Invitational Tournament 2010: Round 1 / Miss Chups McGuffin vs. MUNKEI
Critiques & Comments
# 19
Posted:
Aug 6 2010, 06:30 PM
I don't think there's anything I can add that hasn't already been said. You guys know what you need to do so next time do it.
# 18
Posted:
Aug 6 2010, 04:01 PM
thanks for the comments all o yous and sorry for the let down.
ill really try to condense my next comic and ill make it a portrait size this time until im more at ease with the whole process of making sequentialzz.
in all honestly i didnt work as hard or as quick as i could of the whole week making it. although there are other pages i made on paper, my whole submission minus page 2 was done on sunday, which was THE most productive day i had out of the other 6 days even though i never veered my attention away from battling. Speed + Creativity + Finishing ma shite is what im here to learn at this moment in time
but yeah, theres not much to critic on a pile of blue sketches, so ill try my very very best to give yous a real colourfully vivid mess to poke at on the next fight. Win or Lose.
ill really try to condense my next comic and ill make it a portrait size this time until im more at ease with the whole process of making sequentialzz.
in all honestly i didnt work as hard or as quick as i could of the whole week making it. although there are other pages i made on paper, my whole submission minus page 2 was done on sunday, which was THE most productive day i had out of the other 6 days even though i never veered my attention away from battling. Speed + Creativity + Finishing ma shite is what im here to learn at this moment in time
but yeah, theres not much to critic on a pile of blue sketches, so ill try my very very best to give yous a real colourfully vivid mess to poke at on the next fight. Win or Lose.
# 17
Posted:
Aug 6 2010, 07:50 AM
Not bad, not bad.
atomic - blah blah blah poor quality scans/lines/whatever. Regardless, nice effort! I love the jab at the scarves.
Acya - I'm not a fan of including more than one "editor's note" thingy. This was a bit challenging to follow but I guess I'll repeat what the common phase is posted. Quality over Quantity. It is true, bro!
Nice work, you two. You know what to improve on!
atomic - blah blah blah poor quality scans/lines/whatever. Regardless, nice effort! I love the jab at the scarves.
Acya - I'm not a fan of including more than one "editor's note" thingy. This was a bit challenging to follow but I guess I'll repeat what the common phase is posted. Quality over Quantity. It is true, bro!
Nice work, you two. You know what to improve on!
# 16
Posted:
Aug 3 2010, 06:57 AM
Tophat, I don't know how you were accomplishing them, but your lines were thick, pixelated, & gross. I'd be lying if I didn't say I had problems getting through it. My first question is how big were the originals drawn at? And what thickness were the lines drawn at? And did you try to digitally ink over that? I can't tell, but sorry, it's not working. I would definitely recommend finding another method. At the same time, the character you have is detail laden. But there's little to no line variation to help us see that detail. We get these chunky lines running through out & it just looks sloppy. Next time, don't be afraid to use a thinner pencil/pen/digital brush on the inside to show us just how intricate that detail gets.
Another thing, when lettering digitally, it's still best to find a font that suits the line art. And stay consistent with it. The base font you were using was boring & didn't do much to help the overall look.
Also, it's always a good idea to crop or paint over the binding marks if you're scanning out of a sketchbook.
Bam, I was looking forward to yours because I dig your style. And I could kind of see it happening here but there wasn't much here to work with as far as a comic. And I mean I don't think you went totally overboard with story here either & ran out of time like some of the other artists I've seen. But like phil said, shoot for shorter more concise stories.
Another thing, when lettering digitally, it's still best to find a font that suits the line art. And stay consistent with it. The base font you were using was boring & didn't do much to help the overall look.
Also, it's always a good idea to crop or paint over the binding marks if you're scanning out of a sketchbook.
Bam, I was looking forward to yours because I dig your style. And I could kind of see it happening here but there wasn't much here to work with as far as a comic. And I mean I don't think you went totally overboard with story here either & ran out of time like some of the other artists I've seen. But like phil said, shoot for shorter more concise stories.
# 15
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 11:49 PM
OK, seriously everybody, when did number of pages get to be the #1 concern for everybody?! QUALITY > QUANTITY!
Top Hat: Um... how the hell did you scan this? I'm trying not to be a dick to everybody here as I don't want to scare the new folks away, but this is seriously ugly! Scan your stuff at 300 dpi, then shrink it down, perfect quality is guarantied! Other than that, I got a nice chuckle out of your story, so props for that. Clean your shit up though!
Ach: What the hell happened, dude? Seriously, number of pages is not the key to winning a battle here. It's the quality and whether or not you finish what you start. Luckily these aren't deathmatches so you can all keep battling even despite a loss.
Now, I would like to see anybody who defaulted here or didn't finish do a lot better in their next battles, those who lose will have the freedom to challenge anybody they wish to fight! My vote went to Top Hat this round.
Top Hat: Um... how the hell did you scan this? I'm trying not to be a dick to everybody here as I don't want to scare the new folks away, but this is seriously ugly! Scan your stuff at 300 dpi, then shrink it down, perfect quality is guarantied! Other than that, I got a nice chuckle out of your story, so props for that. Clean your shit up though!
