i think there both good in their own way...carolyne i love your inks awesome.. they way you draw dogs is awesome. keep up the good work.
harappa.. i like the ink wash your doing keep working with that.. in the begginging it looked kinda sloppy but throught the fight it kept getting better im impressed... good job the both of yous.
Harappa vs. Carolyne Reigne
Critiques & Comments
# 28
Posted:
Apr 25 2006, 05:18 PM
# 27
Posted:
Apr 19 2006, 05:21 PM
sdsj: Thanks for the helpful tips. XD (And they are helpful, very). I knew there was something wrong with the last page, but I never really took the time to figure it out. You should see some of my oldest comic work.. I used to stick everything on a nearly solid black background because I did so much unnecessary shading.
# 26
Posted:
Apr 19 2006, 05:11 PM
Kaelin: Thank-you for having establishing shots! You get points for those! Watch your black levels they are a bit light. Also some pages seem very well inked and others half inked. the final panel in particular is lacking contrast and thusly depth. It feels flat at times. Good work overall though!
Steffox: I liked the small amount of color, I didn\'t like how it overpowered alot of your inks, adjust your back levels for more contrast. I think you should have made your color a bit more subtle only bringing it up for intense visual reactions. Pull back your camera! I think you should do that a bit more, don\'t cut off at the ankles waist and kneecaps all the time. Overall, good work tough, watch your anatomy I suppose and keep it up!
Steffox: I liked the small amount of color, I didn\'t like how it overpowered alot of your inks, adjust your back levels for more contrast. I think you should have made your color a bit more subtle only bringing it up for intense visual reactions. Pull back your camera! I think you should do that a bit more, don\'t cut off at the ankles waist and kneecaps all the time. Overall, good work tough, watch your anatomy I suppose and keep it up!
# 25
Posted:
Apr 19 2006, 11:13 AM
Steffox, I love it. That\'s all I can say. L-O-V-E IT!
Kaelin: Wow. I have never seen your work before, but it really impressed me. I didn\'t want the story to end, but you made it so that you could add one more page or end it there. In fact, you did that for most of the pages and I REALLY liked that. Your people are more polished than Steffox\'s, but that\'s your style. Same with the backgrounds... I love your backgrounds.
This is really tough because each of you did so well within your personal styles.
Kaelin: Wow. I have never seen your work before, but it really impressed me. I didn\'t want the story to end, but you made it so that you could add one more page or end it there. In fact, you did that for most of the pages and I REALLY liked that. Your people are more polished than Steffox\'s, but that\'s your style. Same with the backgrounds... I love your backgrounds.
This is really tough because each of you did so well within your personal styles.
# 24
Posted:
Apr 18 2006, 06:46 PM
I liked Harappas story as there was alittle more to it than Carolines and tho the page count was high it was an enjoyable read.
Overall it was a good fight the both of you put up but ithink Harappa managed to surpass her last fight.
I cant fault caroline qualitywise but the story was alittle thin compared to your other stuff ive seen
Overall it was a good fight the both of you put up but ithink Harappa managed to surpass her last fight.
I cant fault caroline qualitywise but the story was alittle thin compared to your other stuff ive seen
# 23
Posted:
Apr 18 2006, 12:23 PM
Steffox: Your humans are decent at best. Try to practice more so you are able to give them more definition. Although, Caroline and Harappa look awsome. Lol, a flying kick is supposed to leave the ground. The tansformation sequence was pulled off well, being that Carolyne was the catalyst and you definitely showed her struggle, pain, and effort in an attempt to change back on pg 5. Panel 5 on pg 6-Carolyne\'s expression doesn\'t match the text until the next panel. I think you could have tweaked it a little to make it more in sync. Over all you have good consistancies with colors and lighting until you got to pg7, which was actually rather interesting. I like how you took a moment to step away and display what some people in the crowd might have been thinking on that pg. You also left a great impact on the last page leaving a loose end in the plot of the story by showing Paddy and Chip.
I look forward to your next battle... and you as well Kaelin.
I look forward to your next battle... and you as well Kaelin.
# 22
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 11:01 PM
XD YES! I finally get to read Harappa\'s half.
Harappa: I think your story is a lot better than mine. XD And even though she\'s not an official part of them, it\'s nice to see Cara mixed in with the Exiles a little. The puppy bit was hilarious. I love iiiiit.
Harappa: I think your story is a lot better than mine. XD And even though she\'s not an official part of them, it\'s nice to see Cara mixed in with the Exiles a little. The puppy bit was hilarious. I love iiiiit.
# 21
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 10:54 PM
YAY!!! THANK YOU!! It\'s up, joy! ^_^ Now I can die happy.
# 20
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 10:01 PM
It\'s: W E I I N G N A N @ G M A I L . C O M
And I do hope to see this battle.
And I do hope to see this battle.
# 19
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 09:37 PM
Erk, make that weiignan@gmail.com, might be weiingnan
# 18
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 09:35 PM
No worries, it\'s just a glitch.. seems like they happen pretty often when the battles get posted (XD I\'m not teasing Wei, mind you). Your pages are probably there, just not up. I don\'t think the voting is up yet, since the time is still marked nine days. As for the pages, they go to Wei\'s email if not through the uploading page, whiiiich.. I don\'t know. I think it\'s weiingnan@entervoid.com
# 17
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 09:29 PM
I resent the pages to Toast... that\'s the right place to send them, right? I must have messed up when I resubmitted 9... it had a typo. When that happens do you have to resubmit the whole thing or something? That could be it... GAH. It will get fixed, I\'m sure. okay. deep breath.
