thanks guys, im experimenting comic styles so expect something different next round.
Matt: Very entertaining comic, you have a good grasp on skids personality and likeness.
Skidmark vs. Billy
Critiques & Comments
# 17
Posted:
Feb 14 2010, 03:50 PM
# 16
Posted:
Feb 10 2010, 03:30 PM
Pretty cool Knomer, i really enjoyed your comic, straight to the point with a nice touch of dark humor.
Matt, yours was good, well written, a bit hard to read though try not to mix handwritten text with digital one
Nice job you two =)
Matt, yours was good, well written, a bit hard to read though try not to mix handwritten text with digital one
Nice job you two =)
# 15
Posted:
Feb 10 2010, 07:14 AM
Knomer, this was a good comic, I enjoyed it alot and Skidmark's personality really shines through. It's excellent. There is only one thing I think of though it's kinda small, because the rest of the comic has excellent action, but when he throws Billy, the toss is lacking oomph and looks a little wierd to me. But it's a small thing in a sea of excellence. My only other suggestion would be to polish up the shape of the shadows every now and again.
Matt, I don't think I've ever seen a comic from you though I remember you trying to get into the sentai tourney way back when (when I had first found VOID) this story was kinda fun and Skids really plays up the bad cop aspect here. You're hurt only by the incomplete and rough nature of your artwork here. The dialogue was strong and well made and I hope to see more comics from you. Just size the pages down a bit next time.
Matt, I don't think I've ever seen a comic from you though I remember you trying to get into the sentai tourney way back when (when I had first found VOID) this story was kinda fun and Skids really plays up the bad cop aspect here. You're hurt only by the incomplete and rough nature of your artwork here. The dialogue was strong and well made and I hope to see more comics from you. Just size the pages down a bit next time.
# 14
Posted:
Feb 9 2010, 08:56 PM
Knomer: Best first panel ever. As soon as I read yours I was hooked and read it to the end with baditude and easy to read aciton backing it up. The characterisation is strong here and we get a good view of Skidmark's interaction. All the way through, Im seeing humor as your carrying force here as it pulls us in Skid's POV. On some of these however, I see a random distribution of black and things register as flat some of the time rather than seeing them exist in space it's likely a stylistic thing but if you want a direction to improve on it should be that. Good job overall
Billy: You should probably gauge your effort more on a clean, more complete pages. If a reader's attention hits a snag on a detail it will be to your detriment. Size down your pages too so that we can see what ideas you are presenting with a glance- and if we're interested enough we usually read into it more. I had to hit the ctrl minus key half a dozen times in order the shrink the pages enough to be able to enjoy your work. Your rendering and drawings are decent and ambitious and all, but your stuffed compositions and general lack of everything else isn't holding my attention, everything is all gray white and the lines are either too sketchy or not sketchy enough. Otherwise I would enjoy your action shots a bunch more. Go with what you can execute easily and pay mind to working a comic in all directions as best as you can. Good job otherwise ! 8 pages is a bunch for a week.
Billy: You should probably gauge your effort more on a clean, more complete pages. If a reader's attention hits a snag on a detail it will be to your detriment. Size down your pages too so that we can see what ideas you are presenting with a glance- and if we're interested enough we usually read into it more. I had to hit the ctrl minus key half a dozen times in order the shrink the pages enough to be able to enjoy your work. Your rendering and drawings are decent and ambitious and all, but your stuffed compositions and general lack of everything else isn't holding my attention, everything is all gray white and the lines are either too sketchy or not sketchy enough. Otherwise I would enjoy your action shots a bunch more. Go with what you can execute easily and pay mind to working a comic in all directions as best as you can. Good job otherwise ! 8 pages is a bunch for a week.
# 13
Posted:
Feb 9 2010, 02:57 PM
That innocent girl had to die! Laughter is a killer.
# 12
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 07:23 PM
Page size noted. Thanks for all the crits.
Knomer... damn son. I really like your comic.
Knomer... damn son. I really like your comic.
# 11
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 04:25 PM
Knomer - Really crisp and clean work! The text is fantastic. I felt your earlier stuff had a problem with impacts and blows feeling sort of weak, but you've fixed that in this battle. There's quite a bit of force when Billy collides into Skid. Funny, good looking, and it didn't overstay its welcome. Good all around!
Maxx - There's a few things that are easy to fix: Shrink your pages more and don't use see-through text boxes. I thought the plot of your comic was pretty good, just that it was paced poorly. Your panels place the same amount of emphasis on big, important actions as smaller actions because the panel sizes seem random. Any other issues are just because you were unfinished.
Maxx - There's a few things that are easy to fix: Shrink your pages more and don't use see-through text boxes. I thought the plot of your comic was pretty good, just that it was paced poorly. Your panels place the same amount of emphasis on big, important actions as smaller actions because the panel sizes seem random. Any other issues are just because you were unfinished.
# 10
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 03:10 PM
Knome, you surprised me with this one. Hella entertaining!
Some good quality for the limited ammount of time too. Wish it was longer, the story drew me in. Me favorite part is where Skid notices Billy at the line and Billy goes: "Money?"
Good pace and epic fitting ending!