Ach: What the hell happened, dude? Seriously, number of pages is not the key to winning a battle here. It's the quality and whether or not you finish what you start. Luckily these aren't deathmatches so you can all keep battling even despite a loss.
Now, I would like to see anybody who defaulted here or didn't finish do a lot better in their next battles, those who lose will have the freedom to challenge anybody they wish to fight! My vote went to Top Hat this round.
# 14
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 04:18 AM
atomic_top_hat: Holy shit, I just saw your comic, You're brilliant.
It's like the colour blue was made for you, man.
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Thanks man but i have to say that THAT was awesome funny stuff. I'd sell an arm, a leg and an eye for your writing skills.
# 13
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 03:52 AM
Atomic_Top_Hat: God dammit, John. How do you write like that? I want to siphon your writing talent somehow. You do really need to work on cleaning up your artwork though. But other than that, the story and execution were quite entertaining, I loved it!
AchYaBam: Disappointing that you didn't get it finished on time. Your sketches do show that you have the potential to do WAY better though. I really dig some of those dynamic action shots, but i lament that some of them are hard to decipher due to the limited detail of the pages. Looking forward to future work from you though, man. I bet you can do amazing stuff!
AchYaBam: Disappointing that you didn't get it finished on time. Your sketches do show that you have the potential to do WAY better though. I really dig some of those dynamic action shots, but i lament that some of them are hard to decipher due to the limited detail of the pages. Looking forward to future work from you though, man. I bet you can do amazing stuff!
# 12
Posted:
Aug 2 2010, 12:28 AM
AchYaBam: I LOVED the first page ESPECIALLY. And the last page. it was cute. The fight was EPIC XD Very clear and to the point
Atomic: Base is right. Kind of grainy. hard on the tired eye, but FUN oh so fun. Scarf jokes. SCARF JOKES. '3'<3
Atomic: Base is right. Kind of grainy. hard on the tired eye, but FUN oh so fun. Scarf jokes. SCARF JOKES. '3'<3
# 11
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 11:12 PM
...What did I even just read!
Atomic: I loved the silly story! It fit rather well. My only issue is your lines are so... grainy? Like you drew them digitally with a pen tool or you scanned your drawings in super harsh black and white. I'm not sure what it is but it makes for a very messy drawing. Still, I could mostly see what was happening, so certainly not a total loss. Good job!
Achyabam: Hey, better dead than defaulting! I loved the fun expressive lines, but I wished you could finish and show us something truly impressive. I hope "Kneel before my bountiful brass bosom!" becomes a catchphrase for her. The poses were well done as well.
Great job guys! Good luck!
Atomic: I loved the silly story! It fit rather well. My only issue is your lines are so... grainy? Like you drew them digitally with a pen tool or you scanned your drawings in super harsh black and white. I'm not sure what it is but it makes for a very messy drawing. Still, I could mostly see what was happening, so certainly not a total loss. Good job!
Achyabam: Hey, better dead than defaulting! I loved the fun expressive lines, but I wished you could finish and show us something truly impressive. I hope "Kneel before my bountiful brass bosom!" becomes a catchphrase for her. The poses were well done as well.
Great job guys! Good luck!
# 10
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 11:00 PM
"Take all our money you bitch!"
Third time tonight I've laughed out loud. Thank you for that.
Third time tonight I've laughed out loud. Thank you for that.
# 9
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 10:45 PM
AchYaBam: Submitted
Not proud of myself :V
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Holy shit, I just saw your comic, You're brilliant.
It's like the colour blue was made for you, man.
# 8
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Aug 1 2010, 10:32 PM
AchYaBam: Submitted
Not proud of myself :V
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I'm sure it will be totally boss.
# 7
Posted:
Aug 1 2010, 09:31 PM
Submitted
Not proud of myself :V
Not proud of myself :V
# 6
Posted:
Jul 28 2010, 11:18 AM
It's time to kick ass and take names you two! And you're all out of names!
# 5
Posted:
Jul 28 2010, 12:35 AM
What an odd little combo. I'm curious to see what you guys do with it. Good luck!
# 4
Posted:
Jul 26 2010, 09:04 AM
AchYaBam: Nice to do batte with yae
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You too.
# 3
Posted:
Jul 26 2010, 03:16 AM
Nice to do batte with yae
# 2
Posted:
Jul 26 2010, 12:58 AM
Welcome to void you two, just remember to do your best, the minimum is a mere 3 pages too! And yes I am going to say this to everybody.
# 1
Posted:
Jul 25 2010, 09:11 PM
Fresh blood!
Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Aug 8th, 2010
Votes Cast:
37
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2197
Winner:
GedTheBedHead
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AchYaBam, see what you can do with a longer deadline because perhaps the one weeker was too tough on you. For the time being, do as the others have said and do thinner lines, use pencil or whatever to build your foundation. At the same time, pick up some anatomy studies and such because even for a cartoon Miss Chups' shoulders are a bit awkward.