YOUR COMIC WAS RAD AS SHIT AND I WILL CARRY ON YOUR LEGACY

Thanks for the crits everybody! Admittedly, I was worried when doing this that the background would be too simple with the smoke, but I was going for that feeling of it being that dark, poorly lit room where the smoke just hangs in the air. Guess I just couldn't quite pull it off like I had hoped.

Anyway, it was a lot of fun, and it felt good to get back into comics again. You did a sick job Tom, and I look forward to seeing what you do from here out!

GPS-DEVICE- While I would've echoed Hiemies critique about a floating void, that was kinda the point wasn't it? This crew subsisting in hell..or limbo. An amorphous un-life somewhere. I personally liked it. I knew immediately where they were and amused they were- of all things- playing a card game for a chance at life. It was an interesting way to introduce your first round of the SRT. I also really dig that the ticket was the only thing that was in color. Even without Juliet explaining it, a reader (or just anyone following the SRT) would know what that is. Considering this was a card game, I would've liked to have seen more action on that front, or even the aftermath of the win becasue as it stands, it was a bit of an anti-climactic end without some manner of payoff. If anything it has me hoping you'll make it to the next round to see just what happens moving forward.

TDK- Wooow, talk about taking it a completely different direction. Space Alcatraz, prison riot! That last page was a real treat to see. So much going on! I gotta admit, I'm still none too clear on where your opponent was for this comic. Is he disguised as Cupcake? was he one of the ones in the mess hall? I do gotta admit that your inks were great and I especially loved the creativity of where Juliet was being kept on that space clunker. Definitely another tale I wanna see continued.

GPS: You're greatly improving. Most of the only nitpicks I have is everything kinda being in a gloating void, and y'know, minor anatomy issues. Stuff that just takes practice and me critting wouldn't effect much. What problem I do have is even though the setting is simple, it just doesn't seem well established, but I feel like you were setting up a big punchline and did nothing with it. Also on the empty void, like, you coulda either added setpieces, or just established that they're just in blank purgatory and this is all they do.

TODK: I was talking with you about this in a hangout, but I had to read this a few times to realize where Eli was, and that simply might have been me missing a panel, or that his forehead is huge. So like, I got mixed up with the time jump cut, because you established a timing of hours, then jumped right into the action. Otherwise, in some places it feels sparse or clunky, but overall it works, the line quality and level of detail is lovely, and after I got a hang of the plot, it flows pretty well.

GPS: this is great work from you! I understand the nebulous, smokey setting but.. eh. still kinda wish there was more to it. I also felt it was too easy for Eli to just win, with little conflict or effort. but definitely some of the best art we've seen from you! I agree with the touch ups too. maybe try and make your solid blacks more defined shapes? for example, sometimes you add black around the edge of something, along the outline. to my eye it looks like an abnormally thick line instead of a shadow. little things like that, and sprucing up anatomy here and there I think will super help! overall great job!

TODK: nice nice nice. your drawings are strong enough that I don't mind the lack of tones or completeness. though, tones would have benefitted it greatly. your storytelling and expressions are super good, like way beefy. basically I wanna see the next part of this, haha.

Geeps: You know how I feel about this, but let's put it down for posterity so you can go back and look at it again. First and foremost, you definitely had your work cut out for you, I think it's cool to see you utilize your opponents and other characters in a real interesting way.

I think a couple things you could have done to boosted the work here is play with your line-widths some more. You were on point for the most part, but I think you could have played with it more. I know the pens you use, so it's totally possible to touch up more. I also would have tried to add a few small details to make your backgrounds stand out like as being more of a limbo (such as doors, potted plant, neon signs). It goes a long way and while it is all character action and dialogue, it does feel like it's lacking as a result.

Overall, this was a solid piece of work and I really liked seeing you continue the train of thought from our Eli vs. Elvis Bean fight here.


Tom: Really solid, the transition from Punishment Room to the Bathroom was very well executed. Upon reflection, I kind of wish we could have seen the scene with Eli killing Cupcake and what lead up to that, just because the cool calm serial killer version you created is very intriguing and it's a shame he's only around for a page before being "replaced" by Cupcake. Your expressions were really strong and I definitely enjoyed the final page displaying the riot, plenty of treat for the eye with a lot of interesting things going on there. You're still stellar at crowd shots and it's cool to see you on break from Kill 6 Billion Demons to perform for us.

GPS! Your inking is among my favorite lol you have good line variation, i think. I like the card table setting but sometimes the smoke makes them look like they are in the clouds or something? Even though they are all just at a table I think maybe once or twice you could pull the camera back a little further to get a better sense of the setting. but I loved how natural the conversations were. good job!

TODK- such backgrounds! you really paint a scene, I love it! The riot at the end looked great! I also love the subtlety of  your expression, like Eli's little wry almost-smirk as he says "i can do that" followed by Cupcake's awkward smile. Great comic!

Kill 6 billion inmates.

GPS: probs your best looking comic. It was a good comic all around. The setting with smoke on black does make it look like they're in an Earthbound battle screen, though.

Tom: I expected 3 pages from you, quickly drawn, what with you working on Kill Six Billion Demons. But then you did this, and even included one of your infamous crowd scenes. Good on ya, man.

good stuff, you guys!

geeps: Solid balance w/your blacks and whites here! Your text bubbles are breaking my heart a little, though--thinner lines, a less "generic font"-y font, and it'd be less distracting from your work. If a text bubble is going to touch the panel gutter lines, either overlap it entirely or make it smaller so it fits in, instead of awkwardly having it sit right up against it.

ODK: Holy moly those crowded backgrounds. Dig them, dig the moment-to-moment panel transitions! Doing something finished in a week is hard, so it's understandable that it kind of ends suddenly, but it is kind of abrupt.

sweet! Uploaded over here too

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Hopefully in the right order. I honestly am not sure with this system

Prepare for tits in my comic. I tried guys, I really tried.

Hoof. TOUGH ONE. Good luck dudes

Called it.