MaxxMatt, the dialogue and story alltogether kept me glued to the screen. I had to re-read and scroll back up a couple of times cuz some stuff i read in the wrong order due to the page size. Quality was solid the first few pages, but then time was against you. Either way i could still follow.
Big applause for the tied-to-the-chair scene and the way Skids died. I'm always a fan of edible endings! Hahaha
Some good quality for the limited ammount of time too. Wish it was longer, the story drew me in. Me favorite part is where Skid notices Billy at the line and Billy goes: "Money?"
Good pace and epic fitting ending!
MaxxMatt, the dialogue and story alltogether kept me glued to the screen. I had to re-read and scroll back up a couple of times cuz some stuff i read in the wrong order due to the page size. Quality was solid the first few pages, but then time was against you. Either way i could still follow.
Big applause for the tied-to-the-chair scene and the way Skids died. I'm always a fan of edible endings! Hahaha
# 9
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 02:39 PM
Knomer - Nice flow, brutal finish.
Maxx - Quality was actually not bad at the start but huge pages, deteriorating page quality, and really bad lettering put me off this comic. Not too original either.
Maxx - Quality was actually not bad at the start but huge pages, deteriorating page quality, and really bad lettering put me off this comic. Not too original either.
# 8
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 01:45 PM
Maxximum: Page siiiize, dude. At home, this was stretching the page off to the sides. My computer at work just managed to squeeze this in. I really liked the story, really liked your characterization, and OH, THE DIALOGUE.
Sooo good.
Here's a critique, though-- I'm really, really not fond of the thought captions on the first page. Clear, and covering up the pretty stuff. No good.
Knomer: Your balance is purdy. Nice punchline, and I liked your supporting cast. Does that sidekick cop have a name?
This is pretty minor, but on page 2, at least, I'm not sure your contrast is up quite where it could be. There's a lot of grey goin' on.
AND YEAH. Way to chew on each other, guys. That's pretty awesome.
Sooo good.
Here's a critique, though-- I'm really, really not fond of the thought captions on the first page. Clear, and covering up the pretty stuff. No good.
Knomer: Your balance is purdy. Nice punchline, and I liked your supporting cast. Does that sidekick cop have a name?
This is pretty minor, but on page 2, at least, I'm not sure your contrast is up quite where it could be. There's a lot of grey goin' on.
AND YEAH. Way to chew on each other, guys. That's pretty awesome.
# 7
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 01:19 PM
hahahaha...did you two decide to have your characters eat each other before the battle?
ace...
ace...
# 6
Posted:
Feb 8 2010, 11:10 AM
Knomer-it was good to see you keep your quality up again! Despite being a 1 weeker this was very strong artistically for you. You had a good balance of blacks throughout the comic, I think there was only a panel or two I would have liked to see just a little more like the 4th panel of the first page as there's quite a bit of white space at the bottom of the panel. Story wise it wasn't anything amazing, but you did a nice job with the action and it flowed very well.
MaxximumMATT-right off the bat be careful with those massive pages! Ideally they shouldn't be more than 600-700 pixels wide. Having to scroll around to see the whole page kind of breaks the flow for me. Another thing to watch out for is the transparent word bubbles, they were a little distracting to me. I think the pencils you had were nice and I'm fine with the loose nature of them, but just a little more cleanup could have helped your presentation.
MaxximumMATT-right off the bat be careful with those massive pages! Ideally they shouldn't be more than 600-700 pixels wide. Having to scroll around to see the whole page kind of breaks the flow for me. Another thing to watch out for is the transparent word bubbles, they were a little distracting to me. I think the pencils you had were nice and I'm fine with the loose nature of them, but just a little more cleanup could have helped your presentation.
# 5
Posted:
Feb 7 2010, 11:24 PM
*WHEW* Uploaded.
Okay so my day job straight whupped me this past week which led to me doing most of this in the span of two days.
But I never default and I wanted you to at least be able to understand the story i was presenting even if the visuals aren't that great. So it's complete and it's up.
If I should somehow make it to another round I promise to kick it up about 20,000 notches.
Okay so my day job straight whupped me this past week which led to me doing most of this in the span of two days.
But I never default and I wanted you to at least be able to understand the story i was presenting even if the visuals aren't that great. So it's complete and it's up.
If I should somehow make it to another round I promise to kick it up about 20,000 notches.
# 4
Posted:
Feb 7 2010, 11:31 AM
Reminder for all of you uploading tonight, please read this in the event your upload fails before coming to the mods
http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10641.0
http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=10641.0
# 3
Posted:
Feb 1 2010, 02:35 PM
Two cool characters...
Unfortunately there will be only one left
Unfortunately there will be only one left
# 2
Posted:
Jan 31 2010, 09:57 PM
Let's do this.
# 1
Posted:
Jan 31 2010, 06:42 PM
i<3uskids!
Speed Death Tournament Match
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matt, the biggest killer for me was the inconsistency. the huge digital text was too stark a contrast from the handwritten text on other pages. and the pages they showed up together? eh. the caption boxes shouldn't be transparent & the effect of the drop shadows is like photoshop 101 stuff. aside from that you took up a lot of page real estate whenever you did use the digital letters. either do all one or all the other. beyond that there was strong use of backgrounds on the first page but not really anywhere else throughout the story. showing the occasional bg during an action scene is good to the reader a frame of reference as to what's going down. keep at it though, dude