Welcome, Clover I remember seeing your incubator thread not very long ago, congrats on getting them in so fast!!
Aside from what has already been covered, first thing I noticed is that you panel layouts are very samey: mainly divided up into three horizontally. It gets the pacing done but there isn't much dynamic to them. Try changing it up with diagonal lines or just chopping them up into even smaller panels, especially when you have action going on! This can help the movements feel less static. Varying panel sizes in a more drastic manner can emphasize moments better as well. There are a ton of ways to do them so I suggest you look at several of your favorite comics and study how the artists use particular panels to pace things.
Good work and hope to see you battle soon~
Intro Story / The Professors
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Jun 7 2018, 08:12 PM
# 4
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Jun 6 2018, 03:09 PM
Congrats again for getting them in! I'm going to echo Astro a bit and say I hope there are more things we learn about the trio in the your next comics. I also look forward to learning what the glue is that keeps them all together despite the fighting. I know I'm going to love keeping up with their story.
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Jun 5 2018, 05:09 PM
eyy, grats! now get in a fight!
# 2
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Jun 4 2018, 09:49 PM
Astrodile: Welcome to Void, congratulations on getting in and can't wait to see your characters in action!
In terms of art, I will admit that it looks like there are parts of it that you could've redefined. Some lines are smoother or even blurrier whereas others are notably more pixellated (The difference is especially notable between pages 1 and 2 already), and there are parts where the bucket/fill tool missed entirely thus being white pixels as well. There are inconsistencies in how you write the sfx on page 1 and 4, but then decide to use a font for the 'Push' on page 3. I'm assuming it's because the 'Push' is supposed to emphasize the oomph of the action itself being more stronger then the others?
And with writing, I know you said you didn't plan too far on The Professors because you didn't expect to get accepted, but now that you are, we're still missing basic info about the trio. I hope that you'll show more about them in your next comic, because I only get to know that this trio has petty arguments and that they're related but that's just about it. Even if they are called 'The Professors', there's nothing in this comic which shows that they are teachers, nor much of their personalities outside of this huff and puff they have, which is a bit of an issue.
Nonetheless, I'm glad you got in! I hope you have a good time here, and I'm definitely looking forward to the antics that this trio will bring to the table.
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Thank you so much!!
I honestly used a smaller canvas because for some ODD reason it didn't go through my head that I can RE-SCALE...
-shrug- I will make sure to make the next larger!
As for the lines I diD NOT NOTICE. Wowie, I gatta pay more attention to which brush I decide to use and STICK TO IT. I usually use my sharper brush for lineart while I use my fuzzier one for sketches. I'll make sure to be more aware of that as well.
I aLSO did not notice I had inconsistencies with the sfx! goodness me, I need to pay more attention!
I'm honestly still pretty stuck on what to do with them. But I've been thinking of possibilities. I should probably chat with the group about ideas and see what other's think. I do a LOT better when I have someone/s to bounce ideas off of!
Thank you so much for the advice. This is stuff I really need to be more thoughtful about for consistency sake and professionalism for my actual webcomic I plan on selling.
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Jun 3 2018, 11:36 AM
ASDFDHFJHDRDFSTHDTT I LOVE THEM ALL! CONGRATS ON GETTING IN!
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I agree the pages could be a bit more consistent in terms of quality. Either way, I hope to see more of these guys soon.