# 16
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 09:21 PM
We know! XD Wei must\'ve passed out. It\'ll get fixed.. ssssometime.
# 15
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 09:09 PM
HEY WHOOAA NO HOLY SHIT NO. I drew 10 Pages, that is NOT BLANK.
# 14
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 07:59 PM
Well until the glitch is fixed, Kaelin I don\'t know what your talking about \"lazy bgs\" unless you are refering to panel 1 on pg2 and panels 3 & 4 on page 3. If you did put bgs in those panels it would probably distract from the impact that you wanted your audience to get from the expressions of the characters and the intro of the hyenas. I was hoping for color, but you always have high quality line work. I think you\'re doing fine.
Steffox: I only glanced at \"pg9\". I tried to fight every urge I had from reading it. Hopefully the situation will be fixed soon.
Steffox: I only glanced at \"pg9\". I tried to fight every urge I had from reading it. Hopefully the situation will be fixed soon.
# 13
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 07:33 PM
yeah, I believe her as well, I am just going to wait till the glitch is fixed
# 12
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 06:33 PM
Must be a glitch, o.o we know she uploaded from the comment. (And I definitely believe her. XD)
# 11
Posted:
Apr 17 2006, 06:15 PM
what the.... only page 9 available for harappa??
# 10
Posted:
Apr 16 2006, 04:06 PM
Uploading ^_^ I spilled ink on mine at the last minute last night >_< But managed to salvage the thing anyway. And yeah, dialogue bubbles and fonts are annoying to keep track of. I\'m gonna get my furry butt handed to me, aren\'t I? Yes I am, yes I am...
# 9
Posted:
Apr 16 2006, 10:16 AM
Uploaded! Praaactice.
I knew this battle was going to be short weeks ago, since I cut several pages out of the middle because I thought it made the script better. Buuut.. It\'s still not too good. I got kind of lazy with the backgrounds, and there\'s no continuity in the size of the pen they\'re in.. either. XD My mistake. It\'s also very quiet, I need to find a good font for growling and barking noises. My biggest nitpick on my battle is the horrendously over-used joke. (Over-used by me, at least). All of that aside, critique! I need the help.
Can\'t wait to see your half Harappa!
I knew this battle was going to be short weeks ago, since I cut several pages out of the middle because I thought it made the script better. Buuut.. It\'s still not too good. I got kind of lazy with the backgrounds, and there\'s no continuity in the size of the pen they\'re in.. either. XD My mistake. It\'s also very quiet, I need to find a good font for growling and barking noises. My biggest nitpick on my battle is the horrendously over-used joke. (Over-used by me, at least). All of that aside, critique! I need the help.
Can\'t wait to see your half Harappa!
# 8
Posted:
Apr 4 2006, 10:58 AM
Damn right your stories better be good.
# 7
Posted:
Apr 3 2006, 05:31 PM
I take that back. XD I will be doing four pages.. because after drawing the first dog fight of what was supposed to be several, I realize just how badly I would pace three or four, and how boring and unnecessary it would be. So yeah, four pages.
# 6
Posted:
Mar 22 2006, 04:20 PM
Go Steffox! Do your best!
I can\'t wait to see what you two come up with. Make them good stories or Hiemie will be mad.
I can\'t wait to see what you two come up with. Make them good stories or Hiemie will be mad.
# 5
Posted:
Mar 20 2006, 05:37 PM
I figured we\'re gonna go all out anyway, why set a high number? Also, I... I forgot to change that dropdown box... ^_^\'\'\' But by no means will either of us end up with only three pages. RAWRR! I\'m gonna get my @$$ kicked from here to the moon and back, I know it.
By the way, I suck at colour, if I do colour you won\'t be getting my 100%. I hope you\'re satisfied with what I *do* do.
By the way, I suck at colour, if I do colour you won\'t be getting my 100%. I hope you\'re satisfied with what I *do* do.
# 4
Posted:
Mar 20 2006, 04:26 PM
I\'ll color it if I can. XD I usually use every bit of my time. Hoping to finish at least five inked pages.
# 3
Posted:
Mar 20 2006, 03:29 PM
Woo! Go Harappa! Good luck Kaelin, I find this should be a close match! *swig*
# 2
Posted:
Mar 20 2006, 02:57 PM
You guys got about a month for 3 pgs. I beg of you-use color.
# 1
Posted:
Mar 19 2006, 06:36 PM
w00t! xD Finally another battle. This\'ll be fun for me. Canines are always entertaining to draw. And I\'ve already found that I like your style Harappa. Can\'t wait to see your battle! And good luck!
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
4 weeks
Ended:
Apr 25th, 2006
Votes Cast:
44
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Winner:
Kaelin
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I\'m glad you all think I\'m improving, as I tried really hard to make this a better battle both plot and action-wise.
Yeah, my black levels could be darker, gotta figure out an efficient way to do that and deal with colour at the same time (Yay photoshop tweakage time!).
And thanks for pointing out that I don\'t pull back the camera far enough. I\'m going to start consciously doing that in all my comic work from now on, since looking back, is IS a bad habit, yeah.
And most of all thanks to Kae for accepting my challenge and kicking my ass. XD And now Harappa and Cara have a friend! Yaay!