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THE INCUBATOR / Re: The Mechanic
« on: Dec 01, 2013, 02:14 PM »You have to host on a site that allows hosting, one of which is not DA. Imageshack, tinypic, snaggy. That kinda thing. Then hit the lil' mona lisa to pop your image directly into your post.
I'm not going to go much into the artwork portion, as I think that things like anatomy can be hashed out by some persons with more experience than me. However, as far as the character herself goes, I'd say your description is a little empty.
What kind of world is she from that we're looking at a talking sheep butler? Why does she need a suit made completely of electrical components--is it a combat suit? Is she a fighter? Regardless of if this is a yes/no, what is her style? Does she like to fight? Tori's profile and images make her out to be human, so why does a human have a sheep butler. In Void, it's all about being creative and having a good time (in my opinion). An interesting, well thought out character will draw in opponents and make things funner for you.
Does she have any sort of powers? If you'd like to count her mechanical prowess as an ability, you could definitely get away with dropping the part about how she has to have all the instructions on an object to do so, give her a proficiency or a supernatural ability to understand inner workings. I'd say that you could push your limits a little more here and flesh her out quite a bit more.