Camel: man your writing just cracks me up! I loved that first shot of Grita rolling up on her motorcycle, that was fucking badass lol. The expressions were great and I love your spot blacks. This was just an all around awesome comic.
Mrpr: This pixel art style is coming along! I think I'd like to see you try some shading with it! I like the expressions, thouggh the colours are big ugly. I would also consider an actual font to make this easier to read. I liked Grita asking what she missed and the cutaway to all the horrors that Void went through over the last year lol. I think I was confused by the gag at the end, prolly could have done without. back to his sow? what does that even mean?
great job dudes!
Klepp vs. Grita The Reaper
Critiques & Comments
# 14
Posted:
Nov 26 2017, 04:12 PM
# 13
Posted:
Nov 21 2017, 11:49 AM
Camel: Love the idea of a dead people court. I'm curious, however, what exactly's gonna happen to Klepp in three weeks?
MrPr: Really likin' the pixely look in your comic. The story was funny as hell, but I have to say that at times I had some difficulty reading the text.
MrPr: Really likin' the pixely look in your comic. The story was funny as hell, but I have to say that at times I had some difficulty reading the text.
# 12
Posted:
Nov 21 2017, 10:21 AM
CAMEL: I stg, I was hearing the theme song for The People's Court while reading this the first time.
I really like the little things that were put into this. The cameos of other dead characters in the courtroom (must be a small case if they could only squeeze six people in), the judge consistently getting Klepp's name wrong, Grita taking this not very seriously because it's dollar shot night...it's wacky and silly and I love it!
MRPR: "DEATH with tits" got a snicker from me. I do dig this lineless approach you're taking with comics these days. Let's see what you can do with different palettes and angle shots!
I really like the little things that were put into this. The cameos of other dead characters in the courtroom (must be a small case if they could only squeeze six people in), the judge consistently getting Klepp's name wrong, Grita taking this not very seriously because it's dollar shot night...it's wacky and silly and I love it!
MRPR: "DEATH with tits" got a snicker from me. I do dig this lineless approach you're taking with comics these days. Let's see what you can do with different palettes and angle shots!
# 11
Posted:
Nov 21 2017, 12:10 AM
Camel: MAAAAAAAN the graphic gritty lining here is SUPER RAD. The motorcycle and the great designed judge especially reaaaally look amazing here with all their details. And I love the splotchy background gradients! And like, storywise, I'm naturally biased towards anything with some good due process in it, so that's great too as far as I'm concerned, a lot of good gags, some quality straight manning.
Mrpr: I'll be honest that I've always felt that like, all of your comics have really lacked some element of quality that makes them, like... easy on my eyes. This comic, I think, actually passes that barrier for me! It's solid! I can't really describe what it has that others don't—maybe it's that there's no humans in this comic, maybe it's that it's lineless, I think most of all it has to do with some improvement in dynamicism because there's a heck of a lot of really good angles in this comic—but I'm super glad to see it! That said, I'm still not big on your humor; I think that's a personal problem, something I can't say is wrong for technical reasons. I mean, at least I can critique the joke at the end on page 5: Take out the last line, and replace it with the "He shoulda never smoked in a gas station." It's probably still not perfect, but that current last line adds nothing other than an explanation for why they left the gas station at all (which might require major revision past a single line to clear up nicely). Seeing the eulogy after he actually dies emphasizes the carelessness and the frivolity of his death.
Mrpr: I'll be honest that I've always felt that like, all of your comics have really lacked some element of quality that makes them, like... easy on my eyes. This comic, I think, actually passes that barrier for me! It's solid! I can't really describe what it has that others don't—maybe it's that there's no humans in this comic, maybe it's that it's lineless, I think most of all it has to do with some improvement in dynamicism because there's a heck of a lot of really good angles in this comic—but I'm super glad to see it! That said, I'm still not big on your humor; I think that's a personal problem, something I can't say is wrong for technical reasons. I mean, at least I can critique the joke at the end on page 5: Take out the last line, and replace it with the "He shoulda never smoked in a gas station." It's probably still not perfect, but that current last line adds nothing other than an explanation for why they left the gas station at all (which might require major revision past a single line to clear up nicely). Seeing the eulogy after he actually dies emphasizes the carelessness and the frivolity of his death.
# 10
Posted:
Nov 20 2017, 10:34 AM
Camel: The court idea you had is just one of the wackiest scenario I've seen on Void and it's awesome !!
*sniff* we'll miss you Klepp. Go enjoy your remaining life.
MrPr: your style is improving with each comic you do, it's really incredible to see the difference !! good beginning for Grita!
*sniff* we'll miss you Klepp. Go enjoy your remaining life.
MrPr: your style is improving with each comic you do, it's really incredible to see the difference !! good beginning for Grita!
# 9
Posted:
Nov 19 2017, 09:19 PM
Well, Klepp we'll miss you.
# 8
Posted:
Nov 19 2017, 07:01 PM
Oh wow the humor was great for both! Scoring this is gonna take some thought! Good job you two!
# 7
Posted:
Nov 19 2017, 06:44 PM
Camel,
This story was actually really great! Klepp made a super good decision bringing her to court! I really enjoyed this comic, and I can't really think of much criticism I have for it, so anyway, congrats on getting this comic done and up!
MRPR,
Imma start with saying your art is actually really pleasant to look at, looking at the thumbnails, I wasn't sure what it was going to be like, but it definitely looks really amazing! I do however think you could really work on your lettering, it hurt my eyes quite a bit to read, and I have no clue what the turkey was saying in the second page. The fourth page also kind of confused me since I really didn't have much of a clue what was going on. But anyway, kudos on getting this to look so nice! Your bright colors look like they'd clash from afar, but they actually look really nice alongside one another!
This story was actually really great! Klepp made a super good decision bringing her to court! I really enjoyed this comic, and I can't really think of much criticism I have for it, so anyway, congrats on getting this comic done and up!
MRPR,
Imma start with saying your art is actually really pleasant to look at, looking at the thumbnails, I wasn't sure what it was going to be like, but it definitely looks really amazing! I do however think you could really work on your lettering, it hurt my eyes quite a bit to read, and I have no clue what the turkey was saying in the second page. The fourth page also kind of confused me since I really didn't have much of a clue what was going on. But anyway, kudos on getting this to look so nice! Your bright colors look like they'd clash from afar, but they actually look really nice alongside one another!
# 6
Posted:
Nov 19 2017, 06:24 PM
Ayyy. Love what you did there! Heh. A court. That is a good one! Love how ya depicted my reaper lady there~ (Oh-somethin' gonna happen to frog boi? Hoo boi...)
# 5
Posted:
Nov 17 2017, 09:32 PM
Whew! My entry's done. I'll do some more polishing before the final day ends!
# 4
Posted:
Nov 11 2017, 07:05 AM
Oh man, I finally get to see the Klepp havin' an adventure!! AND WITH A COOL SKELELADY.
# 3
Posted:
Oct 29 2017, 11:10 AM
Are they gonna bone?
# 2
Posted:
Oct 29 2017, 01:50 AM
powerful badass reaper vs tiny frogman. that's right - the playing field has been evened
# 1
Posted:
Oct 28 2017, 09:22 PM
Ah here we go!
Regular Match
Drawing Time:
2 weeks + 1
Ended:
Nov 26th, 2017
Votes Cast:
18
Page Views:
1416
Winner:
Camel
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Camel: OH WOW I love the shifting tone and writing of your comic, not to mention the amazing rendering and all those little details.
MRPR: How timely. Just in time for thanksgiving. I love Grita's dialog. Some of these panels have fantastic colors, but others I'm not sure would pass a values test.