching all your text together.
One thing I think is worth mentioning is that you draw a lot of your speech balloons stretched horizontally, which is fine if you write horizontally (ie. in Japanese), but as it is it's just bunching all your text together.
# 16
Posted:
Jul 29 2009, 11:09 AM
@Cara: Actually it was meant to be this short. It's finished, I promise. I didn't intend on adding pages because it was just a quick joke comic. I didn't want it to drag on. c:
@Zero: Thanks! I'll add more backgrounds in the future.
@Dured: I really had no idea that stuff was still going on...D:
@Zero: Thanks! I'll add more backgrounds in the future.
@Dured: I really had no idea that stuff was still going on...D:
# 15
Posted:
Jul 29 2009, 05:32 AM
"This shouldn't count as my first battle, cause there was no battle. D> "
It will count and you will gloat over the mutilated bodies of your enemies while chugging beer with gold encrusted Vietnam vets whom you'll assure that you "left your badges at home"!
Also, that was seriously short, unfinished? I liked the art, especially the first page, and would only recommend less contrast in your screen tones (let the pattern do the work) - but I can't say much more than that.
It will count and you will gloat over the mutilated bodies of your enemies while chugging beer with gold encrusted Vietnam vets whom you'll assure that you "left your badges at home"!
Also, that was seriously short, unfinished? I liked the art, especially the first page, and would only recommend less contrast in your screen tones (let the pattern do the work) - but I can't say much more than that.
# 14
Posted:
Jul 28 2009, 09:13 PM
You petite! I like your artwork and page layouts. Very clean, very strong, I wished it had been longer though. The only real complaint I would have is backgrounds (and its not really a complaint). I like the amount of detail you put in them, but more would have been better. Overall I liked it.
# 13
Posted:
Jul 28 2009, 04:59 PM
Swine flu scare in Argentina, Angie, everything from trains to movie theaters is paralyzed, stores closed, buses not running, etc etc, its massive. Obviously a big problem for people who don't own a scanner and usually go to a copy place to scan >__<. I myself have been unable to get in touch with Brilliantik, Gregos or Ledes at all, so I'm quite worried. I'll go back on Sunday and see how bad the situation really is.
# 12
Posted:
Jul 28 2009, 03:37 PM
It happens Petite, happened on my first battle too
# 11
Posted:
Jul 28 2009, 03:19 PM
This shouldn't count as my first battle, cause there was no battle. D>
# 10
Posted:
Jul 28 2009, 03:17 PM
Ultimately petite I find your tones to be very distracting. Considering that I'm playing around with them too, I dunno how I'd fix them but I'd make them round since they seem to be some sort of oval shape. Otherwise this was a bit short but your art is great I think.
# 9
Posted:
Jul 28 2009, 03:14 PM
is there something in the water at the Orphanage? Just had to cancel a double default for an orphanage vs orphanage battle. Will post a detailed comment for petite later.
# 8
Posted:
Jul 26 2009, 08:39 PM
Uploaded...but done right the second time D8
# 7
Posted:
Jul 11 2009, 04:56 PM
I expect fondling and more.
Espero mucha tocadera y huevadas. Si huevadas. Manosela.
Espero mucha tocadera y huevadas. Si huevadas. Manosela.
# 6
Posted:
Jul 10 2009, 05:32 PM
make us happy you twooo ;o;
# 5
Posted:
Jul 7 2009, 12:00 PM
Good luck you two! I'm taking you next Brilliantik
# 4
Posted:
Jul 7 2009, 10:37 AM
lol spanish
Good luck apetite
Good luck apetite
# 3
Posted:
Jul 7 2009, 08:46 AM
yeah, seriously.
# 2
Posted:
Jul 7 2009, 05:45 AM
Shony >:/ mas te vale que termines el beyond battle con drednaut
# 1
Posted:
Jul 7 2009, 03:09 AM
o_O seriously?
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